Lakshmila TS: broken anklet updated in page 2

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hai. Friends. This is a TS on our beautiful pair Lakshmila. Hope u all like this. Please bear with my Hindi and sorry for any mistakes.
part1. In page 1.
Part 2 in page 2.

Part 1:

Lakshman is sitting under a tree near their ashram in Mithila. He is thinking of what just happened near the lake. ...he opened his right hand and looked at the anklet he got near the lake after she left from there with her sisters. It reminded him of her fearstricken face and the way she looked at him while leaving with that neelkamal he gave her. He was so frightened seeing her in danger. He experienced some strange feelings which he could not describe. He just gazed at he anklet lovingly.
L: sundar hai. Aap ki bhati!!..😊
As Lakshman is lost in his thoughts,ram came calling him.
R:Lakshman...
Lakshman quickly hid his hand behind his uttariye ..
R: Kya kar rahe hoon. .? Bhojan ka samay hogaya chalo!
L: ji bhaiyya aata hoon aap jayiye.
As ram left, he sighed off relivingly.
L: bhaiyya ne nahi dekha😊. Urmila bhojan lekar aati hongi. Mei ye payal unhe lautanga..
He took his hand out but saw the anklet got struck into his necklace. He tried to remove it but it is not coming.
L: aap ka Payal bhi hum se door nahi hona chahte hai..
He kept trying in vain.
L: kitne jiddi hai. Avem Urmila ki tarah.
Suddenly ram called him again and in a hurry he pulled it forcely and it broke into two pieces.
L: Kya Kiya mai me?😲 Exclaimed in shock
He kept the broken pieces in his pouch and went to ram quickly..
Lakshman saw Sita bringing food for them instead of Urmila.
L:Kya hua? Urmila kyu nahi aaye? Ve Swasth to hai na?
He began worrying about Urmila.
S: devarji kaha kho gaye hai. Bhojan kijiye!
L: ji bhabhi. Aap bhojan lekar aaya. ... Urmi...
He shut his mouth As ram looked at him seriously..
Sita smiled at the brothers and said.
S: ji Urmila kuch dhoondh rahi hai. Is karan Mei aaya.
R: Kya hua sitae koi samasya?
S: nahi Dashrath Nandan. Uske Payal kahi kho Gaya ..vahi dhoond rahi hai..
L: Payal?😲
S: ji us ko athdyadhik Priya hai ye Payal. Pitaji ne diya tha. Bahut dhukhi hai unhe khokar...
Lakshman felt very bad and is angry on himself for being so careless.
L: aaj vo meri karan dhukhi. hai. Kya kardiya mai ne?😕😕
Ram noticed Lakshman behaviour and asked him.
R: Kya hua ? Tum Itni chintit kyu hoon?
L: ji kuch nahi bhaiyya.
R: Lakshman.. Mujhe nahi batavungi ?
L: bhaiyya. Agar hum se kisi ka priya vasthu Thooth gaya...bhool se. To hum me Kya karna chahiye?
Ram got to know what is bothering his brother and smiled at him ...
R: hum ko kshma mangne chahiye. ,
L: avem ve Kshama nahi kiyato?🥱

R: to Hume aise hi vast hu unke bhet. me dekar skhma mangne chahiye said ram smiling to his little brother.
Lakshman liked the idea. And thanked ram and hugged him.
R: vaise tum ye Sab kyu pooch rahe hoon?😉
L: ji ji vi bhaiyya kuch bhi nahi. ..bas aise..

Lakshman wanted to buy new anklets but he don't know where to go. It was just a few days before they arrived Mithila he did not see much. So he thought of asking Sita to help him. But how. .? He got the way and went to ram.





TO BE CONTINUED...




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Posted: 9 years ago
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Good one :)
Continue soon ^-^
-kriti
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Wonderful👏
waiting for the next part
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Superb Dear
You really come up with very innovative plots and storylines👏
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LOVEDDD ITTT ❤️
Updatee Soon ! #CantWait

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Awesome start :)
Superb :)
Continue soon :)
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Amazing 😆
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Hai. Thanks for ur reviews. And sorry for late update. 😊
PART 2:
Lakshman went to ram excitedly.😊
Ram looked at his little brother and asked him..tum ko kuch Kehna hai Lakshman?😊
Lakshman wondered how his brother always read his thoughts and asked him ..
L: bhaiyya. Hum Mithila dekhne chalte hai!acha lagega na!
R:😉 kyu Lakshman. Achanak tum ko ye icha kyu huyi?
L: kuch nahi bhaiyya. Aise hi. Hum bhabhi ko bhi lekar chalte hai!
Ram wondered what is running in his brother mind but he could not deny him so agreed..
Lakshman then went to Sita and asked her..
L: bhabhi. Kya aap hum ko Mithila nahi dikhayenge?mai avem bhaiyya Mithila dekhna chahte hai.
S: ji Devarji. Avasya. Paranthu ?
L: bhabhi. Aap ne bhaiyya ke liye itna swadist bhojan banaya is karan bhaiyya aap ko bhet dena chahte hai.
Ram is shocked while Sita blushed looking at him..before ram could speak Lakshman dragged them outside the ashram..
Ram and Sita are walking in front while Lakshman is behind them looking everywhere..
Ram is still embarrassed and kept looking at Sita..
S: aap theek hai Raghunandan?
R: ji ji. Kshma ki jiye Sita. Ye Lakshman na aaj ajeeb vyavahar kar raha hai..
S: ji skhma kyu maang rahe hai aap. Ye mere Soubhagya hai. 😳
R:😛ji aap ki Kya chahiye Sita. .
S: ji. Mujhe koi bhet nahi chahiye. Aap ke roop me iswar ne mere sare iccha poorn kar diya Dashrath Nandan 😊
R: paranthu koi To ichha hogi aap ko. Aap kuch bhi mangiiye me lakar dedunga aap ko..
S: abhi mujhe kuch nahi chahiye...bhavisya me koi ichha Ho to apse avasya maangloonga.
R:Mei aap ki har icha poorn karunga Sita..
As ram and Sita are lost in each other Lakshman is busy searching for the anklets. After a long search finally he liked one and bought it.
R: Urmila kaha hai. .
S: ji vo tho ab mandir me hai. .
S: Mithila kaise laga aap ko. Ye Ayodhya ki tarah bhavya nahi hai na. .
R: Mithila aap ki tarah hai. Atyant sundar...looking at her.
Sita blushed by his compliment and unable to look into his intense eyesp and turned back to find Lakshman missing...

S: ji devarji kaha gaye?
R:ha mujhe gyath hai vo kaha hai. chaliye. .
Lakshman went to Urmila who is sitting near the mandir sadly.
L: Pranam rajkumari. ..
Urmila is glad to see him and greeted him with smile. Pranam Sumitra Nandan. Lakshman noticed the glow on her face seeing him.
L: aap chintit prateek Ho rahi hai.
U: ji kuch nahi. Vo hamara Payal kahi kho Gaye bas is karan..
L: ji aap mujhe skhma kar dijiye Urmila
U: ji. Arthaath?
L: mujhe aap ka Payal mila the nadi ke paas..kadachit vo mujhse Thooth gaya. Aap mujhe kshma kijiye vo bhool se...
U: ji aap ne mere Payal thoda. Aap se Mei rusth hoon. Aap se bath nahi karungi
L:😕Ji. .. Urmila vo bhool se thoot gaya skhma kijiye na?
Urmila turned her face in anger as Lakshman is pleading her.urmila is so amused to see this side of him for first time. Then suddenly he caught hold of her hand and placed the anklets in them. Urmila gasped for a moment but saw the anklet and smiled.
U: ye tho Hamara Payal hai. ,😛
L: ji Mei aap ke liye nayi lekar aaya. Ab tho Hume skhama karo Urmila..
Urmila smiled at him while Lakshman Lloyd happy as she forgave him.
Meanwhile ram and Sita reached there and saw them Lakshman holding her hand..
Urmila saw them and asked Lakshman..Sumitra Nandan haath chodiye mera
.as Lakshman saw them he immediately left her hand.
R: Maine kaha na Sita Lakshman yahi hoga!😉

Lakshman looked at his brother embarrassingly.and Urmila ran to Sita blushing.😳
R: Urmila ab tho meri bhaiyya ko skhma kar do!..
Urmila blushed looking at Lakshman...
U: ji Jijasri...
S: devarji ! Mana hai aap avem aap ka bhaiyya shaktishali hai. Kadachit aap apna Sara shakti is Payal pe nikalenge tho vo Thoot hi jayega na!😉
Lakshman face turned red at her comments.
U: chodiye na didi bhool se Thooth Gaye..jijashee se bhi dhanush Thooth Gaya na!😉 Asked teasingly.
Lakshman is surprised as Urmila is taking his side instead of her sister and said to ram
R: ha ha bhaiyya aap se bhi dhanush thootgaye na. ,!😉
Now it is Sita turn to blush while ram looked at her.
R: vo tho swayamvar hai na ...said ram makeing her blush more. 😛

Sita left from there as ram followed her in to the mandir.

L: bhaiyya Se Dhanush thhot gaya avem unko Sita bhabhi mila. Mujhe Kya me lega rajkumari Urmila. 😉 Asked winking at her.

Urmila felt shy and is about to leave but he holded her hand tightly. She turned to face him but could not look into his eyes..
L: mujhe Kya milega Urmila. .?
U: ji jao aap chahte hai😳! Sumitra Nandan.
She released her hand from him an ran. As she turned she saw Lakshman saying me bhaiyya se aaj hi Bhat karlunga...

Lakshman!
...Lakshman came out of his trance as he heard ram calling him and turned his face. Ram and Sita are standing in front of him.

He realised it was his memory. The memory which is many years old which is still haunting him ..he along with ram and Sita is in exile.
He held his hand out and saw a Broken anklet...remincing him of her beautiful face. Her love. And her memories.
Ram and Sita just stood there sadly feeling the pain of their siblings . 😭
One in front of them in forest.
And one in the palace counting her days. ..



THE END. ...
SORRY FOR MISTAKES..😊
Edited by Bdaygirl - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was so beautiful
I was searching for some Lakshmila ffs n I came acrss dis one.

Thgh it is a ts but it is so beautiful...

It was so good to see them love each other so much
The anklet part was so sweet
Ram n Sita caught them in temple

But the end😭

I sometimes feel Lakshman n Urmila has a bond unsaid n unsung...

We onow how Ram felt during Sita's kidnap but we are never told hpw Lakshman n Urmila felt during the exile...

Seriously it was so good to read something on it.

Keep writing


N plz someone suggest me some more Lakshmila stuffs to read.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow yaar loved it
I guess your this Ts gave me an idea for my os thankiee
-kriti :)

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