Kaun Hoon Main... Goham.. Pa 14 pg 48 - 07-07-12 - Page 9

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Posted: 13 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: swasthi

Superb update Miketa.

Ahem's thoughts being expressed on his marriage and love - egocentric, arrogant and selfish.
You have now set the scene from both sides ... looking forward to the build up of the story.
Update soon.



Yes, its important to know - both sides thoughts - before taking things further. I fear things are going different direction - before anything happens.

He might be selfish, arrogant at the moment, but soon every thing is going to change.

Take Care
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Posted: 13 years ago
#82
In the coming parts - its going to focus on certain part of Gopi's life. And if the twist is very hurtful or upsetting please let me know. Thank you once again

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Part Three
Shameless Person

Around middle of the night Gopi get's up (shock) rubs her forehead. Tries sleeping again, but she couldn't and decide to get up at four in the morning. Stood in front of the window feeling cold air brush her face. Giving her fresh air and strength to hide her inner feeling in front of her Maaji who keeps on asking when Ahem beta would return.

(Gopi's monologue)

I just don't know when he'll return, but slightly happy without him being around or else he could also shout at him for silly things. For example why I am making changes inside the room. I agree its his room, but after marriage whatever belongs to her husband is her's too. In second thought can I claim those things when he himself hasn't given me those rights.. Why can't I just stop thinking about him and his world. I think I need a shower than morning jog would help. Wait a minute! When did I never go on jogs that I thought of it. I think the idea of him returning back is stressing me out.

(end of her monologue)

She stomp her foot before entering inside the bathroom.

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(Ahem's monologue)

Why does the entire house is decorated? Did they figure out that I am coming back today? Its only four in the morning. (Ahem looked confuse by the decoration) I kept on walking toward my room. God.. its her aroma filled entire room. Where is she? If I don't find her in within a second I am going to snap on her the minute her face pops in front of me."

(end of Ahem's monologue)

Gopi humming a tune (O Kanha Ab To Murli Ki Madhur Suna Do Taan) she came out of the washroom dressed in her underskirt and blouse. She is unaware of Ahemji's arrival (and kept on doing her daily routine after he left) she applied lotion on her skin three times for smooth result than drape herself in pink sari. She place her manglustra around her neck than smile set of earrings and matching chooriya in her each wrist. She is almost about to fill her forehead with sindoor (when someone held her hand from behind) she got scared (and look upward to find her husband standing their with anger reflecting in his eyes).

(Ahem's monologue)

Doesn't she have any shame or self respect that she could walk around the room like this! Very disgusting! That she ingored by preference and continue doing her things. I have to teach her a lesson not to ignore me in my preference or my absent.

(end of Ahem's monologue)

His own feet took him toward his wife who was about to fill her forehead with his sindoor that belongs to his name.

Her eyes wide up in shock...

I smiled at her...

She looked at me with confusion...

She asked me "when did you arrive? I didn't see you come inside?"

I change my smile "when you were giving me free show of your body expose? Don't you have any shame? This isn't your house or your room where you can walk around without any clothing." I push her arm away and the sindoor she held few away.

She looked upset.. but I don't give a heck... why should I? Its just a sindoor? What a big deal if it fallows on the ground as if I am gonna get into some kind of trouble because I make my destiny not god itself.

I left into the washroom... but before stepping inside I saw her trying to pick up the tiny sindoor from the ground and filled her forehead with that same sindoor.

I just bang shut the door in frustration. What a great start of my morning with unwanted person in my life?

I sigh and let the cold water cool.. me.. down.

Part 4 on Page 16

Edited by Miketa - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#83
great update. nice to see the monologue of both Ahem and Gopi and the little conversation between them. His entry to the room was not bad as he saw Gopi in just underskirt and blouse and he was able to restrain himself without doing some thing nonsense. Keep going dear. Thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#84
Amazing Update
dont lik this ahem in this story i hope he gets better
Poor Gopi How can she live with such a person

Very nice Update & Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
#85
Hey i really liked it. It was really nice gopi is really strong. Update soon. Thanks for pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
#86
loved the update...its very good...
ahem is so rude...
cant wait to read more...update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#87
Miketa, thanks for the pm😊 a narrative kind of story, nice one, looking forward to the update...thank you😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#88
lovely update...u always leave me wanting more...l have come to the conclusion that gopi has some kind of amnesia...she thinks of jogging and knows words in english...am i anywhere near right?
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Posted: 13 years ago
#89
Awesome yaar... 😛👏 waiting for ur next update..n ya thanks for d pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
#90
Lovely!😃

Ahem is such a 😡

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