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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: skm27395

After a long i got a holiday and this os just made my day...so thankyou😊
I scratched my head to find at least any single word that can praise this one but everyword seemed less in front of your os👏
I never tried for a detail review but felt urge for this one
LET ME...
A perfect title

He screamed. He kicked and trampled everything in his wake. It was loud, and shrill, and terrifying.

It broke windows and doors and made her cry.

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The pain was unbearable, and so he was carried by a Paramedic to the ambulance. They took him away.

Splendidly described the human behaviour when someone come across this kind of situation...

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They told her, with grave little smiles, there was nothing they could do.

She smiled bravely at them, and told them she would be fine.

But she knew she wouldn't be.

They all did.

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At night she cried under the covers, and wished he was there in all his glory flexing his finger and pulling her in a corner or pinning her against a well. A different person, a different life. She wanted it all to be gone.

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But when she woke up the next day, it was still there and and he was not. Lurking, like a shadow on a summer day.

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She said she was over it, in the months to come, but soon they would all see she would never be back. She was gone now.

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She followed him to the hospital still not showing him her face and she cried every time a new needle tapped his spine. She cried so hard.

Cant see her in pain yaar😭

I used to think only mother's love is pure and genuine but after reading this i feel sometimes your closed ones can feel the same pain a mother does when she see her child in pain

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Her old friends or rather classmates, who had long forgotten her, came to say hello, to pretend everything was the way it used to be.

But she knew it wasn't.

They all did.

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Vidushi was startled and scared once she entered the hospital room to see the entire room filled with scattered pieces of glasses, vases and syringes. The doctor told her that they had to sedate him in order to start him on treatment for his aliment. He was diagnosed with chronic inflammatory demyelinating polyneuropathy(the name itself is horrible enough to take ones life)😡

in which the peripheral nerves become inflamed and damaged. Chronic inflammatory demyelinating polyneuropathy is a rare disorder that is treatable, but in some cases can result in permanent numbness or weakness of the arms or legs. She saw him deep in his lumbar on the sterile hospital bed looking anguishedeven in his unconscious form. She wanted to wake him up and collect him in her arms knowing he could not return her hug even if he wanted to. She wanted to tell me that everything will be okay she she will always be with him. Always and forever. But she knew she could not. For one he hated her and still not trusted her enough and secondly the words would sound hollow and insincere to him she was sure. She decided to prove it to him instead.

Oh ...its painful to see him suffering this way...why god has to do such things with good people...since childhood he had seen nothing but pain...😭😭

The next day when he woke up he found someone holding his limp hand and sleeping besides him on the cot even though he couldn't feel he could for sure sense Vidushi soothing him.

Their hearts are on sync...i loved this moment😳

He enjoyed the few moments he felt serene with Vidushi holding his hand but was shattered to see dried tears in her eyes. Vidushi woke up that instant and called for a doctor who checked upon him. "We have started him on prednisone ( an anti inflammatory corticosteroid drug). In an hour a nurse will come and change his IV bag and start him on high doses of Immunoglobulins. I will check up on him in an hour. The treatment will be pretty painful

Why this treatments have to be so painful...if i become a doctor i will try my best to find alternative way that will be painless..

and there is no guarantee it will work and reverse his paralysis but I am hopeful. So take care of him." said Doctor in his practiced sympathetic tone

How can these doctors manage to spat the bitter truths directly in front of patients...dont they posses hearts😡

to which before Vidushi could respond Parth said "Doctor I am the patient so you are bound to discuss my treatment with only me and not some stranger according to the Doctor-Patient Confidentiality. She is no one to me. Not my wife, fiancee, girl friend or even my friend so I would appreciate that you directly talk to me."

Yes...parth is right...vidushi is not his wife...neither girlfriend...nor fiencee..but more than them...she is his soul and how can a soul is kept away from body...

"Ofcourse"replied the Dr. Karthik Ahuja, Senior Neurologist of Curtis Bruce Multi specialty hospital situated in Vasant Vihar, a posh area of Delhi leaving red faced by getting irked by his rowdy patient. Vidushi just stared at him, not believing that Parth would do something like that to her. "You are so shameless. Weren't you insulted enough or do you want to hear more. Look Vidushi I have told you before, I don't love you and I never will. So if you think, by visiting me once a week with a bouquet and a get well soon card in your hand and seeing your fake concern and misguided sympathy I will start to like you and feel differently due to lack of options. You are wrong. Very wrong. So get out of here before I call for security and have you removed and banned from ever coming here." said Parth in a straight and bitter tone by keeping a rock on his heart and trying his damn hard not to break down in front of her and beg her not to leave him alone. He was trying his hard to hold the dam of emotions seeing her and seeing the love, concern and pain in her eyes but thinking he might mistake it for infatuation, care and pity. He didn't want her pity and he would die before becoming selfish and ask her to stay. He would rather face this alone then ask her to sacrifice her future for his sake as he can envision his to be dark and bleak.

Buddhu ram...always keep telling lie to himself...after spending so many years with a girl couldnt understand her a bit...always want to settle the things alone...pyar bhi karta h...bolne se darta bhi h..

"Do you know I have become immune to you being an ass to me and ignore and filter all your insult so stop trying because you will tire by wasting your breathe insulting me but I will never be tired by taking them. Who said anything about visiting you once a week? I am going to be here everyday and if you even think for one second you can get me thrown off here you have another coming your ways. I have left FITE

See i knew vids is never going to leave him...dil ye ziddi h...dil ye ziddi h...love vids for this dialogue...bekar me hi try karta h ye parth...paagal

Even her scolds reflect the essence of love she has in her heart for him..

. Who do you think is capable of even touching me? I have permitted only one person to touch me and drag me anywhere with him is you and I don't see you escorting me out of this building in anywhere in near future. So you are stuck with me until you are healthy as a horse and fit enough to throw me out yourself." said Vidushi in a tough voice masking the inner turmoil going on inside of her,

My personal favourite line...she was all his..

panicking at the thought of Parth sending her away and leaving him alone and no one to take his care. Knowing him to be a stubborn prick, she shuddered at the thought if he refused his medication or any treatment for no one to there and police him by preventing him to make any foolish decisions. "Why do you care so much about me? You should get out of here as this soul sucking disease will eat me soon" said Parth in a low voice showing his disappointment and despair to which

Finally parth laid his heart open...till she is with him no diease has the dare to eat him

Vidushi sat on his bed and took his face in her small palms, bringing them closer as she kissed him gently on lips. She moved her lips against his shyly at first but then Parth took the lead and poured all his aggression into that kiss nipping at her lip and tongue trying to scare her off but failing miserably as she gentled the tone of the kiss

Aww...such a cute moment...i wish to see this kind of emotional scenes in the show😆

and murmured against his lips "I care because I love you. Even if this disease suck your soul I am sure it's not strong enough to break down my spirit. So please Parth let me stay. Let me take care of you and hold your hand. Let me be here to take your pain when your demons may haunt you. This is not just your battle for it is mine. My future is tied to you however dark or bleak you may find or not like. So let me be here next to you and watch you sleep at night and rise in the morning. Let me..."

Vids is really a strong girl ...even in this kind of situation she has not loose her hope...love this girl for keep standing firmly like a pillar beside him when he needed her..

I hardly cry...but after reading this my eyes were moistened...

I was completely absorbed in it...feeling shortage of words to describe its magnificience...love u a lot for this one

Lastly a song which perfectly describe vids feelings...

Main tere layi duniya nu chaddiyan

Tere layi dur apne karen

Ve main tenu kinna chaniyan

Ae gal teri soch to paren

(Meaning- i ve left my world for you...left my close ones behind for you...how much i love you is beyond your imagination)

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So hey you guys...I want to let you all know this was the most draining piece of work I have ever written. It was emotionally very draining and very demanding so please guys do press the like button and comment to let me know if you liked it. I know not many people would like to see a crippled Parth but this is in an alternate universe where maybe Parth doesn't hate Vidushi as much as he would like. So bear with me and I dedicate this OS to Ash aka Burn The Ashes from whose juke box this idea is from. Also I want to thank Chandni, Ayesha, Antu, Annie, Manu, Rashi, Riya, Rea, Suprabha, Sree, Aimy, Pari , Jiya and everyone else who reads, likes or comments on my ff 😊😊😊

Want to ask you some thing...are you a medical student??

Because this os reaflects a good medical knowledge of yours..

And if you have done a research over diseases for this os then hats off to your hard work..

Its wonderful

Love

Suprabha


Edited by senasenapati - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#32
it was so nice sreya
when i completed reading this i had tears in my eyes
it was so hearttouching
i dont want this to happen in the show
parth bas medicines se hi jald teek honi chahiye
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Posted: 11 years ago
#33
thanks dear ..keep reading my work 😊 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thanks dear ...keep reading my work 😊 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: ArshaParsh

Hey that was awesome
It feels good to read such a well written piece of work...
Am hoping to read more from you
Prishi

hey prishi...I m glad u enjoyed reading my work if you liked this I m sure u ll like my other work from past shoo if possible then check them out 😊 😊 thanks for reading
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: -SREE93-

it was so nice sreya

when i completed reading this i had tears in my eyes
it was so hearttouching
i dont want this to happen in the show
parth bas medicines se hi jald teek honi chahiye

thanks for reading sree niI m glad u liked it...keep reading my work in future 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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@suprabha..hello n thanks for such a long review...also want to say u were close I m a third year dental student so it was bit of knowledge n bit of research...I m glad u enjoyed my work n I hope I make u as happy as I m wen I read good work 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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oh wow that was sheer awesomeness

i love that you wrote something so emotional... it was such a joy reading this

sorry i can't write a long comment now 😔 but seriously, i can't express just how much i loved that

especially the way you made Vidushi was broken after Parth became paralysed... it was so beautiful seeing all her emotions.

and then when Parth tries to push her away she becomes this strong powerful woman again... I LOVE IT

Loved you OS and I always love reading you work so please keep writing more
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetbutbroken

oh wow that was sheer awesomeness

i love that you wrote something so emotional... it was such a joy reading this

sorry i can't write a long comment now 😔 but seriously, i can't express just how much i loved that

especially the way you made Vidushi was broken after Parth became paralysed... it was so beautiful seeing all her emotions.

and then when Parth tries to push her away she becomes this strong powerful woman again... I LOVE IT

Loved you OS and I always love reading you work so please keep writing more

thanks Rea...i m glad u enjoy my work n yeah this baby was bit demanding-both mentally n emotionally exhausting coz dude i m 19 n nevr lost anyone in my life expect my grandmom n never saw any real pain so basically lived a sheltered life so what the hell do i know about pain n love but i just guessed what ppl must feel when something like this happens to their loved one !!!i m glad ppl relate to it n like it😊😊😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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WHAT TO WRITE SHREYA???YOU JUST TOUCHED MY HEART❤️WITH THIS ONE...❤️
HOW CAN YOU DO THAT?
MAY BE U CAN, BECAUSE YOU ARE AMAZING👏👏👏👏...JUST LIKE YOUR WORKS...


I KNOW...I KNOW...I AM DAMN LATE TO COMMENT,BUT WHAT TO DO?AFTER THE JOURNEY FROM INDIA TO UK,I WAS HELL TIRED...AND WAS UNABLE TO COMMENT,
BUT THE TRUTH IS STILL I HAVE NOTHING TO COMMENT...BECAUSE "LET ME" IS AMAZING...👏

SO NO COMMENTS,ONLY WARM COMPLEMENTS FROM ME FOR THIS ONE SHREYU🤗

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