J.E.A.L.O.U.S. Series of 7 OS (LAST part updated) - Page 7

awesome dear.. Love it.. Thanks for pm

Okay! I am really sorry! Since school started I am hell busy and thats why missed these fabulous parts!
This 7 os series is superb
The best was oncoming due to that scene where punching bag hits Randhir
Heheheheeeheheh Punching bag ne apna badla pura ka liya! Lolz
This was seriously superb, and your writing skills
My oh my! Fabulous re
And thanks for the pms
Do update soon

Sukri :*

Originally posted by: MyLiFeMyRuLeS..

Okay! I am really sorry! Since school started I am hell busy and thats why missed these fabulous parts!
This 7 os series is superb
The best was oncoming due to that scene where punching bag hits Randhir
Heheheheeeheheh Punching bag ne apna badla pura ka liya! Lolz
This was seriously superb, and your writing skills
My oh my! Fabulous re
And thanks for the pms
Do update soon

Originally posted by: TashaForever

Sukri :*

Loved the update.

I am awed by ur vocab xD

Sorry for the shorty pie comment...Busy with school work :( Hectic :/

Promise to comment long next time!

Continue soon <3

Tanya

Originally posted by: Prachijainn

RES

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Sukriti agli baar thoda badawala update pls!

I am speechless!👏👏👏

Tum bhale chhota likho but ur vocabulary and style of writing is so awesome!👏

Waiting for ur next part!😊

update soon😊

PS:Sorry to comment late I am really tired

hey I just read ur entire os , all 6 parts in 1 go amazing work just loved it 👏, plz pm me when u update last part it's a request😊

Originally posted by: Dancindoll8

I will give my comments on all the O.S.s very soon..

They are all very well written..

Res

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I'm eternally thankful to you for writing a Vardhan Niharika o.s.

There is a dearth of them in the forum and that is what confuses me as they are such a flexible couple if you will...One can easily whip up stories on them as we don't know anything about them in great detail and the exploration of their journey and after Niharika's death and the numerous what ifs that Vardhan is stuck with could be one ff to watch out for...

I loved how you wrote it...

It was short and sweet and I had a big smile while and after reading it...

Thumbs up (Taste the thunder!)

Sorry couldn't resist

E

Engineering-the very root of the show...

I loved how you wrote Randhir's perspective...

The before and after version and also explored Engineering and balanced them both out...

Great work

A (Randhir)

Thank you for introducing to me to this word-Abnegation..

There comes a time in every hero's life when idulges in questioning himself to death...

Thankfully you kept it at the apt length and the one liner in b/w had me laughing..

What Randhir will have to abnegate to give and receive love would be his ego and his facade and you captured this so beautifully...

I loved how you made Randhir ponder and think and how you highlighted his inner turmoil with being o.t.t...

Kudos for that!

A (Sanyukta)

She notices his every move and analyses his behaviour. .

Sanyukta fricking cares about what Randhir does and his feelings...

Just this much had me jumping up and down...

I loved how you analysed his stay away from me line as a plea as sanyukta is untinentionally breaking his carefully built facade...

Very well written. .

L

Lavender...

How aptly used and written...

Finally we have a Sandhir conversation...

I think something like this would happen on the show soon which will result into-

a) Sanyukta slaps Randhir

b) Randhir acknowledges his feelings and confesses them out loud in front of Sanyukta

I loved how you chose to represent Sanyukta's dullness with her wardrobe choice by making her wear dull colours and the weather line that followed...

In the end, I love how Randhir realised that he took it to far this time...

One of my fav part..

O

Haye! A christian wedding for Sandhir...

I love it...

You have set the scene right by combining their attire and feelings...

Honestly it couldn't have been any better...

My favourite till now...

It was written exquisitely...

Take a bow!

Friendly advice:Proof reading :-p

So here my comments on all the parts I have read till now as promised...

Keep writing and please pm me when you update..