(CH4 page 4 )The Phoenix- 7 Years Later FF - Page 2

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Go for it Diya :D I hope I get better at writing over time.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow... i really love it... ahem two times divorced.... can't stop laughing poor chap... he himself kicked his good luck out of his house... i am not sympathising with Ahem yet. he has to suffer a bit more...
and Gopi, my sweet, little innocent Gopi, is all confident now... how i adore a confident Gopi...

thank you thank you thank you... for keeping me alive. 😆

you are a gem ronnie
i like the way you write and your style of presenting it...
Edited by upasana.diya - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#13
Arjun is inspired by the voices of this forum, he is the frustrated viewer, and I will steal his sayings from random forum members. Kudos if you catch him quoting anybody.

Chapter 2

"Arjun, go straight to the boss and tell him that you immidiately want the job redone. I don't expect for you to walk out of that building without those conditions met. I should not be telling you this, and I hope I never have to micromanage you to this extent again. There is a reason why I hired you. " A slight smile was evident on Ahem's face. Ahem would trust Arjun with his life. Arjun is the type of guy who quickly analyzes the situation and he always puts in 100%, and he always looks for oportunities for Celluniverse {HEHE thats what I will call the company}

Arjun did not take Ahem's instructions as an insult. But he did wish his boss had more of a life, something else to live for besides the company. He could easily avoid menial tasks like the one at hand, and focus on the executive decisions, and LIVE A LITTLE. Ahem has been so focussed on professional issues that Arjun never had the opportunity to tell his boss about his engagement to Shristi, a teacher who was his childhood sweetheart. But Ahem is clueless about the ways of love. It took one glance for Jigar to know something was up when Arjun was at the manager's conference.

Laughing at himself the young man walks into the paint shop.

With his eyes glued to his smart phone, checking his emails, Ahem did not care for the Riksha that pulled up behind him. He only gave the female figure who pranced into the building a quick glance, for it was too dark to tell who she really was.

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5 years earlier

"She is the ultimate student. Usually a lesson has a beginning and an end, but for her it's just a beginning. We studied Pride and Prejudice and the next thing you know, Gopi is finishing up Northanger Abbey. The girl reads like no other. And her understanding of characters is just, wow! "

Arjun looked at Shristi with doe eyes pretending to pay attention, but really, he was just stunned by her beauty.

"She'll be here in 10 minutes, she is finishing her paper work for her college enrollment. Can you believe she could not read 2 years ago? And now she's about to start college! "

"Oh very nice Auntyy" Arjun smiled coily at his long time beau and winked.

" Hey Chotho , I'm only 2 years older than you, how dare you call me that! So what do you want to order? I heard they have good tika kabob here"

arjun laughed at her random nature

"Shristi madam! I'm in! And look who i've brought!"

Arjun turns around to see a small woman with lively brown eyes. He then makes a double take, standing behind her is a tall, figure. A nun.

Shristi jumped in surprise!

"Sister Margaritte! You made it!"

The two guests make thier way to Arjun's table.

"Arjun, this is sister Margaritte, and this is Gopi, and Gopi, again, please don't call me Madam! We are like sisters in age, and I am no better than you are!"

Sister Margaritte let out loud laughter. Arjun decided at that moment that the tall scary nun was not so scary after all.

"Oh , and ladies, this is my .... friend... Arjun"

If any man in the world was a deflating balloon, it would be Arjun at this point in time.

That day, Arjun made two new friends, and learned much about such a courageous girl, and such an extraordinary woman. A PHD from france in psychotherapy, is now a nun in Calcutta. A woman who worked with Mother Theresa. She introduced Gopi to Shristi, and is responsible for enriching both girl's lives.

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Back to the present

" But sir, pleese, we only have 1 guy on call right now, who only does touch ups! Our chemist is not here either, so we can't even mix the colors"

"Then hire new painters! If not I will... I will.."

"Arjun Bhaiya?"

Arjun turns around to see the female genious wonder.

"Sir give me a minute to call my boss"

"Bhaiya! When will you get married ?! Sister Margaritte and I need to know so that we can plan around the grand opening!"

"Gopi-di , we are taking it slow, our engagement party has not even been planned. Why are you here, at this time?"

"The painted one of our rooms the wrong color, this steel blue that is not appropriate for children"

Arjun bursts out laughing.

"Oh hello Gopi Madam, it seems we made a mistake, we switched your project color with Arjun sir's."

"Kala Ji, can we get our rooms repainted then?"

"Well mam, you see, my men are all at home with their families right now"

Gopi did not drop her sincerety but she did not drop her need " Kala ji, all your men have cellphones, I saw them texting all the time when they work on our school. So call them from thier homes so that they can fix thier mistake. How can you take time out of your already booked schedule? Do you want to push back other schedules to fix our rooms and make even more customers unhappy? Why not just settle it all right now? The receptionist immediately adopted Gopi's logic and called his boss again. In 5 minutes he reemerged from the call.

"The men are on thier way to fix your rooms."

Gopi thanked Kala Ji and excused herself from Arjun.

When she left Arjun looked at Kala Ji and handed him a stack of rupees.

"Make sure you send your faster men to my office, if you do so, I will double this tomorrow."

Ahem was getting impatient. It was taking too long. He steps out of the car and makes his way across the street to the paint store. On his way there he bumps into a small figure who was climbing into a Riksha. A woman. Instinctively he apoligises with an air of annoyance, but he also helps her into the riksha. Her body tightens and she snaps away from him quickly.

"Take me to Behala"

Ahem snaps his head up at the woman to look at her face. Oddly, she is putting her duputta over her head. He starts running backwards to keep up with the Riksha. He is struck by those eyes. Round and filled with fear. Eyebrows furrowed to the point where it might hurt. She is clutching herself. The Riksha hits uncongested trafic and zooms away.

"Am I dreaming?" Ahem starts walking back to his car.

"There you are! The driver told me you got out and randomly chased a Riksha!"

Ahem did not respond to his manager.

"I have a lot to tell you, bhaiya, you won't believe what just happ..."

"Arjun, take the day off, I need to be on my own for a while"

Ahem did not say a word on the ride back to Arjun's house.









Edited by ronnie4000 - 14 years ago
upasana.diya thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
#14
you made Gopi a nun😭
hun don't give me such shocks...

but, very beautifully put...
wonderfullllll....

will wait for more😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
#15
Yay!! One more fF writer! Join the club dear..
Welcome to the forum Ronnie.. Am fiza and I live in the UK..
You are such a skilled writer.. Please keep writing.. You should never stop..lol
I totally loved both chapters..
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Posted: 14 years ago
#16
hello ronnie...
welcome to the forum......and m sadhli.....

lovely FF....and very nice and peaceful to read....love u for this.......

abt Age Aham is 24 years....and Gopis is less than 20 but dont know exact......

thanx for joining the forum and writing such wonderful FF...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#17
hi welcum...i am d african n i'm lookin foward to reading ur FF'S.
PS: Pls write in english alwais..thanx alot.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#18
woohoo more reviews!

I added more to chapter two, please reread it!


Thank you Sadhli for the ages and review!

Gopi is not a nun, but a nun helped her out in life, and she is Gopi's mentor. Gopi is still a devout hindu.

I'm glad you guys like what I wrote so far :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
#19
@ronnie....a small request....
once u update a chapter update the title of this thread as well with the part# and page# so that readers will know u hv updates...

and plz add an index at post#1 also.....

no need of thanx...its always our pleasure to have extraordinary writers on forum...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20
Wow Ronnie...gr8 FF👏. So different. waiting for more.😊

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