~~KaYu OS - Unsolicited Blessings~Part 3 Added Pg5 - Page 4

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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: ---Anu---

Riti...this was just so emotional, heart wrenching..😭 If only there was such a scene in ⭐️B (it would have added to the list of distortions, but it would be a good one as well). Aham and the actor who played Yudi in that, would have nailed it... But I dare not imagine such scenes in this foresaken show.. this Karna would need buckets...and it would have us puke in our buckets! 😆

Anyway, I loved the end scene the most... Yudi looking at Karna's feet and Karna later giving blessings after Yudi turns around...It was marveluos. U just nailed it! Kuddos!! 👏

Thank you dear😊. I too can only imagine Aham and StarYudi.. though I like SonyYudi as well😳but SonyKarna in no way..😆
Thanks for mention of last scene😳.. I am going to add one more part to this OS.. since one of member suggested yudi remembering this scene after karna's truth is revealed😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#32
Beautiful Riti...
Indeed Karna's position is so heart-wrenching in the war...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: amritat

Beautiful Riti...

Indeed Karna's position is so heart-wrenching in the war...

Thanks Amrita😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Note- Added this coz one reply by nimmu96 so thanks😊 as it made me think that my OS was incomplete.
Part 3
There were mourning screams and cries being heard everywhere. Widows and orphans of those who martyred displayed their heartfelt emotions presenting a really moving picture for any onlooker. They all had gathered to perform water rites for those left them after disastrous war.
At a distance from there, he watched and felt the pain in those cries tearing him apart. What he lost and what he gained, it was difficult to assess .Even though Yudhisthir had won the war, he was a defeated man standing with head held in shame and remorse.
Yudhisthir had stayed back after his brothers and Mother Kunti left from river shore where they did water rites of their kin and one name in those prayers was of his elder brother whose existence he had just got to know and tragedy was that very existence was no more.
He was feeling worn out after crying out his heart out on the loss and cursing his mother for fate of her first born. He felt like someone snatched away his soul and teared it apart into thousand pieces and what remained was a dead man watching his life slowly going away. It was hard to accept for him that just a day ago he was rejoicing his own elder brother's death as they knew victory was certain once Karna was gone. Before his death, he had spared Yudhisthir's life. He recounted the events at battlefield when he was on the very edge of Karna's aim. They say that he never misses any aim. But he missed that day. Was it only his promise to their mother or his brotherly love? Unanswered questions bothering Yudhisthir even more this time.
Why Mother? Why? ... He barely whispered to himself.
He looked back in time at one such memory of a night between him and his brother. The night where he actually felt he had him by his side as his Jyesth. He could now comprehend each emotion that he saw in Karna's eyes, every bit of it... Yudhisthir now knew that Karna had known the truth just before the war.
He recalled his words to his elder brother I have always looked up to you as my elder brother, now every emotion that Karna felt could be felt by him too. He had often wondered what made Karna stay with him that night. He wished Karna would have just embraced him once that night. They both would have cried at their fate together. He would have given everything up for his Jyesth perhaps that is the reason Karna never revealed to him. He looked at the setting sun near horizon with many complaints. Sun appeared gloomy that evening, it was slowly disappearing among those clouds beneath.
Ahh Jyesth, I wish I too had known.. I would have touched those feet that night...I wish you would have held me in your arms like your child. With those words aloud, he bend down on his knees as Sun filled the sky with its last glorious cry ..
You held my hand when I was torn
Oh brother, you took my guilt along...
I tried to be a father for my younger borns
That Canopy is what my whole being longed
When I was crushed between right and wrong..
You broke into that comforting song...
..Deeds of your kind heart will never be forlorn...
..You gave me a new life my mother's first born..
As I feel you again in that breaking dawn
I will find your precious blessings along!
Edited by riti4u - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35
forgive me for weird indentation🤔
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36
I didn't know another part was coming!
But it was a pleasant surprise and very very touching indeed. Those last poetic lines were beautiful! Amazing! 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow!!! Thank you, thank you, thank you so much for this!!! That poem was the icing on the cake! Poor Yudi. He was so torn apart by the revelation. And the way he remembers Karna is really heart wrenching. 😭 . Thank you once again for this Ritima. 🤗.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
Hi Ritima, thanks for pm..I read all 3 parts and I must say don't evr think f giving up on writing.. U hv picked my 4rite pair as I alws feel yudi hd his doubts abt karna(plz don't ask for citation.. Just gut feeling😲)...karna wud hv been wonderful brother to him..yudi was devastated after knowing d truth n ur poem says it all...Thanks a lot for giving us amazing moment btwn these lost brothers..😭 Will b looking for ur next write up dear..do pm me👍🏼
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39
Riti, this really made me really speechless!!! And that poem, touching to its full-stop.😊 Great writing.👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
Riti ma! wowww darling..🤗that was so excellent!
first time i am reading your work..that was amazing dear.. ur clean language..perfect words which described the emotions.. well its a whole package..
I loved this karna..that sooo ! iam speachless 😭
I am standing against my own!! those words of karna made me to 😭
the moment they apart..yudishtir's impulse to touch karna's feet and karna's silent blessings was very very emotional..
take this tight hug and kiss darling..
a great drithrastra alingan

keep writing ritima..and don't forget to pm me!

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