The Shell of love SS Last part pg37 - Page 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: jasminerahul

still u did'nt comment on my ss😭


Sorry sorry...Here is the comment.
I love the way Danny is thinking what would be Kumari's reaction.somewhere he loves Kumari.They make such a lovely pair together.
Beautifully written.
Want to know the rest..
update soon..😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Oh my god I love it it s so cute. I wish something like that happened in the show we would have enjoyed it. The show is depressing but ur ss in so nice. At least I will fulfill my dream reading ur ss about danny and kumari. Good writing and imagination please keep updating and dont leave in the middle, I ll be heart broken again. I ll be checking ur update everytime I log on. Good job. [=D>]
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thanks a lot.I will never leave my ss in middle like all the SC writers did.I just hate it.I have already written 8 parts.But will post them only if I get detailed comments.Last time I wrote SaMUD SS and got very few readers.They just left 1 word comments which was so depressing.

Originally posted by: linu82

Oh my god I love it it s so cute. I wish something like that happened in the show we would have enjoyed it. The show is depressing but ur ss in so nice. At least I will fulfill my dream reading ur ss about danny and kumari. Good writing and imagination please keep updating and dont leave in the middle, I ll be heart broken again. I ll be checking ur update everytime I log on. Good job. 👏

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Posted: 11 years ago
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i dont know about others but i will be reading and commenting on ur ss everytime. also i love danny and kumari jodi and was looking for their vms, scenes and ss. i love ur writing so count on me to follow it. actually i am depressed because of kusum so ur ss is like a chocolate treat for me so carry on updating.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey what happened where is ur update I m looking forward for ur next part.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I want 2 post d next update soon.but only a few comments😭

Originally posted by: linu82

Hey what happened where is ur update I m looking forward for ur next part.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Dont look at the quantity of comments, look at the quality, and I am a big fan of ur ss u cant do that to me, keep updating and I m sure people will start to comments. [:P]
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I don't see how more comments will affect how u write unless ur that insecure but judging from ur storytelling u don't warrant assurance. Nevertheless I give it. So coming to your story, its certainly as how one would imagine it as it naturally transgresses from a realistic viewpoint that is relative to the current track so I like how you have kept close to that from the start before straying on the seductive border into fantasyland. Like others here I am biased for my own preference of couples who id like to see shipped together, so I'm curious as to how you will develop kusum n sunnys story? How does sunny fit into the scheme of the narrative? I don't need to add anything bout Danny n kumari, think they have enough fans already as it is. [URL= ][/URL]
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Posted: 11 years ago
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The Shell of love Part 2 Thank u all for the support.
Dedicate this to MaaneetDeewangi as she wanted a kidnap track
Kumari went to the temple and prayed shedding tears.
Kuma:God,why are you always hurting me in love?I loved Umesh.But he broke my heart.Danny helped me to recover from that pain.Now Danny also went away from me.
She wiped her tears and turned back.
She saw Danny coming towards her.
D:Thank God Kumari you are here.I came in search of you.
Kuma:Danny,why can't you stop following me?
D:If you think I am disturbing you I will go away from you.But before that you listen to what i have to say.
Kumari thought:Now what is left to say?
D:I tried messaging you.But your phone is switched off.


Kuma:I will never switch it on also.
Kumari walked off.
D:Oh,this girl is impossible.
Suddenly he saw a car passing by and a mask man pulling her insude the car.He could hear Kumari scream.
He was shocked.
Immediately he took his car and followed that car.He dialed Police number while driving.
D:Hello Police Station...

Kumari was taken to a dark area.The mask man removed his mask.She was shocked to see his face.
Kuma:Umesh?
Umesh laughed like hell.
Kuma:Why have you brought me here?You did enough.You cheated me.You broke my heart.
Um:Yes..I did all this.But I did one more thing.When your Saras bhai came to your Kumud di's wedding destination to marry her I attacked him so much that he lost his consciousness.Thus he lost his love also.
He laughed.Kumari was shocked.
Kuma:That means because of you only Saras bhai could'nt marry Kumud di?You destroyed their life.You are so cruel.
U:I did it.Because that Saras only called off our wedding.
Kuma:He saved my life from a cheater like you.
U:But I am not ready to leave you like that Kumari.I desired you and I will leave you only when my desire gets fulfilled.
Kumari started shivering:What are you upto?
With his lustful eyes and dangerous smile he moved towards Kumari.
U:What I did'nt get through out our courtship period.
Kumari got scared and started crying.Suddenly Danny attacked him from behind.
Kumari was relieved:Danny!
D:Kumari,don't worry.I will manage him.
Umesh hit Danny.Kumari got scared:Danny!
She started crying.
Danny hit Umesh.Then came some Policemen.
They:We are ashamed to have you in our department.
Umesh was embarrassed as he got exposed.Umesh got arrested.
Kumari burst into tears.
D:Kumari...now stop crying.That monster has been arrested.She ran towards him emotionally and embraced him.He smiled.
K:Thank you so much Danny.If you had'nt come I can't even imagine what would have happened.
D:How can I not come?After all it's my duty to save you always.
They both smiled.Suddenly Kumari realised that she was in his arms.She moved away from him with embarassment.He smiled.
D:Anyways I hope you are not angry with me anymore and like before we can be friends again.
She smiled.He extended his hand.She held his hand.They shook hands.

D:Kumari...in this condition you don't go home.You come to our house and take rest for some time.
K:Ok.
Danny and Kumari went to his house.
Kumari's head was aching like hell.
D:Kumari,you lie down and sleep for some time.I think you are weak because of the stress.You got scared.That's why.
Danny showed her his bedroom.
D:This is my bedroom.You can take rest here.
Kumari lay on his bed and slept off immediately.
Danny thought:Wish it was your bedroom too.But how will I tell this to you Kumari?You are trying to attack me like a Panther.


He sat near her and watched her sleep.He looked at her deeply.
He smiled:You look so cute and innocent while sleeping.Even when you are angry you look cute and sweet.


He held her hand smiling at her face.


Slowly Kumari opened her eyes.Immediately he took his hand off her.
D:You woke up so fast?
Kumari got up from the bed:I felt Umesh twisted my hand.
D:Come on Kumari.That Umesh's chapter is closed.He won't come again to trouble you.I only held your hand.That also softly.But you felt I twisted your hand?So strange!
K:You held my hand?Why?
Danny did'nt know what to say.He was shy.
D:I got slipped and to get grip and held your hand.
K:What rubbish Danny!Anyways I am going.
D:So soon?
K:Now I feel better.So it's better to leave.Bye Danny.
D:Bye.
Kumari walked away.
Danny thought:Wish you were here for some more time.
Kumari turned back.
K:Danny,what were you trying to say to me?
D:Since you are not angry with me,I will tell you later..when you are completely fine.
K:Ok.
She left.

Kumari went near Kusum.
Kuma:Sorry Kusum.Yesterday I overreacted.
Kus:It's ok.
Kuma:Anyways all the wishes for your marriage with Danny.
Kus:Stop it Kumari.Our wedding is not going to take place.
Kumari was shocked:No?Why?
Kus:You were so irritated that you were not even willing to listen to us.
Kuma:Sorry Kusum.Tell me what happened?
Kus:The fact is that I and Danny were not seeing each other.The others were just misunderstanding us.When Danny came here we both told them the truth.
Unknowingly a smile crept on Kumari's lips.
Kuma:That means you both are not in love?
Kus:No.
Kumari thought:So Danny was trying hard to make me understand this.But I did'nt bother to listen to him.I am so foolish.I need to meet Danny now.
Kumari ran to meet Danny.Danny was surprised to see her at the verandah.
D:Kumari..you came back so soon?
Kuma:Yes,i came back.Because I wanted to tell you something.
D:What do you want to say?
Kumari came inside.


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice part i like it please continue 😃

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