(CH4 page 4 )The Phoenix- 7 Years Later FF

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Chapter 000
Author's Forward
Hi! My name is Ronnie, and I live in Sacramento, Ca. This is going to be my first fanfiction.

I am planning on writing a Saathiya fanfiction, but first I'm going to provide some background on why I'm writing it, and explain the context of it. From now on I will update every tuesday starting this tuesday.

Hi guys! I'm going to write a FF about Saathiya, even if I'm not too fond of the show. My mother watches every day though, and when I visit her on break during college, I watch it too. I must say that I now rely on india-forums.com updates to check up on the show. The amount of frustration that I (and pretty much everybody else) feel from watching this show comes from the lack of plot movement. But it would be false to say there is not a plethora of raw material. I think Gopi/Aham have plenty of chemistry, but I think there are some obvious elements that prevent them from actually being compatible, I will list them. :

1. Gopi has been mentally abused by her aunt and cousin , and never received counciling/ treatment. The fact that they treated her illy has never been settled, and she still suffers from their torment. How can she fall in love in this state?

2. Gopi is uneducated while Ahem is very educated. It is too much of a boundary. He cannot relate to her, not even a little. She is highly intelligent and is very perceptive, but she cannot convey this to him because her intelligence shows through her thoughtfull action rather than through her words. Too many uncomfortable boundaries. Ahem is an outright snob/

3. Gopi is too young. She has gone through a lot, but she needs to still mature, and find out who she is. My guess is somebody amazing. Her brave attitude and quick mind are inspirational.

4. Ahem needs to get over that other girl. When I say get over, I really mean it. He needs to see that she isn't a great person, the best way being is marrying her and seeing how horrible she is.

5. Ahem is too much of a mama's boy. He relies on her too much.

Now I am going to tease you all with my premise:

This will take place 7 years later! (Wow, what a surprise based on the title! )

Gopi will no longer be part of the household, and have been divorced for the past 7 years.

Kinjal will have moved to the US with her husband, and her mother is on extended visit, so no Koki for a long while!

The household has no clue where Gopi is or what she has been doing.

Urmila is dead (SHE WILL NOT COME BACK TO LIFE!) She died of cancer 2 years after Gopi dissapeared. In her last days she constantly asked for Gopi, but Rashi could not do anything. Oddly enough, Urmi died with a smile on her face. (WINK WINK) , Rashi is the queen of the house, but she is not happy, she feels constant guilt, and has come to be a very modest person. She has opened up to Jigar about her former self, and the horrible deeds she has done, and he still supports her. They are expecting their second child at the start of my fanfic.

The rest will be revealed through the telling of the story. Expect a chapter one very very soon!
Please give me some feedback! I will love some, I also have some questions , since i'm not a regular viewer

1. How old are Gopi/Ahem on the show? My mom tells me gopi is 18. My guess is that Ahem is college educated so he has to be 22, right?

**EDIT

Let me add something else, Ahem is fresh off his second divorce from Anitha. I'll let you all know how that goes down!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Ronnie!

First off, welcome to the forum!

Secondly, hooray! Another FF! I think the premise sounds really great! Can't wait for chapter one....

-Tammie aka 'mom'

ps -good to see another California Girl here on the forum! If you get time, join us on the GupShup thread once in a while!


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Posted: 14 years ago
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If you don't give me the 1st chapter soon... am sure am gonna die and come haunt you....
which is a very dangerous prospect.... so... when can i expect my first Chapter 😈

By the way welcome dear and don't mind us much... we are a crazy lot, as you might be observing... but we are fun to be with... join the party and lets have fun
Edited by upasana.diya - 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: upasana.diya

If you don't give me the 1st chapter soon... am sure am gonna die and come haunt you....
which is a very dangerous prospect
.... so... when can i expect my first Chapter 😈

By the way welcome dear and don't mind us much... we are a crazy lot, as you might be observing... but we are fun to be with... join the party and lets have fun


@Bold- Ronnie, I'd be very afraid😆... and yes, we are certifiably crazy. I blame Sadhli..🤣
Edited by saomom - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Chapter 1

Note : I have no clue what's going to happen to kinjal, so I won't mention who her husband is yet....



Alive and constantly buzzing, the streets of Kolkata are not for the weak minded. Ahem Modi knows this quite well, since this is his 4th visit here in the past year. In the next few weeks he would be launching the Kolkata branch of his smartphone company. His love life was a great disappointment to his family, so he had to compensate by going above and beyond in every other aspect. He loved his family, but they were beginning to sicken him , he felt alone in his very own house. Even his mother, through thier almost daily skype sessions, was no longer a pleasure, constantly bombarding him with relationship prospects in Chicago. She would flash one of his nieces or nephews to the video camera , to somehow tempt him into starting a family.

"Ahem bhaiya, this is where they are building the preschool for the disadvantaged children."

"And what does this have to do with anything Arjun, are you planning on ditching your management position to teach a 4 year old his ABC's?"

Arjun did not respond to Ahem's small outburst. His boss was showing all of the tell tale signs of being in one of his grumpy streaks. Probably worsened by the fact that it was nearing the one year anniversary of his dirty sensational divorce, that actually cut at the development of the kolkata office. From whispers and gossip, Arjun discovered that Anita, Ahem's former trophy wife, had a steamy affair with her gym trainer, but Ahem did not have the heart to kick her out with anything. She got a flat in Mumbai fully paid, and furnished with a big screen tv, and she lives in it with none other than the same gym trainer. There were plenty of rumors about Ahem. His favorite was that Ahem once had a former wife who died in a freak accident. But Arjun did not judge his boss based off of those rumors.

"Oh, yeah , Ahem bhaiya, we need to repaint the reception lounge, they painted in pastel colors instead of the slate blue you requested."

"My god Arjun, where was Ramujeet when they were painting it? Did you not tell him to check the cans?!"

"But sir, you gave Ramujeet two weeks leave because his mother is sick"

"Well, then lets get it done with and reorder the paint."


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"Sister Margaritte, we have a problem"

"What, did Jadavpur university rescind your admittance into thier pHD program?"

"No, sister, the play room, they painted it this dark blue color, and it looks horrible! I swear I remember requesting pastels in my order form. Its depressing just standing in here. I need to go into the funds and get the room repainted."

"Gopi, you are too nice, just go to the painting company and ask for them to redo the room. Obviously it was not you who made the mistake. And our funding is very limited. Did you look into getting a sponsorship yet?"

"Yes sister , I am looking into it,"

"It's not like you can't speak Bangla, or English, so please ACT on it, and do it soon. There are families dying to get their children into the school."

"Yes sister, we will have a sponsor very soon."

Gopi hangs up her cellphone and sighs. She looks at her half written thesis typed up on her laptop and shuts it.

"I might as well get this sorted out as soon as I can."


**And thats a wrap! I have midterms tomorrow, and thurs. Expect lots of updates soon.





Edited by ronnie4000 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi tammi, aka mom! I love North and South!! And, hi Upsana.Diya, I love Autumn's Concerto. I already like you guys. I really need to catch up with the fanfics, let me now go stalk all of your posts, for a little while.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Ronnie loved the intro of Gopi and Ahem ,
really looking fwd. for it..
woow Dumb girl will now not only speaking English but Bangla also, and also handling all the chores apart from household chores which is the only thing she knew seven years back.
also like their character devlopment esp.. Gopi.., and also loved Ahem part where he is going through crisis in his personal life.. 👏
Edited by sam1903 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thank you Sam! :D

Gopi will have changed a lot, but she is still who she is, silly and constantly taking on chores, but now, we will see her applying that energy on her life's passions. :D As chapters go on I will shape up her character. I am watching random episodes to understand her more.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: ronnie4000

Thank you Sam! :D


Gopi will have changed a lot, but she is still who she is, silly and constantly taking on chores, but now, we will see her applying that energy on her life's passions. :D As chapters go on I will shape up her character. I am watching random episodes to understand her more.


just watch two or three episodes you will easily know her, becoz she hasn't change much there is no character building in show..though its been so many months... and thats what i am hating about this serial😡
Edited by sam1903 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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rofl... you are so right sam

@Ronnie - you can call me Diya and i totally adore Xiao Xiao Bin😊. he is the kind of Kid any mother would be proud of.

I am just gonna read the 1st chapter and will be back to comment as and when i recover😉

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