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@allizzwell

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: venture
Lafzoon kay kiya teer chalay
Ghayal kar gai andaaz terai nayaray.

Dai De Zuban-e- Bayan Suhana ko tu nay
Jo Na Janay alfaaz hain kiya ye Suhanay

Rooz hi Intezaar Rehta hai tumharay kalaam ka
Tumhai rehta hai pata kiya dil mai hai hamaray.

Aur Akhir Mai Aarz Kiya Hai

Woh Jo kehtai hai kai hum likh nahi Saktay
parh liya karai Laxmi kai Khayal Ko
Jo Mooti bikhair daiti hai har taraf
Thodai say main nay bhi chuun liay hain.

Beautiful work Laxmi, assi saday bohat waday fan hain ji.

totally floored (@Venture) sheems..🥳... thanks a million--dear...😃.... loved ...loved your andaaz... yaar..😍.. u, vish and sinha stand at the same position for writing such beautiful verses.... so.... this one from me to u 3....!

Edited by laxmi_s - 14 years ago

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Shwetha

@Shwets1502

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#12

iam crying....😭😭😭guys...u people are so good in hindi and hindi poems...my god...laxmi di..sheema di..himanshu...great poems yar...i cant write a single sentence properly....ok here is a silly rhymes that just came to my mind..and guys free to laugh..i wont tell anything...😆😆😆

wow..what lines and what writers are here..
whenever i read this..i just cry in fear,,
like these people i too want to write down..
but iam damn sure i will look like a clown..
i knw i cannoy write in hindi
so now trying my habd in "angrezi"
hope u people laugh at it(poem)..
and u r welcome to hit at it(poem)..

mentioning in ()-just to make sure u dont do consider "it" to me...😆😆😆

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Himanshu Sinha

@Sinha18

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: Shwets1502
iam crying....😭😭😭guys...u people are so good in hindi and hindi poems...my god...laxmi di..sheema di..himanshu...great poems yar...i cant write a single sentence properly....ok here is a silly rhymes that just came to my mind..and guys free to laugh..i wont tell anything...😆😆😆

wow..what lines and what writers are here..
whenever i read this..i just cry in fear,,
like these people i too want to write down..
but iam damn sure i will look like a clown..
i knw i cannoy write in hindi
so now trying my habd in "angrezi"
hope u people laugh at it(poem)..
and u r welcome to hit at it(poem)..

mentioning in ()-just to make sure u dont do consider "it" to me...😆😆😆

Gr8 attempt yaar, you succeed 👏👏 maza aa gaya , ab jamegi mehfil hindi aur english dono kii, even you know the rhyming schemes also(aabbaabb...reflected in above lines) good very good

Edited by Sinha18 - 14 years ago

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@allizzwell

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Shwets1502
iam crying....😭😭😭guys...u people are so good in hindi and hindi poems...my god...laxmi di..sheema di..himanshu...great poems yar...i cant write a single sentence properly....ok here is a silly rhymes that just came to my mind..and guys free to laugh..i wont tell anything...😆😆😆

wow..what lines and what writers are here..
whenever i read this..i just cry in fear,,
like these people i too want to write down..
but iam damn sure i will look like a clown..
i knw i cannoy write in hindi
so now trying my habd in "angrezi"
hope u people laugh at it(poem)..
and u r welcome to hit at it(poem)..

mentioning in ()-just to make sure u dont do consider "it" to me...😆😆😆

U know Shweta...😃. what u wrote has the same child-like innocence which i can sense in your persona.... and it was cho-chweet...🤗.., dear same like u....! keep writing .😛..!

See.. SGP ka kamaal.... all r turning into writers..😉..!

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Himanshu Sinha

@Sinha18

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: laxmi_s

U know Shweta...😃. what u wrote has the same child-like innocence which i can sense in your persona.... and it was cho-chweet...🤗.., dear same like u....! keep writing .😛..!

See.. SGP ka kamaal.... all r turning into writers..😉..!

Child wali innoncence to hogi hi na inhone ek baar kaha tha ki ye suhana ka realistic version hai😆 to bhaiya innocence to inka mool-mantra hai, sahi kaha SGP is producing writers also indirectly by encouraging us to write.

Edited by Sinha18 - 14 years ago

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dosthi

@dosthi

Explorer

Posted: 14 years ago

#16

👏👏👏 laxmi ji (didi) really nice one... potrayed every charecter greatly..

good work👏👏👏

enjoyed alot....thanks for posting....😊

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@allizzwell

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: dosthi
👏👏👏 laxmi ji (didi) really nice one... potrayed every charecter greatly..
good work👏👏👏

enjoyed alot....thanks for posting....😊

Thank u sweetie for your kind words...😃. posting was entirely a pleasure.... glad u liked it....😉

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Shwetha

@Shwets1502

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#18

@laxmi di and himanshu...thanks for liking it...bt u guys just pray i dont turn writing poems in hindi....😆😆
that will mean u people cannot write anything more as u wud not remember the lang...😉

on a serious note...keep writing guys..cos i can learn a lot and may be one day i can write something in hindi too..😊

😆

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Sheema

@infinity00

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Shwetha Tusi Great Ho
India ka Fate Ho
Hindi main kamzor Ho Chalta Hai
Par Angraizi main Bohat Taiz Ho

Lagai Raho isi Tarha Tum
Laxmi/Sheema/Himanshu ab Khair Manao
jab Phela shakar Aisa Hai to
Agai kiya dhamaka Karo Gi Tum.

SheW*Ha it was soo soo soo sweet and innocent kai I to just gone flat. I just went to fix my wardrobe and came back to see so many Shahkars( bolay to Master Peice) Himanshu was awsome too with such good grasp of words and emotions, with good humour too.
Laxmi eik mushaira, bolay to shair o shairi ka concert ho jai , you pick up a character and we all try to come up with something.

Edited by venture - 14 years ago