NaiRan OS : Maanga Hai Tujhe Rabse

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Hello everyone! I didn't think I'll be back so soon but here I am! All thanks to the tremendous feedback I got! Thankyou all for your love. Now without much ado, let's begin!
Disclaimer : The storyline may seem unconvincing, out of no where, exaggerated or over the top. But I couldn't think of a better plot to frame this scene. May be over dramatic too, and I'm sorry in advance for poor handling of thought. But the feelings are pure and original so enjoy!❤️

...In Celebration of the fantastic 100 we've completed! Way to go!🥳


Maanga Hai Tujhe Rabse


Karan sat at the edge of the bed, nervously clutching the bedsheet within his fingers. Tears roughly trickled down his cheeks and stained them sore as his allergy acted in full swing. He was mentally unstable, in a dilemma. How he wish he wouldn't had passed that spot this morning :

It was a bright, breezy morning. Karan was leaving the house for his music classes scheduled at 9. It was then, when he heard Bhai & Bhaabhi talking about their love story.
"Tumhe Pata Hai Kunal, sagaai ke baad, mujhe har jagah tum dikhate the. Garden Mein, books Mein, kitchen Mein"
"Meghna, shayad isi ko Pyaar kehte Hai"

Karan was taken aback. Try as he may, he couldn't brush off the thought that he too visualised Naina more than often. It was like she was in his mind all the time. Infact, even now he was thinking about her. She wasn't there in the house, had gone to give an exam but all he could think, worry or feel was her. Baffled, he locked himself into the room and started thinking on this.

No no no! This could not be. He couldn't love her, she didn't deserve him. She deserved much more than a helpless, ill, vulnerable and jobless husband. How he wished he would've listened to his Maa and had started working. Maybe then he could've proudly accept her as his wife. But now, he neither had the will to start something nor the audacity to accept her.

He got up in a forceful trance and started packing her things. No, she couldn't stay here. She couldn't end up with his kind of person her whole life.

It was afternoon by now, Naina had returned from her test. After greeting her Di & Maa, she turned straight towards the Room to share her great exam news with her best friend of all times. Bubbling, she pushed the door open but the sight that she saw just scared the wits out of her. Karan, in a devastating scene was sitting In a corner. There were clothes all over the floor and bed - her belongings were strewn in the room. Inspite of being a sunny afternoon, it seemed that light had turned away from the room, leaving it in submerging darkness.

"Karan...", She barely uttered a word. In a flash of lightning, he got up and spoke : "Accha tum aa Gayi Naina. Aisa Karo, jaldi see apna saaman pack Karo aur chali jao yahan se. Dadu aur Maa ki chinta mat Karna, main unhe manaa loonga. Sab soch liya hain Maine... Sab soch liya Hai". If someone else would've seen him in that circumstance, he would've declared him a morbid human but Naina was different. She could see his agony and pain and restlessness and fear. When he stepped a bit forward, she could see his face was sore. She tried to take a step towards him but he fiercely stopped her.

"Aaj nahi Naina. Ab kabhi nahi"

"Par kyun..?", She cried, heartbroken. "Agar tumhe kabhi Bhi, Ek second ke liye Bhi mere baare Mein accha socha Hai, Toh chali jao yahan se. Bass"

"Ab tumhe kaise bataun Naina ke so second ke liye Bhi agar tum yahan ruki toh mujhe tumse... Tumse Pyaar ho jaayega", he thought helplessly.

Naina hung her head and started packing off her stuff. It was decided that sharp at midnight, Naina will leave the house forever.


The day wore off slowly. Naina remained in her room for most the day. She certainly didn't want to face her Di. Several times she'd come to ask if she was okay and she'd dramatised a headache, thereby getting an excuse to not come out. The evening came and went, the sun had set down with the last rays escaping the sky in a jiffy. After a long long wait, it was midnight. Karan had kept himself away from her all day and finally, he came to see her off. He picked up her luggage and down they descended in heavy steps. Naina still had wet tears rolling her her cheeks and Karan's expression was beyond description. He told the driver to drop her to Boondi and without looking back even once, he forcefully shut the door. He must be out of his mind, cause he didn't realise how he unconsciously made his way to the storeroom.

Memories started hitting him hard. How stubbornly she'd asked him to not sleep there. How he'd lied to her and how she had started sleeping there out of anger. Their friendship, their handshake, their journey. And then, like a sparkling stream of consciousness, hit upon him a fact. Naina had told him that she had no where to go. This was her house and he had removed her from her house. He got up and stroke his hair. What a grave mistake! What if...

Just then, his phone rang. It was Naina. But the person was someone else.
"Hello, yeh number jiska Hai..."

He snapped the call. He didn't have the guts to hear anything. He ran out of the courtyard, onto the road. Running wildly and shouting 'Naina Naina'. What an immature freak he'd been. He should be the one leaving the house but instead, he'd asked her to leave.

He looked for any signs of accident or something but it was too dark. His eyes were tired and swollen.

"Please Bhagwan. Mujhe Meri Naina wapas kardo. I promise main kabhi uspar gussa nahi hounga. Kabhi use koi takleef nahi doonga. Please please", he wept on the road. And as an answer to a divine, prayer. A sobbing sound approached him from behind.

He turned around his back to find her standing there, absolutely alright, except the tears in her eyes.

"Naina Naina, I'm so sorry. Mujhe aisa nahi karna chahiye tha, main Bhi kitna pagal...", And before any one of them could make any sense, Karan clutched her in a tight hug. He wouldn't let her go anytime now, not even in his dreams. He didn't even care that his body touched hers. All he knew was that he'd asked for an angel his whole life and now she was here, with him, in his arms.

He promised her that he would never let her go again. He promised her to fight out his disease for himself, her and them as a team. In the shadows of a dim streetlight, walked away two souls, strengthened and in love.

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Cheers,
Mahi❤️

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Posted: 8 years ago
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wow .. its beautiful, emotional , realization of love...we can feel the karan's pain in real
loved it😛 u are very classy writter ⭐️👏
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Mahi that was awesome . . . . I could literally feel karan's agony and pain . . . . I am speechless . One of the best os I have read . . . . The best part was the last. . . . Tight hug . . . . I could relate to the os. U have penned it down so beautifully . . . It was worth the wait . . . . Best gift mahi. . Keep it up. . . Waiting for the next one. . . . ! ! ! !
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Wow Mahi just loved d OS..
You are a brilliant writer 👏
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Wow! What a way to celebrate the 100 epis. Too magical... thanks so much.
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Oh, I loved your gift to us... I most certainly can imagine a similar situation when Karan will realise his love for his Naina
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A terrifically penned absolutely adorable one shot. Need i say more? 😉
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Wonderful OS!!loved it!!please do write more such amazing stories!!
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So um I already knew this was going to be really amazingly good but SHIT WOMEN YOU BLEW ME AWAY ONCE AGAIN! Sigh my friend is so talented.

I loved it beyond words. It was so relatble to Karans character yet it had something weve all dreamt off. Karan expressing his love

Please write more!! I swear your writing gives me life!

FROM YOUR ADORABUBBLES
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Originally posted by: -adorabubbles-

So um I already knew this was going to be really amazingly good but SHIT WOMEN YOU BLEW ME AWAY ONCE AGAIN! Sigh my friend is so talented.

I loved it beyond words. It was so relatble to Karans character yet it had something weve all dreamt off. Karan expressing his love

Please write more!! I swear your writing gives me life!

FROM YOUR ADORABUBBLES


*Catches you in air*
Don't get blown over 😆

Yes, I want an intense, die hard confession. And I trust the CVs for it 😛

Thankyou brah!🤗

Not too sure but I'll write :)

Lub you. Muah.

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