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Posted: 9 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: xPalkix

Aw I found it very sweet and sad at the same time.

Sweet because Meera wants to carry Dharam's baby, she wants to have a symbol of her love. And Dharam is trying even though he doesn't want to, he is doing it for her aw. What's more is that he thinks they don't need a baby because they two are enough for each other - This I liked!

And I swear I didn't see the ending coming 🤣
Mihir Virani, I thought he would be Dharam's lookalike since Amar played that character lol
And btw it says they tried for a baby almost everyday, why didn't you write about this ☺️😆



Lol... ur right mihir virani was a pun intended indeed..😛 ..this guy is indeed supposed to be exactly that of dharam's built..this forms an imp part of ths ff...u ll see that in next part

Lol... i did nt write abt the consummation in detail...cz i didnt know wat exactly my audience is like😳😉 .(lol will write a pg version for u 😆)

Btw u didnt tell me wat did find sad in it ???
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: dheera_1


Lol... ur right mihir virani was a pun intended indeed..😛 ..this guy is indeed supposed to be exactly that of dharam's built..this forms an imp part of ths ff...u ll see that in next part

Lol... i did nt write abt the consummation in detail...cz i didnt know wat exactly my audience is like😳😉 .(lol will write a pg version for u 😆)

Btw u didnt tell me wat did find sad in it ???


Ah acha. I think I know what'll happen next 😉
Now you've made a promise, I'll be waiting for that pg version 😆
The thing I found sad was how Meera and Dharam can't have a baby 😭I want to see a cute little Dheera baby 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#13
Wow loved it! Thank you. Loved the fact Meera desperately wanted to have Dharams baby.

I can guess what happens next too!!!!!

Please carry on - can't wAit to read next part.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14
Dheera sad that they r not able 2 b parents.But why Dharam feels that the prob is with him?Dheera scene was very emotional.Meera wants their child 2 have his mole too.so cute.Dharam attacked by Mihir Virani.Mihir akso fell off cliff with d car?Whats going 2 happen next?The story is so unpredictable.Mihir Virani reminded me of Amar's Mihir Virani from Kyunki.plz give a title to this FF rather than simply writing Dheera FF
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Posted: 9 years ago
#15

Originally posted by: ninag

Wow loved it! Thank you. Loved the fact Meera desperately wanted to have Dharams baby.

I can guess what happens next too!!!!!

Please carry on - can't wAit to read next part.


Thanks😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: jasminerahul

Dheera sad that they r not able 2 b parents.But why Dharam feels that the prob is with him?Dheera scene was very emotional.Meera wants their child 2 have his mole too.so cute.Dharam attacked by Mihir Virani.Mihir akso fell off cliff with d car?Whats going 2 happen next?The story is so unpredictable.Mihir Virani reminded me of Amar's Mihir Virani from Kyunki.plz give a title to this FF rather than simply writing Dheera FF



Thanks...and will try to give story a name
😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: dheera_1



Thanks...and will try to give story a name
😊



LO ji...changed the name..ab khush ? 😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
#18

Part 2

Some villagers found dharam in a comatose situation and take him to nearest hospital.

Doctor: quick... prepare operation theater ... we need to save this guy..his head is bleeding very badly...we need to save him... quick

Nurse : but sir...we don't know anything about him there is no Id proof or anything with him that could establish his identity

Doctor : That is not important..he is our patient...and we need to save him..now go quick

Meanwhile...police salvaged the broken car...and found a dead body..with some jewlery and wallet...a wallet that has a photo of pretty young lady and a man wearing same Gold locket as the dead body was...and the driving licence Read Dharam Suryavanshi

That night , when police arrived at suryavanshi house hold...Meera , descending from the stair case thought, what has Gaura done now...beaten another of the poor worker ?.. or was it the modi's ?? vaise it has been quite a time that her naggy mother bothered.her...she has finaly accepted...meera's decision(though more by no choice left than free will) ...but she..never in her wildest dream thought of the reason police finally gave

Police : Mrs D. suryavanshi ?...was your husband recently gone towards a visit to Ahmedabad highway? An also can u pls have look at these gold ornaments i.e ring and chain

Meera(who was visibly shaking now) : y..y...yes..b..b..w..wo...gaye the ahembadabad..a..a..an..and ye bhi unka hai (her voice quavering) , par aap k k kya kehna chahte hai...kahan hai wo...kya k k koi accident...?? Wo hospital mein kya...bh bhot chot ayyi hai kya...batayiye na?

Gaura : kya accident..ae ladki ..ae tu su bole che...shravan vidya..neeche aao jaldi...

Police : ji accident toh hua hai...par hospital mein nhi hai koi

Meera: oh thank god..kahan hai wo ab..kaise hai...

Shravan -vidhya (unanimously ) : boiya na ...inspector..kaha hai papa?

Police : wo...ji ..wo...gadi itni buri tarah jal chuki thi ki...wo...ji ..dharam ji is no more

Gaura : ...ae...ae..kya bakwas kra hai tu inspector..ek lagaongi na tere

Police : dekhiye..hum aise hi nhi kahe rahe..daya...body leke aao... dekhiye...body puri tarah se jal chuki hai...isiye..aap face nhi pehchaan payenge...but hume wallet aur jo kuch aur saaman mila hai unki car se...it all confirms...that...u know

Vidhya (crying furiously): Papaji..papaji...nahi

Shravan : vidhayaji..pls aap chup o jaiye ..aapki tabyat khab ho jayegi

Meera who all this while.was un eerily calm...unfazed by all this shouting.scrreching...as if she wasn't even here...and she wasn't ...she was in Rome..her favourite place on her honey moon with dharamji...doing all those wonderful things...but even her lost self , noticed a painful fact , her sister who knew dharamji..for like 3-4 years...was crying llike she lost her real dead..bbut his own son.. in this time too ...all he could care was his precious vidhya ji...what a pest...she thought to herself...and then...a certain hand peeping out of a fully white clothed body...caught her attention...slowly...and quietly amdist all this chaos..she held this hand...but she felt weird...not the same warmth..not the same touch..that used to be her favourite feeling in the whole wide world ...it wasn't there ...

Meera : ye mere dharamji nahi hai...ye dharamji nhi hai...suna aapne...vidhya stop it... Baaji...aap kyu ro rhi hai...kuch nhi hua hai...mai keh rhi hu na...

Gaura who ...even after all tthese years she still saw meera as a modi...and still ha a huge dislike for her...untill now...she wanted to believe this nave girl...have faith in her faith ..in her love...she also wanted to hug her and cry...after all their pain were same...they both might have hated each other...but they both loved the man lying on floor...

With that thought..gaura just hugged meera...and soothed her like her own daughter she never had...

Gaura : meera... mera bachcha..meri baat sun...Dharam...wo .ab nhi aayega ..wo...ja chukka hai...mere bure karmo ki saza ambe maa ne usse de di...and gaura breaks down sobbing hard...

Meera: aisa nhi ho sakta...she runs off to...her room

3 days later

It's a sad gathering of mourners at Surya vanshi house...modi's are there too...

Gaura : vidhya... 3 din hogaye...meera apne kamre se bahar nhi nikli...na kuch khaa thi hai...na kuch peeti hai...aaj aaj dharam ka chautha...hai...uska yahan hona bhot zaruri hai...kaise bhi use ready karke neeche la...

Vidhya : ji baaji...mein ek baar fir se try krti hu arwaa khulwane ka...agar wo fir bhi nhi kholti toh...mai shravanji se keh kar tudwa dungi...

Vidhya was about to knock on the door...when she it was alredy opened...she enters and sees meera in one corner...sitting like a statue...in same clothes...she wore 3 days ago...she had been sitting like stone for three days...staring at god knows ..what...at a distance...the proof it was also in the fact that ..she was stinking

Vidhya : di...aap...aapko neeche chalna...sab aaye hain neeche...ma papa bhi...but first let me draw you a good warm bath...then...ye aapko ye saari...ye white saree pehni hai...

Meera : haww...kya time ho gaya...oh... oh my god 1o baj gaye...mai abhi tak nahai bhi nhi...breakfast bhi nhi banaya...dhramji...sunega toh kitna naraz honge...tu chal mein abhi 5 min mein aati hu...aur ye kya laayi hai tu...white saree... pagal hai kya..terko pata hai na...white...colour bhale dharamji ka favourite ho..par wo mujhe feeke rango mein kabhi nhi dekh sakte...unhe pata chala na..tu kaan kheechenge tere...cha lab jaa yahan se...

Vidhya : di di..di...ye tum kya bole jaa rhi ho...he isn't here...neeche sab unke...aap chaliye..khud hi dekh lijiye...

She drags meera down the stairs..where there is a huge portrait of Dharam..decorated with garlands and everyone is crying gaura...gopi...kokika...and even ahem.

Meera : kya hai ye sab?? Aur ye haar kyu chadya hai photo par...hataiye..aur ro ,kyu rahe hai...

Gopi saw her beloved daughter..struggling in her state of denial... she saw her eyes..though without tear...but still red sore and puffy...she saw how her beautiful hair were now a mess...how chapped her lips were..and that she was palpably stinking...boy she realised. the.girl had really loved dharam... it was not just one of her whims or tantrums or zid or naivety as she thought...she had also not thought their marriage would work out even a year...it had...they had short but...lovable time together...it then dawned..to her...was it...her curse that came true..her words...that meera wouldn't be happy..but she didn't mean it right...she didn't want to suffer like that...and then the fresh round of tears came to her face,,, realising she unknowingly cursed her own daughter to a doomed life

Gaura : meera ...meera hosh main aa...wo tere dharam chala gaya hamesha ke liye s..sunn rhi hai thu...wo kabhi nhi aayega aab...kabhi nhi...aur tune usse millne ka ek aakhiri mauka bhi kho diya..jab kal iusse shamshan ke liye leke gaye...sunna...kuch toh bol meri bachi

Meera remembers how long back dharam has told her..that he hopes she confesses her love before he goes from this world...she had...had nt she

Meera (silently) : wo wakt toh aaya aapke jaane se pehle..par bhot kam der ke liye...with that she breaks down sobbing hard...dharam ji...pls...pls wapas aa jaiye...pls,...,,mai aapse kabhi jhagda nhi karungi..kabhi kuch nhi maangugi...bachcha bhi nhi...pls..mere liye aap hi sab hai,,,mere kanahaji bhi...apke bina mai kaise rahongi...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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NOTE to silent readers and likers

hey guys fanfic writing... is not a bunch of hours of one's life that goes into typing...its a lot more..a lot of emotions...thoughts ideas goes into writing,,,,all this effort..seems worthwhile,,if someone is a bit more expressive...u know like might explaining/mentioning a scene u like...for which..author might have given a lot of thought..or ur suggestions ...if any...all these..provide as an incentive to work and write further and better...and you feel appreciated ...other wise,,its like..we guys write for nothing...in exchage of eye pain and servical n back pain

and if you guys are really not interested in the pair...then why bother coming here... and reading or liking..just for the heck of it



so all the silent ones...come out of shadows,,,and pls comment..its nice to see the views of fell0w silent dheera lovers & observers...its the least u guys can do


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Posted: 9 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: dheera_1


Part 2


Some villagers found dharam in a comatose situation and take
him to nearest hospital.


Doctor: quick... prepare operation theater ... we need to save
this guy..his head is bleeding very
badly...we need to save him... quick


Nurse : but sir...we don't know anything about him there is no
Id proof or anything with
him that could establish his identity


Doctor : That is not important..he is our patient...and we
need to save him..now go quick


Meanwhile...police salvaged the broken car...and found a dead body..with some
jewlery and wallet...a wallet that has a photo of pretty young lady and a man
wearing same Gold locket as the dead body was...and the driving licence Read
Dharam Suryavanshi


That night , when police arrived at suryavanshi house hold...Meera
, descending from the stair case thought, what has Gaura done now...beaten
another of the poor worker ?.. or was it the modi's
?? vaise it has been quite a time that her naggy mother bothered.her...she has
finaly accepted...meera's decision(though more by no choice left than free will) ...but
she..never in her wildest dream thought of the reason police finally gave


Police : Mrs D. suryavanshi ?...was your husband recently
gone towards a visit to Ahmedabad highway? An also can u pls have look at these gold ornaments i.e ring and chain


Meera(who was visibly shaking now) : y..y...yes..b..b..w..wo...gaye the
ahembadabad..a..a..an..and ye bhi unka hai (her voice quavering) , par aap k k
kya kehna chahte hai...kahan hai wo...kya k k koi accident...?? Wo hospital mein kya...bh
bhot chot ayyi hai kya...batayiye na?


Gaura : kya accident..ae ladki ..ae tu su bole che...shravan vidya..neeche aao jaldi...


Police : ji accident toh hua hai...par hospital mein nhi hai koi


Meera: oh thank god..kahan hai wo ab..kaise hai...


Shravan -vidhya (unanimously ) : boiya na ...inspector..kaha
hai papa?


Police : wo...ji ..wo...gadi itni buri tarah jal chuki thi ki...wo...ji
..dharam ji is no more


Gaura : ...ae...ae..kya bakwas kra hai tu inspector..ek
lagaongi na tere


Police : dekhiye..hum aise hi nhi kahe rahe..daya...body leke
aao... dekhiye...body puri tarah se jal chuki hai...isiye..aap face nhi pehchaan
payenge...but hume wallet aur jo kuch aur saaman mila hai unki car se...it all
confirms...that...u know


Vidhya (crying
furiously): Papaji..papaji...nahi


Shravan : vidhayaji..pls aap chup o jaiye ..aapki tabyat
khab ho jayegi


Meera who all this while.was un eerily calm...unfazed by
all this shouting.scrreching...as if she wasn't even here...and she wasn't ...she
was in Rome..her favourite place on her honey moon with dharamji...doing all
those wonderful things...but even her lost self , noticed a painful fact , her
sister who knew dharamji..for like 3-4 years...was crying llike she lost her real
dead..bbut his own son.. in this time too ...all he could care was his precious
vidhya ji...what a pest...she thought to herself...and then...a certain hand peeping
out of a fully white clothed body...caught her attention...slowly...and quietly amdist all this chaos..she held this hand...but she
felt weird...not the same warmth..not the same touch..that used to be her favourite
feeling in the whole wide world ...it wasn't there ...


Meera : ye mere dharamji nahi hai...ye dharamji nhi hai...suna
aapne...vidhya stop it... Baaji...aap kyu ro rhi hai...kuch nhi hua hai...mai keh rhi
hu na...


Gaura who ...even after
all tthese years she still saw meera as
a modi...and still ha a huge dislike for her...untill now...she wanted to
believe this nave girl...have faith in her faith ..in her love...she also wanted
to hug her and cry...after all their pain were same...they both might have
hated each other...but they both loved the man lying on floor...


With that thought..gaura just hugged meera...and soothed her like
her own daughter she never had...


Gaura : meera... mera
bachcha..meri baat sun...Dharam...wo .ab nhi aayega ..wo...ja chukka hai...mere bure karmo ki saza ambe maa ne usse de di...and gaura breaks
down sobbing hard...


Meera: aisa nhi ho sakta...she runs off to...her room


3 days later


It's a sad gathering of mourners at Surya vanshi house...modi's
are there too...


Gaura : vidhya... 3 din hogaye...meera apne kamre se bahar nhi
nikli...na kuch khaa thi hai...na kuch peeti hai...aaj aaj dharam ka chautha...hai...uska
yahan hona bhot zaruri hai...kaise bhi use ready karke neeche la...


Vidhya : ji baaji...mein ek baar fir se try krti hu arwaa
khulwane ka...agar wo fir bhi nhi kholti toh...mai shravanji se keh kar tudwa
dungi...


Vidhya was about to knock on the door...when she it was alredy
opened...she enters and sees meera in one corner...sitting like a statue...in same
clothes...she wore 3 days ago...she had been sitting like stone for three days...staring
at god knows ..what...at a distance...the proof it was also in the fact that ..she
was stinking


Vidhya : di...aap...aapko
neeche chalna...sab aaye hain neeche...ma papa bhi...but first let me draw you a
good warm bath...then...ye aapko ye saari...ye white saree pehni hai...


Meera : haww...kya time ho gaya...oh... oh my god 1o baj gaye...mai abhi tak nahai bhi nhi...breakfast
bhi nhi banaya...dhramji...sunega toh kitna naraz honge...tu chal mein abhi 5 min
mein aati hu...aur ye kya laayi hai tu...white saree... pagal hai kya..terko pata hai
na...white...colour bhale dharamji ka favourite ho..par wo mujhe feeke rango mein
kabhi nhi dekh sakte...unhe pata chala na..tu kaan kheechenge tere...cha lab jaa
yahan se...


Vidhya : di di..di...ye tum kya bole jaa rhi ho...he isn't here...neeche
sab unke...aap chaliye..khud hi dekh lijiye...


She drags meera down the stairs..where there is a huge portrait
of Dharam..decorated with garlands and everyone is crying gaura...gopi...kokika...and even ahem.


Meera : kya hai ye sab??
Aur ye haar kyu chadya hai photo par...hataiye..aur ro ,kyu rahe hai...


Gopi saw her beloved daughter..struggling in her state of
denial... she saw her eyes..though without tear...but still red sore and puffy...she
saw how her beautiful hair were now a
mess...how chapped her lips were..and that she was palpably stinking...boy she
realised. the.girl had really loved dharam... it was not just one of her whims or
tantrums or zid or naivety as she thought...she had also not thought their marriage would work out
even a year...it had...they had short but...lovable time together...it then dawned..to her...was it...her curse that came
true..her words...that meera wouldn't be happy..but she didn't mean it right...she didn't
want to suffer like that...and then the fresh round of tears came to her face,,, realising she
unknowingly cursed her own daughter to a doomed life


Gaura : meera ...meera hosh main aa...wo tere dharam chala gaya
hamesha ke liye s..sunn rhi hai thu...wo kabhi nhi aayega aab...kabhi nhi...aur
tune usse millne ka ek aakhiri mauka bhi kho diya..jab kal iusse shamshan ke
liye leke gaye...sunna...kuch toh bol meri bachi


Meera remembers how
long back dharam has told her..that he hopes she confesses her love before he
goes from this world...she had...had nt she[/P
[P]Meera (silently) : wo
wakt toh aaya aapke jaane se pehle..par bhot kam der ke liye...with that she
breaks down sobbing hard...dharam ji...pls...pls wapas aa jaiye...pls,...,,mai aapse
kabhi jhagda nhi karungi..kabhi kuch nhi maangugi...bachcha bhi nhi...pls..mere
liye aap hi sab hai,,,mere kanahaji bhi...apke bina mai kaise rahongi...





Heartbreaking.

Loved Guaras dialogues they sounded just like her.

Poor Meera - she's gone crazy without her Dharamji. Gopi finally realises Meeras genuine love for Dharam.

Please write part 3 quickly. I love your fan fics. Xx

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