OS: ankh macholi part-1 page 1

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Posted: 12 years ago
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i am going to write a new OS on my favourite kumud and saraswatichandra!


concept is like how kumud din't see saras yet and so here in my story saras and his family fly to india and saras is still not convinced. he sees her and falls for her!


how is the concept??

K.A.J.A.L❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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interesting concept kajal...
continue soon n pm me...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice one !! 👍🏼

Do continue soonie and PM me Kajal 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i likeee it cant wait tooo read it :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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"yeh kaise ankh macholi khel raho ho aap mere saath. Lagtha hai yeh humara kismat ka khel hai humare saath par kuchbhi ho ap hi banenge mere jeevan saathi" kumud was writing down when kusum came in shouting. "Dee" said kusum as she walked in. Kumud immediately hid her book and turned back "Kya baath hai kusum?" kumud asks. "Dee Dee dekhiye mere haathon main kya hai?" kumud says "kusum yeh toh chitti hai"
"haan aur yeh chitti jeeju ne dubai se bheja hai apne pyaari kumud ke liye" kusum says. Kumud starts blushing a lot {and the background tune starts}
"chitti de mujhe" kumud says. "itni bhi kya jaldi hai dee" and with that kusum starts running around the house. Finally both of them stop and kumud snatches the letter from kusum.
She opens the letter ans starts reading it and immediately her face drops
and the letter falls from her hands. A tear drop falls from her eyes

Kusum runs to her and holds her shoulder and shakes her "dee dee kya hua aap teekh toh hai na" and kusum pick ups the letter and reads it
Kumud Ji, this is the first time I'm writing a letter to a girl''
and continues Kumud ji, I can't do this marriage because I won't be able to love you. Don't try to figure out the reason, as I won't be able to explain it to anyone. Now, I leave it to you. Do you want to accept such relation? Saras is shown writing the letter in the flashback. Continues :I hope you will not burden me or yourself with this marriage.


Kusum is so shocked to read it and so she goes near Kumud and tells her
"Dee app please roye math usse app bhi keh dijiye ki aapko bhi uske saath shadhi karne main koi dilchasth nahi hai"
"Usne mere aur mere bauji ka mazak banaya hai"says Kumud
"Dee Dee-" kusum was cut off by a voice from downstairs her bhapu's!
"ARE KUMUD BETA NEECHE AAJAO DEKHO NANDU AUR USKE PARRIVAR AYE HAI"
Kumud is shocked.
"Dee chaliye hum neeche chalte hai aur sabke samne keh dete hai ki aapko yeh shadi nahi karni" kusum says.
Kumud is still sad and all upset.
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Precap- saras goes up to kumud's room and is caught by her beauty!

Heya guys so this was the first part i guess it was not up to mark but next will be awesome i swear!

K.A.J.A.L❤️
Edited by Hazza.oneD - 12 years ago
harshana1 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I really like it :) you should continue soon. The pictures really add to the os, pm me when u update XD
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Posted: 12 years ago
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its awesome kajal
beautifully written
pics suited the situation
plz pm me ur future works
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Posted: 12 years ago
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fab update cant wait for next update plz update soon...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Please write in English the conversations
Loved it even though I didn't understand any of it
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Posted: 12 years ago
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HI GUYS I AM HERE TO GIVE U ONE SAD NEWS THAT KAJAL AKA HAZZA ONED HAS PASSED AWAY.
SHE WAS SUFFERING FROM BRAIN TUMOUR.AND YESTERDAY SHE PASSED AWAY.PLZ PRAY FOR HER SOUL TO REST IN PEACE.😭😭
Edited by keertu - 12 years ago

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