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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wonderful update. Please continue. 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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can this stupid ostrich get any more annoying yes she can
man somebody either throw her out or kill her or do something with her
poor gopi man she was in so much pain yet she carried on nobody even noticed if it wasnt for her slipping nobody would have known anything

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Posted: 13 years ago
#63
liked the part...waiting for the next one...
Ahem still going to work 😕!!!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#64
Part 8:

Early morning anita went to gohem's room. She knew that gopi will not be able to help ahem today. she wanted to take full advantage of the situation, hence, she barged in their room and chirping all the while she went to the cupboard to remove the clothes that Ahem will wear today.
Anita heard ahem clear his throat. She turned towards him expectantly wen she heard gopi say "Anitaben ahemji k kapde wo cupboard me nahi hai. Wo dusre cupboard me hai.
Anita: Theek hai
Anita was about to remove a cream colored shirt wen gopi said "anitaben wo nahi, wo neeli rang ka shirt nikal dijiye
Anita glaced towards ahem to see his reaction, but ahem was looking at gopi with a strange look on his face that she cudn't decipher.
Anita removed the shirt but broke a button thinking that she will stitch it while ahem is still wearing it, this way she will get closer to ahem and also rub it in gopi's face.
Anita then opened a drawer and was in the process of selecting a tie wen again gopi interrupted " Anitaben(sighs) ahemjii tie sirf meetings k liye pehente hai. Aaj unki koi meeting nahi hai. To aaj wo tie nahi pehnege. Aap ye sab kapde bed par rakhiye". Turning towards ahem she said " Ahemjii aapko late ho jaayega. Aap jaldi jaake fresh ho jaaiye, Main hoon na"
Ahem went to the bathroom. He was feeling very uneasy. He didnt want to leave gopi alone with anita. Ahem purposely left the bathroom door ajar. He cud hear them both clearly now. Gopi was directing anita.
Here anita threw ahem's clothes on bed. And turned to remove the handkerchief and socks wen gopi said"Anitaben ye aapne kaise rakha haan. dekhiye shirt yaha rakhiye side me pants yaha warna crease pad jaaye gi.
Anita did as gopi suggested keeping one eye on the bathroom door.
She then went to the drawer to get socks.
After anita did everything as per gopi's instruction and waited for ahem to come out.
Gopi: Anitaben ab aap jaaiye.
Anita: Par gopi agar ahem aur kisi cheez ki zarurat padi to.
Gopi: Kis cheez ki zarurat padegi anitaben sab kuch to yahi hai...
Anita: Haan lekin gopi.
Gopi(angrily): Anitaben ahemji apne kapde khud pehente hai...unhe aur kisi cheez ki zarurat nahi hai...aur baaki zaruraton k liye main hoon na...
Behind the door Ahem was stunned...
Here gopi was also speechless.
But anita was unfazed and like a shameless tart she stood her ground.
Ahem came out from the bathroom quickly took his clothes and left again. He cudn't look at gopi.
After sometime he came out from the bathroom turned to gopi and said " is shirt ka button tuta hua hai.
Anita stepped forward eagerly thinking that this was now her chance to shine " Lao ahem me laga doon"
Hearing this gopi narrowed her gaze at anita and said " Koi baat nahi anitaben aap jaaiye me kar dungi"
Anita: lekin gopi tumhaari tabiyat
Gopi: Mere haathon ko kuch nahi hua hai...ahemjii aap yahan aaiye na".
Ahem dutifully went forward.
Anita cudn't see them together and left fuming. She turned back one last time and saw that both of them were engrossed in each other.

Ahem was in the office thinking about anita's problem and gopi's word.
He decided that it was high time anita left MB.
He made some calls.
After delegating and postponing some meeting he left for home...

At home ahem went directly to his room, he saw that both kokila and gopi were lying in bed with gopi's head in kokila's lap. His mom was showering gopi with maternal love which was his by right.
But strangely for the first time in his life he didn't mind. He was proud and a little teary eyed that gopi had managed to do something that was impossible. She had gained entry in kokila's heart with her love, selflessness, devotion.
There were tears in his mom's eyes, tears of happiness.
Ahem didnt want to disturb this moment. But he sure wished to capture it. So he whipped out his cell and clicked a picture of the saas-bahu duo and silently left the room.
He went to the kitchen and saw that his kaki was busy with housework. He didn't like to burden anyone but his headache was killing him coz of all the time spent on talking about anita.
He asked for green tea and informed his kaki to gather everyone in his room later.
He had something important to discuss.

Later in Gohem's room everyone had gathered. They were all curious about the purpose of the meeting. Ahem went to the bed where his wife and mother were lying. He went towards kokila took her hand in his and said "mom aaj aapse kuch maangna chahta hu...aap dongi"
Everyone was tensed except anita, she thought that ahem will now confess his feelings before everyone and will ask for divorce from gopi and marry her. Everyone was thinking the same except goki.
Ahem kneeled by his mothers side and said " mom kuch dino pehle aapne jo zimmedari li thi use me poora karna chahta hu". Anita was smiling like a cat with a full bowl of cream.
Ahem went on " mom me jaanta hu k anita ki shaadi k liye aap bahot pareshaan hai, isiliye (Gulps) anita ki shaadi ka zimma me uthaoga. Anita k liye ladka me dhoonduga."

Everyone was stunned and there was a chorus of approval from everyone.
Anita was shocked (understatement of the decade). Her dreams, her wishes were burning in front of her just like the kitchens fire. She was dying inside. Her heart felt like it was breaking into innumerable pieces. She shot a look a gopi expecting to see a triumphant smile on her face. What she saw instead pushed her further in the swirling madness her life had become.
Gopi was not looking at her with a smile, nor was there pity in her gaze...instead there was an understanding in her gaze.As if she understood wat she, anita was going thru...but how can that happen. She had everything, loving MIL FIL, husband, brother, sister, uncles and aunts, Gran. And she, anita, educated from a foreign university, owner of her own business, had nothing...
The madness was now consuming her, the one person whom she trusted had betrayed her for a second time. And all bcoz of his illiterate wife.
"Nooo" Anita screamed " you cant do this to me for a second time. i love you. I wont marry anyone else but you. How cud you do this to me Ahem. You love me too. Be a man, and accept it in front of everyone now"
Everyone was shocked by this outburst.
Ahem: Wat the hell r u talking about anita
Anita: Dont you dare shout at me ahem, u broke my rishta, coz of u i was disgraced, my marriage broke, and then u had the audacity to speak with me pretending to be nilesh. You convinced me that u were still in love with me,now u r saying wat the hell i m talking about.Coz of u i became a person I dont recognize anymore. I tried to kill someone coz of u. I again refused a rishta coz of u. and u are now saying that u will find me a groom.
Everyone was stunned hearing this.
Ahem shouted : shut up , just shut up, wen did I tell you that i love you, as for breaking your marriage, I was there in the room first, thn you came. You know nothing happened btw us. Like a fool i went to help you wen your dupatta got stuck. Or was that all your plan to trap me. It was not my fault that ppl speculated on our relationship. But still my family had to bear the shame. All this past year I was guilt ridden . I thought that I had wronged u, i used to hate myself, but u were just a fantasy, u were never real, coz i cud never fall for a gal like u.The situation was not in our control. but the decisions were, u took a wrong decision, how is that my fault. We got nilesh back for u. But still u refused. My mom got a rishta for u, but u said that the guy loves another person and bcoz i dont want you to go thru wat gopi did I refused the rishta.I was repenting for my mistakes. But you thought i was still in love with you.I loved you once, respected you, trusted you, not anymore, coz my heart belongs to another, and as for the respect and trust, you lost that as well.
Hearing all this anita was shattered. Her final thought b4 fainting was that she lost...she lost again.

Dead silence filled after anita fainted. Jigar carried her to her room and came back to goham's room. Everyone was stunned.
No one dared to brk the silence for a long time.
Then Ahem spoke "doctor ko bulao jigar" turning to kokila he said " Mom i sorry, ye sab meri wajah se hua hai, gopi please mujhe maaf kardo"
Gopi: Ahemjii isme aapki koi galti nahi...waqt hi aisa tha...hume jo theek laga wo humne kiya, isme galti kisiki bhi nahi hai...anita ki bhi nahi."
Ahem: Gopi y tum kaise keh sakti ho. Usne tumhare saath kya kuch nahi kiya honga...kitna sunaya honga...aur tum uski tarafdaari kar rahe ho.
Gopi: Ahemjii tarafdaari nahi kar rahi hu...bas samajne ki koshish, anitaben ne bahot kuch khoya hai.
Ahem: Par gopi
Gopi: Ahemjii me ye nahi kehti ki saari baatein bhula dijiye. Bas unki nazar se dekhiye. Taqdeer ka likha nahi badalta ahemjii, koi kuch bhi kar le. Na aap ki galti hai isme, na anitaben ki, haalaat kharaab the.
Hearing tis everyone calmed down.
Kokila: Anita ko is ghar me rakhna theek nahi honga
Ahem: To ab hum kya kare
Koki: uska bhai umang use le jaa sakta hai na
Ahem: wo mom...actually umang anita ka bhai nahi hai...

So how as this part, Any suggestions for improvement...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#65
Awesome update ... loved it ..


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Posted: 13 years ago
#66
enjoyed it
but i liked the last line
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Posted: 13 years ago
#67
amazin love it ...keep it up..
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Posted: 13 years ago
#68
Wonderful update. Pls continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 9:

Everyone was stunned hearing this.
Kokila: Par Ahem kinjal ki shaadi k waqt to tumne mujhse yahi kaha tha.
Ahem: Mom actually baat ye hai k, Mom main, anitha aur umang, hum teeno college me saath me the. Umang anita ko pasand kar ta tha...shayad ab bhi karta hai...lekin anita mujhe pasand karti thi. Ek din mera aur umang ka jhagda ho gaya. Tab anita ne maamla thanda karne k liye ye kaha ki " Umang uske liye sirf ek dost hai, wo use ek bhai ki tarah pasand karti hai. Umang ye sunke bhikhar gaya tha. Jhagde k baad mere aur umang k beech sulah ho gayi...jaise din beet te gaye waise umang anita ko leke bohot possesive hota gaya...aur jab koi bhi sawaal karta to wo yeh kehta ki wo aur anita sirf achche dost hai aur anita use bhai ki nazar se dekhti hai. Unke beechme khoon ka rishta nahi hai mom. Umang hamare ghar k tareeko se waqif tha. Wo jaanta tha ki mera aur anita ka saath me koi future nahi hai. Wo kyunki wo anita ko khush dekhna chahta tha isliye usne kinjal k kareeb aane ka natak kiya. Ye baat me aapko pehle nahi bata saka mom. I m sorry"
Dead silence filled the room after ahem's monologue. Everyone remembered kinjal's wedding and the family's humiliation.
But the main problem of anita still remained.
Everyone was digesting this new information and trying to solve anita's problems. But nobody had an answer.
In the silence that reigned MB Gopi said in a timid voice" Maaji, ahemjii me kuch kahu"
Kokila:Haan kaho na gopi vau
Gopi:Ahemjii wo
Ahem(encouragingly): Bolo gopi
Gopi: Ahemjii kya aapko lagta hai ki abhi bhi umang bhai anitaben ko pasand karte hai
Ahem: Mujhe nahi pata...hamari shaadi k baad mera unse baat karna band ho gaya tha. Main nahi jaanta umang k dil me kya hai.
Everyone was waiting breathlessly to listen to wat gopi has to say. Coz gopi's ideas were usually unique.
Gopi: Kya anitaben sachme umang bhai ko apna bhai maanti hai
Ahem: Nahi, usne sirf jhagda rokne k liye aisa kaha tha...
Gopi: Aur aap ko pakka yakeenn hai.
Ahem: bhai behen ka rishta kaisa hota hai me jaanta hu gopi. Umang ne kabhi anita ko behen nahi maana. Naa hi anita ne kabhi use apna bhai...Wo to sirf apni dil ka haal aur dard chupane k liye umang duniya se kehta raha ki anita uski behen jaisi hai. Warna wo anita k shaadi me zarur aata. Aur anita anaat hai. Wo to sirf rishte chahti thi...par confuse thi. Isiliye uski zindagi me jo koi aata unke liye wo bahot possesive thi. Har rishte ko naam dena chahti thi...par yeh nahi jaanti thi ke kaunse rishte k peeche kaunsi bhavna hoti hai...shayad galat naam de diya ho usne'
Gopi: Maaji, Ahemjii agar hame ye pata chal jaaye ke in dono k dil me aakhir kya hai to is samasya ka hal mil sakta hai.
The silence that followed this statement was absolute. Everyone was staring at gopi as if she sprouted another head all of a sudden. Gopi became nervous and said " Maine to bas jo mann me aaya wo kaha...aage aapki marzi"
Ahem (Chuckled) : Aur main tumhe gawar kehta tha...aap sab ka kya kehna hai.
Everyone was in agreement.
Kokila: Lekin umang ke dil me kya hai...wo hum kaise jaane ge
Gopi: Maaji hame kinjal ben k baare me bhi sochna honga
Kokila: kinjal ki shaadi ho chuki hai gopi...lekin fir bhi...hume koshish karni padegi k kinjal aur umang ka saamna na ho.
But now the big question was where was umang and how to get him to confess his feelings.
The door bell rang, it was doctor joshi coming to chck on anita. He examined her and said it was just shock which caused her to faint...she should regain conciousness within a few minutes. He priscribed some vitamin tablets and left.
When anita regained consciousness she was alone. She started thinking about wat she did. How she nearly succeeded in killing a person in cold blood.
Anita(thinking): I was not like this. What is happening to me. How did I commit such crimes and all in the name of love. Maine ek baar bhi nahi socha k main kisi ki jaan lene jaa rahi hu. If anything had happened to gopi ...i can never forgive myself...
Thinking that she has to repent for her crimes...she made up her mind to confess.
Anita went downstairs. Everyone was gathered in the main hall drinking tea. Seeing her approach everyone stopped talking.
Anita: Main aap sab se kuch kehna chahti hu.
Kokila: Haan bolo.
Anita(with tears streaming down her face) : Main ahem k pyaar me andhi ho gayi thi... Maine ye nahi socha ke main ek patni ko uske pati se alag karne jaa rahi hu. Mujhe laga ahem apni shaadi se khush nahi hai. Mujhe laga ke woh abhi bhi mujhse pyaar karta hai. Mujhse bahot badi galti ho gayi hai mujhe maaf kijiye.kitchen me jo aag lagi thi wo maine lagayi thi...gopi ko bhi maine giraya tha...main jaanti hu k main aapki maafi ke laayak nahi hu... fir bhi I M SORRY"
Hearing all this everyone is shocked and angry. Ahem is about to erupt wen he feels gopi hand holding him back. Calm descended on him.
He looked towards his family. Rashi was busy blasting anita, hetal kaki was supporting her and all the male members had a look of disgust on their face. Only his mom was calm.
Kokila was deep in thought. She knew that wat anita did was wrong. But she was not the only one who was responsible. Her dikra was also responsible for anita's condition. Even she to some extent was responsible. Anita did everything coz she believed she was in love with Ahem and vice versa. Kokila knew that anita was a good gal at hrt. She herself came to confess. Nothing is more important than realizing one's mistake and repenting it.She just was not suitable for his son.
Kokila: Bas raashi... Mota bhabhi main kuch kehna chahti hu.
Hetal: Haan bolo kokila
Kokila: Maaf kar dete hai ise, Ise apni galti ka ehsaas hai, yahi badi baat hai.
Ahem: Lekin mom
Gopi: ahemjii, maaji sahi keh rahi hai. Please maaf kar dijiye.
Ahem: Theek hai gopi sirf tumhaare kehne par.
Saying so ahem went to his room.
Anita turned to leave wen kokila interrupted.
Kokila: Kaha jaa rahi ho anita
Anita: Bag pack karne
Kokila: Uski koi zarurat nahi hai. Tumhaari tabiyat theek nahi hai. Tum apne kamre me jao
Anita : theek hai auntyji

After Anita left kokila asked everyone to gather in her room.
In korag's room.
Kokila: Ahem kya tumhe pata hai k umang kaha hai ab
Ahem: Nahi MOM, lekin me pata laga sakta hoon
Kokila: Saaru (turning to gopi) Gopi vau, anita ki zimmedari me tumhe saupti hoon.
Gopi: Ji Maaji
Kokila: Raashi tum
Raashi: Ji kakiji
Kokila: Tum meri madat karogi, anita ke liye ladka dhondne main
Ahem: Par mom
Kokila: Bharosa rakho Ahem, Anita ab tumhaari zindagi me kabhi nahi aayegi
Kokila(facing everyone): Gopi ko chodke baaki sab anita se rootne ka natak karege. Raashi tumhe jab mauka mile, tum anita ko taana maarna.Par dhyaan rahe gopi aas-paas ho
Raashi(thinking "jalne ki wajah se dimaag me kahi short circuit to nahi ho gaya"): Ji kakiji.
Kokila: Gopi vau aaj se tum anita ka sahara banogi. Uski hamdard , uski dost sab kuch. Use kisi cheez ki takleef na ho iska khayaal tumhe rakhna hai.
After the meeting concludes everyone retires to their respective rooms.

I have got a plot in mind, but not sure how shud i continue...so plzzz gimme your suggestions.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Amazing Update !!!!!!
do continue !!!

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