The Ice King SwaSan SS Complete - Page 22

Originally posted by: dimaag

The dp-sanky scene was well crafted with your magical words dear friend. I found it very interesting. Good job dear . And thanks for doing the pm 😆 👍🏼
Another superb chapter.

Originally posted by: NitaMikealson

Thanks for the PM. I liked it, even though it had laksh atleast he is just insecure here not like the show laksh. So it doesn't bother me. Well if only the show laksh inner monologues made me sympathise with him, it would have been good.

Also DP and Sanskaar relationship seems interesting. Can't wait to know everything about the pen drive.

Can't wait for you next update. Pm if possible.

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Saku 🤗

Typed a long reply but page crashed so lost it . Anyway, despite your worries i really enjoyed this part. Your story is so involved and suspenseful with the plot, its very intriguing. I love the SwaSan dynamics and that scene in the car was 👏. Also, DP-Sanskaar interaction and their "takkar" is fab. You have a power of imagery in your writing that makes me look beyond anything stylistic and linguistic, which is usually very hard for me- I want to know what happens next and what i read grips me. I loved the bit for instance about demons falling in love with angels- right up my street and the chess analogies always fascinate me if done properly. Medha set a benchmark I think with a piece she wrote some time ago- don't know if you have read that? This took me to that somewhat, similar analogies but yours has the darker nuances needed for your story! Can't wait for the next part!

Originally posted by: abika

Loved it
Awesome

OMG... I think this part is the soul of your story... now I connected with all the characters in your story.. although I don't like laksh Maheshwari. .I loved the part you described about him. you captured the the real essence of the show. laksh and sanskar have similar needs and all.. you said 100 % true.. I was thinking yes.. this was laksh Maheshwari. . the baby of Maheshwari Mansion. he was like bharatha. who rule the kingdom when Ram go to exile. . actually he is not grey.. but I don't like him. I don't know why.. this update I loved more .. I can understood swara and sanskar. . so I'm more interested to learn sbout laksh and ragini.. their characters are more complex. so interested to read their mind.. I don't say laksh is not loving swara. but for him swara is an asset like his Kingdom. . if loose her.. he would be a failure. this thought rules him. he is little insecure. . I don't say he is greedy. . but has fear of failure. . well written dear... my most favourite update of this story till date... love you for this update. . continue soon

Originally posted by: harshsriti

OMG... I think this part is the soul of your story... now I connected with all the characters in your story.. although I don't like laksh Maheshwari. .I loved the part you described about him. you captured the the real essence of the show. laksh and sanskar have similar needs and all.. you said 100 % true.. I was thinking yes.. this was laksh Maheshwari. . the baby of Maheshwari Mansion. he was like bharatha. who rule the kingdom when Ram go to exile. . actually he is not grey.. but I don't like him. I don't know why.. this update I loved more .. I can understood swara and sanskar. . so I'm more interested to learn sbout laksh and ragini.. their characters are more complex. so interested to read their mind.. I don't say laksh is not loving swara. but for him swara is an asset like his Kingdom. . if loose her.. he would be a failure. this thought rules him. he is little insecure. . I don't say he is greedy. . but has fear of failure. . well written dear... my most favourite update of this story till date... love you for this update. . continue soon

Hi Sakura

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Hi Sakura

Very nice last couple of chapters 😊 I particularly liked your portrayal of the DP--Sansku battle of wills; as well as your delineation of Lucky's character. Your story is coming out as a crackling psychological thriller. 😊 Looking forward to the next updates.

I will be on travel coming week on work and hence might be delayed with my comments on your thread. But I will be reading with great interest as soon as I can. Please keep the pm's coming 😊

I love it how you are giving a backgrounder to each character to understand why at present he/she behaves in a certain manner.You have an amazing command over language one gets immersed while reading.Please update soon and keep up the good work.

Originally posted by: proshomi

I love it how you are giving a backgrounder to each character to understand why at present he/she behaves in a certain manner.You have an amazing command over language one gets immersed while reading.Please update soon and keep up the good work.