OS - Ahem's Declaration - Page 5

Originally posted by: ayesha_78

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Congrats Nazma.. I absolute loved it..

the way u put the oneshot was smooth, touching, and i could actually dream it.. It was like if it was happening in real life.

The way you put the scene step by step was great.

You said you weren't that creative.. U are. I want them more coming.

I loved the onshot Nazma.. Ur Aham was fantastic

Originally posted by: ShaunSA

Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! 👏 👏 👏

Originally posted by: LoveLiveDance

wth were u thinking when u wrote this god, this story sucks.

hahaha just kidding i was just playing around, the story was awesome i really loved it. i dont know why but i love it when Ahem says Gopiji it sounds so cute.

Originally posted by: lexaxel

The story flowed very well, lucid too which is an acheivement, thank U:-))!!!!!

Originally posted by: NazmaJ

Thanks Ayesha!! I was waiting for your comment as you are the root of my OS!

I tried to make an Ahem that was open to letting his feelings out and tried to create the right atmosphere for him to feel comfortable.

If you knew how many attempts I made and culled to get to this one which if I hadn't posted when I did I probably would have changed it again. So as for writing more I think I need to recover from this one before I even think about writing anything else!!

Originally posted by: rsk16

Superb os.do write more.truly awesome

Originally posted by: ayesha_78

also when i wrote the onshot last week when swasthi told me to write it when i was MOTW.. if i compared that one to this.. i actually going to say

yours is better than mines

Originally posted by: NazmaJ

Thankyou for saying that Ayesha but yours was brilliant!!

Originally posted by: Nafisa_blossoms

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Great, loved the explanation of Aham of the feelings he was having on their marriage and afterwards, also the whole beginning could be just like an episode of Saathiya with the way you have dialed into Gopi's personality and the blame she carries when others make mistakes.

Great Story...👏 👏