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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: Ramyagirish

Hi wonderful but a small request if u can write it fully in English it would b grt. Though I do understand Hindi am certainly not proficient... .. I loved the altered senario.

Thanks for reading and commenting 😃actually this is my first fic, so i get pretty excited when I read comments...
I will stick to english as much as possible, but convos will still be in hindi...may be the next fic I ewwill write completely in english "this is already started"
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 4
The tiger had been following Yudhishthhir and Duryodhan for a long time now. They say man eaters are very cunning and these two warriors so mentally disturbed and lost that they didn't even feel the tigers presence. Yudhishthir broke out his reverie of thoughts when his horse tumbled a little, the fog had intensified. They were riding near a pond now, their horses were also tired. "Duryodhan" Yudhishthir called, startling him out of his thoughts "tum ashwon ko jal paan karwa do main agni ka prabandh karke aata hun, mujhe in vano ki abhigyata tumse zyaada hai mai raasta khoj lunga, tum yahi pratiksha karo" "Jee thhik hai, yudhi...bhra..sam...thik hai" not feeling sure how to adress him now that in his own mind he was confused that, he was his brother or his enemy... Yudhishthir went to look for fire wood and glitter stones...Duryodhan let the horses drink water, after a long drink suddenly the horses acted up, they being animals felt the tigers presence. Duryodhan was patting his horses back suddenly and when the horse threw up his legs his sword fell from his hand, and before he could register the tiger leapt on him, he rolled over to avoid the tigers grasp but before he could pick is gada the tiger again leapt at him duryodhan made a run for it but he fell again this time his foot got trapped in a hedge. The tiger approached him slowly relishing his prey while Duryodhan struggled to free his leg, but when the tiger took a few steps back to leap sheer terror ceased him. He had never been in this kind of a situation and his brain just couldn't. Adrenaline was pumping through his viens seeing his death in front of him. The tiger leapt at him, but suddenly a dark figure came in front of him and in a fraction of a second a javelin went through the tigers throat to the back. When Duryodhan registered anything a strangled sound came from his throat. Standing between him and sure death was Yudhishthir, the tiger still pierced on his javeline. Yudhishthhir threw the tiger aside and lit a fire torch by cloth and tree branch and pegged it on the ground. "Duryodhan" he asked kneeling in front of him "tum thhik ho?" "Haan...haan" Duryodhan replied still breathing heavily. "Aap toh ghayal hai" he suddenly said spotting a wound on Yudhishthir's chest, probably the tiger had set his claws there. "Main thhik hun Duryodhan" he said "humein yaaha se chalna chahiye thhori dur ek per hai jaha hum aaj raat rukenge itni dhund mein hum aagey nahi bar sakte." "Jee...Bhratashree" he said there was no more confusion in his mind, the man who could take on death for him like this was not his enemy, cannot be. He was the one who wanted to fight, they never did. But now even he did not want to fight, may be they could start anew like brothers. As he dislodged his leg, Yudhishthir helped him to his feet, he did not seem to have even notice the jargon "bhrata" from Duryodhan. And mounting there horses the marched forward.

I know guys that this is really short but I have physics test tomorrow, will update soon pls read and comment guys.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33
Amazing..the story is becoming interesting day by day..., i always wanted to see a different ending of mahabharat...where duryodhana realize that pandavas are not his enemy and this war dont happen at all,..now because of you...i can read this interesting ff
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34
Amazing!👏 The story is sooo interesting!😊 I want to know what will happen to Shakuni😲
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: ShreejataD.

Amazing!👏 The story is sooo interesting!😊 I want to know what will happen to Shakuni😲

Just wait and watch dear he is one of those characters who will still play the villain...thanks for.ypur review
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36
interesting chapter😃
yudhisthir saving duryodhan from a tiger is nice😊
finally he realised yudhisthir is not his enemy❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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A short and sweet update!!

This part reminds me of the time when Arjun saved Duryodhan from the gandharvas and he was even guilty of his behaviour...but still fate made them end up as enemies😒

All the best for your physics test 👍🏼

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 5
Nakul's fore arm had started to paralyse now, his nose bled. He knew no one would come this way as he slowly slept in the lap of death. But he wanted to live, live to see his son grow up, to apologise to his brother Karn, to hug him for the first time, to tell him how much he loved him. A sob escaped him, his thoughts were a jeopardy. He remebered their forest days so carefree, so much better than the palace, he remembered gurukul, Yudhishthir who had always taken care of them, loving doting mata Kunti the faint image of mata madri, strong brother Bheem whom had always pranked, and who had bullied him at times but all in that good loving way, his wife, his son everything came back to jim in a rush. He had waited for long. But now he had almost no hope left, he had almost given up. That's when he felt someone touching his forhead and checking his breath, "Nakul" he called, "Nakul". Nakul recognised the voice, it was Dushyasan
.Dushyasan had come to collect some more firewood, when he saw a lonely figure on near a hedge. He was quite alarmed at the thought who he was. As he approached him, he saw it was Nakul. May be even a day before he would have left him to die, but now he remembered Duryodhan's instructions, we have to work with each other. And he himself , now seeing them in this mental condition was realising that they were also human like them. Mamashree had always made them look as enemy but now in their sorrow they werent any different. He started coaxing Nakul out of his semi delirium. "Nakul" he said "yeh kaisa hua? Kya main tumhari sahayata kar sakta hu? Iska upchar kya hai mujhe batao mai sahayata karta hun.." Nakul summoning up all his strength said "wo dur jo podha hai, kaaton ko tor kar usse nikalne wala ras mujhe pila dijiye, aur uske patte ghao pe rakhiye, shighra mere paas adhik samay nahi hai" Dushyasan rushed to the bush and plucked a branch hastily, in the process his hand grabbing the thorns and cutting itself, but he never noticed it. He rushed back to Nakul, put the leaved on his wounds. Then he crushed the thorns in his bare hands, and let nackul suck the nectar, in the process making the gash deeper. Nakul regained conciousness within seconds, his mind cleared and he realised that a Kaurav had saved him. "Dhanyavad" he said half gratefully, half guiltily "Parantu tumne mujhe kyun bachaya?" "Pata nahi" Dushyasan answered truthfully. "Chal paoge?" He further asked, Nakul nodded in yes. He supported Nakul's body on his and they walked towards the camp.
Back in the Kaurava camp, Aswathhama was having a lengthy discussion with Shakuni. Shakuni understood that, his nephew is out of his hands now, Karn had seen to that now by being injured. But he still vowed to destroy Hastinapur, and he will by using the power hungry Ashwathhama. They decided to consolidate their position by teaming up with other kings, and Ashwathhama was writing those letters. Shakuni stood outside staring at the rising smoke from the Pandava camp. "Shukh samet lo kuruvanshio" he thought "Mahabharat ka yudh ho ya na ho, mai tumhe tabah karke hi chhorunga, shukh smaet lo kyunki bohot shighra dukh aane wale hain" and he laughed devilishly.

Yudhishthir and Duryodhan camped near the tree. There was no tent, they used their angavastras as sheets. The tree was near the river. After the fire has been lit,Yudhishthir took a piece of cloth dipped it in water and wrapped some stones and after heating it on fire he came to Duryodhan. "Pair dikhao aapna" he said. Duryodhan obeyed. Yudhishthir started compressing his ankle and foot sole. "Yeh aap kya.." Duryodhan started feeling awkward, he was not used to people caring for him like this. "Aapko bhi toh ghav laga hai uska upchaar kar lijiye pehle" Duryodhan tried to divert him "Aap kahen to main aushadhi laga deta ho, aap bataiye kaun si buti laani hai." he offered, seeing that the cloth tied around his chest was now even redder. "Baad mein" Yudhishthir said. "Aap mere charnon ko..." Duryadhan tried again "Mujhe apna das bana sakte ho bhare sabha mein" Yudhishthir cut him short"aur aaj tumhara upchar karne par tumhe sharminda lag raha hai" Duryodhan fell silent hearing this. Though he had accepted that they were no more enemies but he obviously hadn't made any descisions about apologies. After so long enemity the mind does take time to come in terms with these. Yudhishthir finished compressing the leg in silence. He then went ton the rever washed his woud and packed it with medicinal weeds. He sat doen on the ground "So jao Duryodhan" he said "mai jaaga hua hun" Duryodhan protested and offered to stay up. "So jao, tumhe nidra ki awasakta hai" this time it was a order. And Duryodhan, probably for the first time in his life, promptly obeyed.


GUYs sorry I know I am posting short updates, but pls consider the fact that I do post regularly. The Arjun-Vrisasena convo will be in the next chap. Actually I have a few commitments with studies this whole month so updates will be short😭 but regular😃. Also I am thinking of changing the topic of this thread...so suggest good titles for my fanfic pls.

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Edited by livelyandlovely - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: Ankita.11

A short and sweet update!!


This part reminds me of the time when Arjun saved Duryodhan from the gandharvas and he was even guilty of his behaviour...but still fate made them end up as enemies😒

All the best for your physics test 👍🏼

Thanks dear, the test was good. Thanks for your review...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
Hi its fantastic. But wat happened to nakul? Did i miss it some where. By d way where is Krishna? And how must draupadi feel now. Am glad u r bringing abt a lovely change. All d best.

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