Despatches Series Part 3-OS - Letter from Sanskaar to Annapurna - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Shruti🤗,
This one is dedicated to me?! Oh thank you thank you...thank you. I'd like this opportunity to mention that my parents and teachers have a huge hand in shaping me up👏. Oh sorry, thats for award ceremonies isn't it?😆

Scratch the thank you's, as well...I don't want my belan boomeranging back to me.😕

Anyway, now that I have stopped bouncing up and down...I have to quickly tell you what I felt about this letter. This is a version of Annapurna ... steely glint in the eye, and a soft cunning veil over it.

A very biased mother, who knows she loves own flesh and blood above anything else; knows that another child loves her more than his own Ma, and of course..she loves him too...but blood is thicker than water after all.

Of what I know about history, my Mom being a history Professor herself, the childless Ruqaiyya begum, Salim's step-mother and Akbar's Chief Consort,was the one who wanted Salim(jahangir) back. His own mother Jodha seemed not to have a lot of hand in getting the prodigal son back. Her love story with Akbar is hardly authentic🤢. It was a marriage done to gain power over Rajputs...and she was the Queen Mother, not even his Chief Queen. You see, she was a Hindu. She was respected yes, but never influential..because the Court already suspected her as alien to their interests.Ruqaiyya also bought Shah Jahan up. Noor jahan happened to be one of her hand maidens before jahangir set eyes upon her.😕 Seriously, its in Wikipedia. Look it up.

Don't think I resent you for your innate favouritism of Lucky in particular Maa. I know why I am given more to bear- because I can! We are in that sense kindred spirits- we don't need others to acknowledge us and give us special treatment. We know our own worth deep down and we also know that we are survivors, I just tend to be lot more direct and perhaps brutal in my approach than you. Essentially though, we both know what must be done and we will do it. I know that you get that about me, just as I do about you. When I swore in the temple the other day, the tears in your eyes and the exact words you used, clearly told me that you knew I was lying. That is why you promised me retribution if I was. I also know, that no matter what excuses Mom made on my behalf yesterday, you will collect this debt at the time that suits you best. You also know that I will pay my due, no matter what it costs. I am sure I can predict what form of recompense will be demanded, judging my Lucky's recent behaviour, but that is for another day. My tragedy is that you want Lucky to be your Jahangir, not me, and you will not stop trying, despite knowing the futility of these attempts

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This was the crux of it all. Brilliant.👏👏👏


Your writing as ever, was polished and nice. this was frank and finger-in-the-eye...and you wrote it like the lawyer you are.👏

Love,
medha.

P.S. Who's next? I want it to be RP. Please make him have something interesting in his character. Save him. Silence is killing him😆.
Edited by medhasarkar - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12
Again the emotions at its best
Shruti u are fab writer *bows down*
The relation between sanskar and Annapurna was depicted like an art. They both are torn beet blood bond and soul bond.
This was the bestest ever OS I ve read. Nd m glad I read such beautiful thing.
Loved it dil se
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Shruti this was the best letter among the 3 you wrote 👏
*bows down to you*
What an outstanding writer you are.
You portrayed their relationship so accurately and perfectly.
I had tears in my eyes while reading this, this shows how splendidly and magnificently you wrote this.
Thank you for writing this masterpiece 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: inlieu

This was the best of the three letters and I'm pretty sure this is exactly what Annapurna did to Sanskaar! I almost had tears in my eyes because of the beauty of your writing, and every word felt like it really came out of Sanksaar's bleeding heart.

Thank you for this wonderful gift, my dear!

Thank you so much!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules

This OS, I think, captures the relationship between Annapurna and Sanskaar. This was very well written. Is the next letter going to be to Swara? If you don't mind, what is the concept of the story that you are planning to write soon? The one that you talked about at the beginning of this fic.

Anyway I loved this and I am eagerly waiting to read more.


Thanks so much for reading and liking. I was going to write the next one to DP but people seem to be requesting RP, so I'm now thinking on that :). I want to also write to Shomi, Swara will probably come last as I want to see how she behaves next week! Of course I don't mind! I love you guys asking. See I have the very early beginnings of an idea to write something which includes both mothers, suju and AP and trace some of their back story but am still working it out in my head. Does it sound interesting especially if I combine it with SwaSan?
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Very frank and direct. From one strong person to another. Where he held back a lot in the previous two, finally here he gets to say exactly what is on his mind as is. That is the beauty of this letter, of his relationship with his badi ma.


Off topic: kingmaker, collecting debts...have u read ASOIAF?

Thanks S. Yes I wanted him to be more direct as I think it suited this. Haha! You've spotted my GoT obsession? Totally obsessed with them- read each of the books, all part of the collection both hard copy and kindle and also watch the to show religiously. I was going to ask you before about your IF name! When writing re kingmaker I was totally thinking of tywin Lannister!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: anu91

Best best best...

Awe...Loved it so much dear...


Thanks so much Anu
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: misaki

I have a new favourite!😆 I honestly think this is the best of the lot! This in no way is supposed to take away the brilliance of the previous two, but only emphasize how mind blowing the current one is. Honestly, I think It might even be unfair to compare the three.🤓 This letter is on a whole different level with the approach. The raw honesty within the letter gave me goosebumps . No kidding!


I have always known and perceived Annapurna as someone who definitely loves both Sanskaar and Lux but clearly knew who her favourite was.🤢

Frankly speaking , I haven't watched the episodes where Sanskaar was a person with mental disorder, so I confess that I haven't really given Annapurna's character much thought before this. I haven't watched how and why she managed to get Sanskaar back into the Maheshwari Mansion. But of course I knew about it . I have come to realize how I have been a complete idiot to not have realized it earlier. This relationship between Sanskaar and his Badi Maa.🤔( I never have before disregarded something as huge as this. I now wonder why?😕)

But first thing's first, I loved the way you have not only brought out Sanskaar's relationship with his Badi Maa but also put in the effort to brin g out the contrast between both the ladies and mothers of the house. I am falling more in love with Sanskaar (which obviously would mean your writing) as i re-read it. The blatant honesty with which the letter is being written makes me want to cry out of happiness.( I don't think I'm making sense anymore , even to myself😕.) Forgive me, I might have run out of words😆You have made it so very difficult for me to give you feedback. I will however try and do my best. So here goes nothing.

Firstly, when you talk about the bubble that Maheshwaris clearly live in, you not only manage to talk about the truth but also clearly define both the women. Suju is more heart than brains. I think that's probably the only way I could put it politely.😆 Annapurna however as you have so phenomenally and in detail managed to explain, is more like Jodha than Panna. "I don't see you fully as Panna Dhai is because whilst you have the mettle to do whatever is necessary, you would still hold back from the final sacrifice if that was demanded in the form of your son Lakshya. However, should the blood that must be split was say, mine, your hand would drive that knife in deep, even if it will sever an artery within yourself at the same time. It is just the way it is." Sanskaar and Annpurna are both made from the same mold. Both can clearly see, accept, love and understand each other more than any one else. Which I think is especially why Annapurna cannot help but love him the way she does. (The historic touch did not take away anything from what you wanted to convey, in fact it added so much more. History has always been my favourite subject!) Another one that manages to talk about this very same thing is, "the hand of steel must be cloaked in velvet". Beautifully put. The cloak that she has donned would not be obvious to the the eyes which do not wish to(or can't)see past it. And Sanskaar is definitely not one of them. Which explains the honesty that comes easily with such deep understanding. Which you also cleverly managed to correlate to the show by citing a situation as an example. "When I swore in the temple the other day, the tears in your eyes and the exact words you used, clearly told me that you knew I was lying. That is why you promised me retribution if I was." 👏

This part, " You and I both know that I am actually the son you deserve. I know you crave not for a Salim, but a later Badshaah Jahangir, and I say this without the slightest degree of conceit- but that son is not Lucky and certainly not Adarsh Bhaiya. No- only yours truly has your mettle and can fulfil that role.", and My tragedy is that you want Lucky to be your Jahangir, not me, and you will not stop trying, despite knowing the futility of these attempts", I think clearly explains why Annapurna goes into her defense mode to protect her son so often and ignore everything/everyone when it comes to him. She knows and he knows she knows. Easily my favorite part of all the 3 letters.

"I know you don't need this forgiveness but the mother in you that loves me and wishes she could love me as much as her "real" son(s) probably does crave this reassurance. It is not a sign of weakness in you, never that, but its a gift from me, freely given to the woman I wish could have been my mother instead of Lucky's. These lines I think made me see Annapurna and Sanskaar's relationship in a completely different light. A mother who cannot help but be consumed by her love for own son and a son who understands that he will never be at par with his sibling(to his favourite mom) who he truly believes doesn't deserve to be her son. I don't know how I missed it! I'm not really happy about this fact, but it does make sense on so many levels now that I think about it. Which is why it has to be my second favorite part of the letter.

Brilliant stuff!👏

Oh I forgot about this one, "I know you will hate to hear this, but his "soul child" is actually Swara- just as I am yours!" I completely agree. Phew! That was some task.😆 I hope I have at least tried to make it worthy of the post.
I obviously have my doubts about the creatives having put in that much thought into their relationship though.😆 But I would be ecstatic if I get to see at least 10% of your analysis of Annapurna's character being shown on the show.You now have a very big phanka in me. 🤗

OMG! That has got to be my longest reply ever! 😕 I hope all of it makes as much sense to you as it did to me.


Geetha 🤗 seriously I'm so happy to read your reply, you have made me feel fantastic so a huge thank you for that. The fact that you read so intently and took so much time to really consider and detail all your well reasoned views is so sweet! Your being too kind to me by the way but I am truly pleased that you liked it so much! And yes you totally felt each emotion I wanted to bring out both for Sanskaar and AP. I find AP very fascinating just as Viji does and I feel again that there's too much wasted potential with the way the CVs are currently taking the track.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sakura24

From the resent 3 letters I don't think I'll have to say that this one is the best. It has a depth to it the other two did not, but then again this is AP we are talking about, the one who shares the deepest connection with Sanskaar, surely he would bare his wounds for her, although she would not heal them.

I feel his pain deeply, he deserves more from every one of his relations.
You have nailed it to perfection, need I say more? Each word a knock in the heart, touching and truly awesome!!!


Thank you Sakura. Yes indeed this one was deliberately deeper as I am trying to structure the letters according to the recipient. So glad you liked it!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: suhasini2727

Pure excellence 👏👏👏...

No enough words to express...
Great job.

Thank you Suhasini:)

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