OS - Safe in his arms P75 - Page 25

Originally posted by: Anki_KJSG

Omg ths is perfect
i loved tht maturity in ur writing... Beautifully written n yea plz pm me edited part...n thank u fr d pm..keep writing..

Originally posted by: KryRan14

It shouldnt be a dream!🤣 Please continue this OS!

I would like to read the unedited version!😳

Originally posted by: -Mith-

M in love vt ur writtin deary... ❤️
Its beautiful...
N do continue soon...
N n also pm mee wenever u update ah plz...

First of all am reely sorry 4 not commenting on the previous piece. my dissertation going in.an am sure it will keep me awake even at the time of my death!!!!!!!!!! So a BIIIG SORRY!! 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭Now I go straight to "we belong together".

U started it with a sensuously thrilling moment.i was almost waiting when u will write😛😛😛😛😛😛😛😛😛😛😛😛 something on these lines .but I must talk first about this line which stole my heart.😊😊😊😊😊😊😊

" her eyes allure as they stare through those long lashes of him, leaving her gasping at the ardor and strength"

This line is so beautiful. it has a complete thought in it.the love and the charm.

Now another line which I loved 4 a dif. Reason

"he pulled the string of her dori tight"

Generally when a line is a combination of passion and intensity, the element of passion over rides the other,but I loved the way u placed the line .that is, u situationalised the line, quite contrary to its own nature:the intense yearning to know the reason of kumud's tears overpowers the natural passion associated this this physical gesture that is holding the string of her doriWOOOW!!! 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏My thought get more clear when u add this line

"to touch her body and soul"

This is to me the crux of this piece.to make saras more a partner to the very being kumud is.the physical gestures of their love are often reactions to the emotions which gather in their soul.ur piece makes it a point to put this in words.little paintings u make cover that ultimate pinting of star crossed love which samuds life will portray.

Hats off to those visions which prompt u 2 write.👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Now another line( pls don't kill me for postmortem of ur art)😲😲😲😲😲

"Kumud bit her lips, still fumed in anger"

This line is hopelessly cute.😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😉😉😉😉 and sooo kumud like!!!!!

Annnd that KISS 😉😉😉😉😉NO NO not only kumud melted even ur readers every single one of them melted with that kisss *big swooon*😳😳😳😳😳😳😳

And then I didn't know what u had in store.my goodness.i just hope natural combustion doesn't happen.it almost happened to me. * running to sit near an A.C*😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳😳

The foreplay was passionate to say the least.but it was a lot more things too.like it began with the wild determination to take what saras considers his own. kumud hesitated to reveal why she was sad.which turned him wild with tension and doubt. it happens when ur world comes down. same 4 saras.then the reason makes him angry. its heart breaking 4 him to realize that the only love of his life is insecure.pain and passion entwine with each other many a time.but u brought it out sooo well.👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏⭐️⭐️👏👏⭐️⭐️👏👏⭐️⭐️👏👏

The last transition was a means to prove it a dream.it had a dream like flavor to it 2.but somewhere I personally feel when u make this kind of transition u work it up a bit more.each of the themes u used were complete in themselves,but the gelling I know u can do better.but over all? oh god am at a loss of word.I LOOOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

❤️❤️❤️❤️🤗

Originally posted by: zerro

First of all am reely sorry 4 not commenting on the previous piece. my dissertation going in.an am sure it will keep me awake even at the time of my death!!!!!!!!!! So a BIIIG SORRY!! 😭Now I go straight to "we belong together".

U started it with a sensuously thrilling moment.i was almost waiting when u will write😛 something on these lines .but I must talk first about this line which stole my heart.😊

" her eyes allure as they stare through those long lashes of him, leaving her gasping at the ardor and strength"

This line is so beautiful. it has a complete thought in it.the love and the charm.

Now another line which I loved 4 a dif. Reason

"he pulled the string of her dori tight"

Generally when a line is a combination of passion and intensity, the element of passion over rides the other,but I loved the way u placed the line .that is, u situationalised the line, quite contrary to its own nature:the intense yearning to know the reason of kumud's tears overpowers the natural passion associated this this physical gesture that is holding the string of her doriWOOOW!!! 👏My thought get more clear when u add this line

"to touch her body and soul"

This is to me the crux of this piece.to make saras more a partner to the very being kumud is.the physical gestures of their love are often reactions to the emotions which gather in their soul.ur piece makes it a point to put this in words.little paintings u make cover that ultimate pinting of star crossed love which samuds life will portray.

Hats off to those visions which prompt u 2 write.👏

Now another line( pls don't kill me for postmortem of ur art)😲

"Kumud bit her lips, still fumed in anger"

This line is hopelessly cute.😉 and sooo kumud like!!!!!

Annnd that KISS 😉NO NO not only kumud melted even ur readers every single one of them melted with that kisss *big swooon*😳

And then I didn't know what u had in store.my goodness.i just hope natural combustion doesn't happen.it almost happened to me. * running to sit near an A.C*😳

The foreplay was passionate to say the least.but it was a lot more things too.like it began with the wild determination to take what saras considers his own. kumud hesitated to reveal why she was sad.which turned him wild with tension and doubt. it happens when ur world comes down. same 4 saras.then the reason makes him angry. its heart breaking 4 him to realize that the only love of his life is insecure.pain and passion entwine with each other many a time.but u brought it out sooo well.👏

The last transition was a means to prove it a dream.it had a dream like flavor to it 2.but somewhere I personally feel when u make this kind of transition u work it up a bit more.each of the themes u used were complete in themselves,but the gelling I know u can do better.but over all? oh god am at a loss of word.I LOOOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!❤️

🤗

Originally posted by: hunnybunch

Awwweee 🤗

I missed you so much girl, yeah, I agree this might not be the best...what to do? I have to rush and finish it every time😆

Loved reading your comment and I love your postmortem report😉Do keep them coming

Thanks again for the inspiration, I can work harder now😃

Originally posted by: -bornalee-

oh god its a dream,sach hona chahiye tha😉

saras d sanyashi ka yeh haal

loved it,since sat day after reading this only one song is coming to my mind jay sean "down"😳

<font color="#FF0000">Baby, are you down?
Down, down
Even if the sky is fallin' down, down, down

You ought to know
Tonight is the night to let it go
Put on a show
I wanna see how you lose control

So leave it behind 'cause we have a night to get away
So come on and fly with me as we make our great escape</font><font color="#FF0000">
</font><font color="#FF0000">So, baby, don't worry
You are my only
You won't be lonely
Even if the sky is falling down
You'll be my only
No need to worry...</font>