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simran15

@simran15

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#11

excellent script...positivity was awesome...keep up the good job.

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-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: avivakirk
Nafisa,

Excellent work!!!!! Just what the doctor ordered. Two birds with a stone.Gopi got a taste of Ahem's world & also get educated.WOW Amazing!!!!!!!!!😃I really like it when women can stand on their two feet & be a companion for the man in every aspect.The way your story line is progressing Ahem is going to be fida over Gopi. Looking forward to hear when Gopi would give a piece of her mind & say she's no longer Ganwar.

Looking forward to reading your next part. Keep it up!!!!!!

Thank you so much for your kind words, i have never written a ff before and i went into it just with one idea to have something of Aham's drop in the water and he could then associate this with Gopi's laptop blunder, but as i began to go into the story in detail (that's @Jake - Neil for the teacher Joke) and stepping into character of Aham, you know what he does, cell phone, work work work, i went online and looked at what Rajkot is producing, as i studied finance and worked in finance, i was able to draw from that background that's for Aham then i kept thinking what possible way could Gopi step into Aham's world, what is she good at and the catering idea came up and i was able to flesh out my story.

Unfortunately, i think i gave a hint into what Aham's feelings were at the end of the story, he was thinking how proud he was of "his Gopi" by that i thought everyone would get it that he has accepted Gopi, so i thought i had fulfilled my story title, Aham accepts Gopi and the remit to bring these two into a couple, but i can see many have asked me to continue, so i will perhaps write 50 - 100 words onto the end of the One shot ff....😊

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-Nafisa-

@-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: simran15
excellent script...positivity was awesome...keep up the good job.

Thanks Simran, as you can see, i couldn't stick to the 500 word limit, but for everything i wanted to say, it needed to be that length. I couldn't bring any negativity into the storyline for example with a Rashi being mean, so instead i decided to give her what she craves, no work and living as a Queen, with the shopping and beauty palour visits that she loves, had to be positive in order to educate Gopi and increase her self-confidence and what other way then to have her run her own business.

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-Nafisa-

@-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Jake-neil
Aah, another accountant trned writer👍🏼👏. Good Job! Vry detailed, Teacher!

Thanks Jake bhai, yes i get your teacher remark now, i'm a very detailed writer and love to explain things.😉 Glad you enjoyed my first FF.

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-Nafisa-

@-Nafisa-

Stunner

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Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: sinak
Nafisa that was brilliant. Ahem got a shock of his life. Plz continue

Zor Ka Jhatka, seeing her with his eyes sitting in the office talking on the phone without a care in the world, that's another thing Gopi loves to answer the phone and get in his and Kinjal's way (with that habit of hers), also her skills with the computer, dealing with client requirements and financial reporting. But he was sort of proud of his little wife in the end.

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-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Radhika27
Wow!! very very interesting... am sure Ahem must have thought about catering by having Gopi's mouth-watering dishes.. keep it up!!! and please do continue

Thanks Radhika, the story once i started just seemed to flow really nicely, and wow i didn't even make the connection with Aham's love of Gopi's food, I was thinking more of Aham's character, he will respect a woman who is running a business right? Also what possible business could Gopi run, and how could they (the two of them) link up in day to day running of the business, so that's when i came with the idea for it to be under Modi Industries. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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madhu_sridhar

@madhu_sridhar

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

that was just...brilliant nafisa....and u identified gopi's core talent and u turned that into her profession...and i could just visualise gopi as this slick and smart businesswoman...oh and i loved all that finance and economic jargon...all in all, the gopi u that u hav portrayed in ur ff is a very inspiring gopi modi...thumbs up nafisa👍🏼....pls continue...i want some scenes where ahem and gopi have a very business-like interaction....

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-Nafisa-

@-Nafisa-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: madhu_sridhar
that was just...brilliant nafisa....and u identified gopi's core talent and u turned that into her profession...and i could just visualise gopi as this slick and smart businesswoman...oh and i loved all that finance and economic jargon...all in all, the gopi u that u hav portrayed in ur ff is a very inspiring gopi modi...thumbs up nafisa👍🏼....pls continue...i want some scenes where ahem and gopi have a very business-like interaction....

Thanks Madhu, i'm glad you like it, it was rather long, but i just couldn't say what i wanted to say in few words. Someone else, aah yes Simran mentioned how positive the story was, i was thinking about that first conversation between the two of them and possibly Gopi mentioning to him about the ideas she has been wanting to implement in the business, i will do a bit of research on catering businesses and expansion and perhaps i will write more, however i'm happy with the way it is as i think i have fulfilled what i intended for Aham to accept Gopi, which he has.