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Life... this word is sufficient to describe all the shades,emotions, actions, and everything we experience. but no reasons are required to explain what happened, why? because this is 'Life'.
This so called Life has everything in it... It is like an All in one...and one thing more... All in only one life...
this definition of Life is the perfect example for the circumstances faced by two Girls of a Family in Banaras.

The Garg's house is filled with the morning rituals, all the ladies moving in a haste to complete their household work, buaji chanting her prayers, and all the men discussing on issues related to their business and News.

The children are still to wake up.
"dolly don't come, don't... i said no, dolly..No!"
" Di...!!! please let her go Vicky, please!"
"hahhahahahha... you should have thought of that before handling with me... my dear doll..!"
"vicky please, let off my di...i beg you...pleasee!!"
"ohhfo...My dear... If you are so desperate to catch your sis, then go...on..." saying which he withdrew his grip from her hand.

"DI...!!!!"...she sat up in her place...all of a sudden, which woke Gunjan with a jerk. She was tensed. She is obsessed with what she saw.
She sat moving her eyeballs left to right and vice versa with a constant frown. her face is covered with random sweat drops almost invisible on her pale shiny skin.

Gunjan got shocked seeing her like that again... She immediately called Shail, when all others too accompanied her into the room.
this was a regular incident at the Garg's house, but none in the house took it easy. everytime this happens...they would get even more tensed than the previous time.

"beta..thum theek ho?? kya hua?..." no response... Shail shook her deeply.

She got into her senses.she then observed her surroundings, members, and stopped at Dayal, looking deep into his eyes.
After a while she had a smile of relief and uttered "Papa".
Dayal smiled, moved forward and hugged her tight. She just felt soothed in his embrace.

She then straightened herself and said to everyone "hame maaph kijiye, koi bura sapna tha".(please forgive me, i've had a nightmare)
everyone sighed in relief and smiled.
Seema: Arre, thum theek ho, bus koi baath nahi... tayyar hokar neeche aajao. (hey, you are fine, that's it... get ready and come down). She patted her and everybody left except Shail. Shail kissed her in the forehead and left. She and Gunjan looked at each other and rushed to compete about whom to use the washroom first.

They are 17 yr old girls, pursuing their graduation. it has just been a week they started attending their college. Chaya greeted them in the entrance, and Gunjan left for her class as her's is a different branch from the other two. They got seated in the second row, when a boy wished them. "hi, goodmorning."

Chaya: hi... good morning, i'm Chaya!

B: i'm lucky singh, and you? he asked pointing her.

"Rachna, Rachna Garg". said she with a firm light smile.



All the characters of my story are same as that in the show, but only the surface... they have their own different characteristics which are unseen.
Rachna plays the lead in my story ofcourse Gunjan is also a parallel lead... but story is made up keeping Rachna in mind. Part in italics flashback.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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I love stories where Rachna is the lead
this part has less of her though...who is lucky singh ? some random boy ??

looks like Gunjan has a past / is adopted

update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hi...all members of the forum...and my friends... i'm sorry first...
and i'm here to continue my story now...with the zeal i've got from the show...
this is the part of the ff i've started almost a year ago...but unable to continue it...due to many reasons...
yes...i'm sorry for that... i'm sorry for not continuing my story... and disappointing some of my friends who have encouraged me to start one...
i really wanted to continue... but couldnt make it... as i was not really happy with the circumstances in the show... a negative attitude wala vihaan...turning to be a hero for my rachana... and rajeev sir falling for gunjan...etc...etc... i really didnt like it...sorry if i'm hurting anybody...but its true... i didnt like it...
but now i'm back...just to see my dear rachana get a beautiful track in the show...which gives some importance to her too...
ha... even i'm not happy with the way she left her past behind...may be i'm not satisfied with the break up...i felt they might have worked a little more on it... to make it satisfactory...
but also... i liked Kabir and his attitude...his looks...his manerisms...and...and...rather his Rachana...
i think there is no need for me to express that i'm a rachana's fan...
hence... i wanna continue this story... with your help...
Thankyou...
bhuvana.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Eris-

I love stories where Rachna is the lead

this part has less of her though...who is lucky singh ? some random boy ??

looks like Gunjan has a past / is adopted

update soon



Thank you...yes he a random boy...
and i will post the introduction of the characters in my next post...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yaay.. another FF rachna as a lead. Great!!! I wonder who wl b opposite rachna. Looking forward. Update soon.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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well even i was writing an ff with rachna as lead..wud like u to read it..and ur story is thrilling ..me i like suspense...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: angelinasingh

well even i was writing an ff with rachna as lead..wud like u to read it..and ur story is thrilling ..me i like suspense...



thankyou... yes i really like stories with rachana as the lead...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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beautiful story dear. who is partner of rachna ultimately. pl update soon

am glad rachna is at least getting due in stories
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Hi friends,

Here goes the character sketch of the leads in my story... all the rest of the characters are the same as that in the show.

Rachna Garg:

Rachna a beautiful 17 yr old girl pursuing her graduation. She is so talented but she doesn't want to prove or practice her skills because she is afraid of the world, and couldn't dare to convince or go against her parents. She also is not confident enough about herself'. This is what she exhibits to the world but truth is hidden far behind in her past. She doesn't want to show her true self, and shows only what she wants to. Rachna is tough from inside but looks innocent from outside.

Gunjan:

A beautiful 18yr girl, who lost her mother at the age of 17. She is adopted by her aunt shail mother of rachna. She couldn't relate to shail so tried to escape from her, but failed to. She finally found her relatives support valuable and stayed back having good fun with her sister. She is talented, full of life,humorous,daring dashing and a true modern one presenting a city girl.

Shail and Dayal garg love their daughters as their own. Even the girls love the couple too much to go against them for achieving their goals.

Seema and sangeetha love Rachna, but does not entertain gunjan and her opinions. Seema is a little greedy and sangeetha a little self centered. May be they doesn't portray good villains.

Rest of the family is loving and caring and everything.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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PART 1:

It is a rainy day, Rachna asked her dad for a walk outside around the hotel but as he was too tired out of journey, he denied and she went out alone.

"rachna, rachna you are selected for the competition!" shouted Gunjan at home, she came running with a paper in her hand.

Rachna has applied for participation in a fashion designing competition in Mumbai, on Gunjan's insistence. She got selected and received the call letter for participation. Rachna didn't want anyone else to know about this and also she didn't expect herself to get selected as it is a very prestigious competition. She is supposed to reach the place in a couple of days.

All the family members gathered in the hall listening to Gunjan and Gunjan explained everything.

Shail felt extremely happy that her girl is so much talented, also other family members. But knowing the competition is to be held at Mumbai... everyone are left shocked and also confused whether to send Rachna or not as it is very far! They didn't seem that interested or pleased to send her in any case, not to Mumbai atleast.

R: "ham nahi jayenge!" declared Rachna.

G: "what? But y? this is a great opportunity for you!"

R: "No, Gunjan! I will not go! That's it!"

G: "tell me the reason atleast!

R: " no other reason, just that I'm not interested, leave it now" saying which she left from there leaving everybody there. Shail followed her, and Gunjan wasn't able to understand anything.

Dayal reached home in the evening and learned everything from Prabhu. He felt this would be a good chance for Rachna and that nothing should stop her from achieving her goal. He turned towards Rachna's room to talk to her!

Rachna came out she started walking in the garden beside the hotel. She is restless. The flowers, bushes and grass looked very elegant with droplets of rain, which just stopped. But rachna couldn't see or enjoy the beauty of this nature,she is stalked by something which is making her restless. She had no peace. She couldn't stay subtle, she wanna run away and that something is pricking her all the way but her calm face resembles nothing of this.

Suddenly she is called back into the world by somebody. She turned back to see two boys behind her looking at her.

" hi, you look beautiful, though traditional." Said one of them. "new to the city?"

R: "excuse me!" saying which she tried to move out, but stopped by the second boy, "wait.., where are you going? We are talking to you!"

B1: "oh may be you never spoke to any boy before...q behen ji?"

They started laughing louder. Rachna didn't answer them and tried to go away when one of them caught her hand.. rachna tried freeing herself but couldn't.

B1: it's ok, I'll help you learn mingling with boys! Don't worry!

Finally Rachna freed her hand which is already hurt by her bangle. She felt the pain.

B2: "oh you are hurt, let me help you!" saying which he moved towards her reaching for her hand,when he is stopped hard by somebody, the three of them turned to see a man locking his hand and looking furious towards them. He left him and said "ladkiyon se tameez se baath karna seekho".

B2: " arey, thu kaun hei hame bathaane wale?" answering back he raised his hand to beat him, when he was hit back instead. They had a small fight. One of the boy threw a stone on him which missed Mr. X and hit rachna, she is hurt on her forehead. And was bleeding. The rain started again. Mr.X continued the fight, frequently checking for rachna's condition. The boys ran away when Mr.X came to Rachna.

Mr.X: are you okay?

R: ha, thank you!.

Mr.X: sit there I'll attend your wound.

R: it's ok I'm fine thank you.

Mr.X: "first come and sit there " he commanded her and directed her towards a bench. Rachna was totally wet and was shivering. She felt week and went unconscious suddenly falling over Mr.X.

Mr.X hesitated but took her in his arms and moved, it wasn't difficult for him to know their room at the reception.

Dayal got tensed seeing Rachna in someone's arms and that too unconscious.

Mr.X made Rachna sleep on bed, dayal attended her wounds one on her forehead and one on her hand. He then enquired and learned everything from Mr.X.

D: Thankyou beta. Aap?

Mr.X: I'm KT... Kabir Tripati. Namasthe!

D: Namasthe! Er...

"Didi.. didi" rachna started chanting in sleep, and the duo reached her. Dayal sat beside her and tapped her lovingly. Rachna got conscious... frowned first and slowly opened her eyes. Her expression reflected her pain. She saw her dad sitting beside her.

R: "Papa.." uttered she with great effort. She tried to sit, and Dayal helped her.

Kabir offered water, Rachna looked back at him, he stayed calm with no expression. She hesitated but drank it.

D: he is Kabir, he stays in the same hotel and came here with some work.

Rachna didn't respond.

Dayal turned to Kabir and said "I'm Dayal Garg,she is my daughter Rachna. "

KT:" okay uncle I'll take a leave, bye"

Saying which he started leaving. On reaching the door, he stopped and glanced back at rachna who isn't looking at him, and left.

D: acha ladka hai.

Rachna didn't respond but may be she feels the same.



hi friends back with the update...so how do u like it... do comment. and yes the part in Italics is flashback. enjoy.😊

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