DiRa SS: Jaane ki zid naa karo(16+) part 2 on page 2 - Page 3

aww... such a beautiful one!!! I loved this one!! 😃

Originally posted by: Doc.love

😕 NO ONE SHOULD REPORT IT!

If anyone does...that person needs to GROW UP big time!

Angel...honestly this is a very beautiful SS yar.. No one will hate it or report it.. Dont worry..🤗❤️

Originally posted by: DiRa_Love

aww... such a beautiful one!!! I loved this one!! 😃

Par end bhi hogayi😔

Ab kya bolu main😕..It took me a while to stop reading this..I was continuously reading the same thing again and again❤️..You write with so much conviction and power which always take some time for me to settle. Scintillating update dear👏

Late lateefi ke liye maafi sarkaar _/\_
Aap kya likhti hai
Matlab pehle aapne neckline deep rakhi thi, ab aapne backless hi kar diya maamla.
Firstly don't worry at all regarding reporting and stuff, bro yeh kuch nahi hai, people write such scenes on a different level here, I have read them brooo!! 🤣
Ab aate hai hum aapki talented writing pe.
I loved how you portrayed ratan and diya's character here, since love makes you go nuts and hyper in seconds so their ourburst was looking very appropriate! I love intense scenes and I am more than glad you included them. The first update was a buildup and you got it bro!
It got my blood pumpin' but then ofcourse it stopped.
Blood pumpin nahin update ruk gayi! 😆
Okay now coming to the next one.
Aap kya likhti hai
Matlab kaatil! And and anddd I absolutely lovedd that scene, where ratan threw the suitcase away and signalled diya towards the bed and smirked, and then diya jumped on him.
Bro this was kickass. Like kick-ass!
Kya Hot scene likha boss 😆 total hot, bole toh kadakk!! I am sorry but I may embarass you through my comments hahaha
Teri update mein Aag thi dost, aur tune uss aag se humei jala diya.
The writing was crisp, and your main focus was to show their confession but I really liked the story, the way you included ratan's ex-gf's to irritate diya and that too on their date night, it was nice.
Mujhe aisa lag rha hai ki main likhti hi jaau bas haha
Keep writing angel! You are a rockstar!

Originally posted by: pranurosid

Ab kya bolu main😕..It took me a while to stop reading this..I was continuously reading the same thing again and again❤️..You write with so much conviction and power which always take some time for me to settle. Scintillating update dear👏

I was never expected this would turn into such an amazing and intense stuff ..OMG!!! Imagining DIRA in this OS was a great feeling😳 I loved it to the core and hated it too at the same time..Loved it because hey common you already know the reason😉 and hated it because it has ended with just 2 updates..

But I loved this so much that I can't tell you in words🤗

Originally posted by: surbhimathur

Late lateefi ke liye maafi sarkaar _/\_
Aap kya likhti hai
Matlab pehle aapne neckline deep rakhi thi, ab aapne backless hi kar diya maamla.
Firstly don't worry at all regarding reporting and stuff, bro yeh kuch nahi hai, people write such scenes on a different level here, I have read them brooo!! 🤣
Ab aate hai hum aapki talented writing pe.
I loved how you portrayed ratan and diya's character here, since love makes you go nuts and hyper in seconds so their ourburst was looking very appropriate! I love intense scenes and I am more than glad you included them. The first update was a buildup and you got it bro!
It got my blood pumpin' but then ofcourse it stopped.
Blood pumpin nahin update ruk gayi! 😆
Okay now coming to the next one.
Aap kya likhti hai
Matlab kaatil! And and anddd I absolutely lovedd that scene, where ratan threw the suitcase away and signalled diya towards the bed and smirked, and then diya jumped on him.
Bro this was kickass. Like kick-ass!
Kya Hot scene likha boss 😆 total hot, bole toh kadakk!! I am sorry but I may embarass you through my comments hahaha
Teri update mein Aag thi dost, aur tune uss aag se humei jala diya.
The writing was crisp, and your main focus was to show their confession but I really liked the story, the way you included ratan's ex-gf's to irritate diya and that too on their date night, it was nice.
Mujhe aisa lag rha hai ki main likhti hi jaau bas haha
Keep writing angel! You are a rockstar!

Sorry I am late, I am always late 😔

Originally posted by: mrs_weasley

THANK YOU SURBHI 🤗 your words are a great morale booster to me... ❤️ and no none of your comments are embarrassing... not even in the least bit... they're always a treat to read!!! and ik you were busy with your work so you don't need to ask for any kind of maafi for commenting late dear... Also I'm glad that you liked how I portrayed the characters because ik they're both not exactly like this... on some levels I had exaggerated their traits for the story and I thought that it might backfire but it's good to know that everyone liked it...😊

Lastly thank you ki tumne itna time nikal kar itna motivating comment kiya mere liye... You're such a darling Surbhi!! :_* :_*

Originally posted by: nancy505

Sorry I am late, I am always late 😔

ANGEL meri jaan ❤️ it was too intense, it looked more like I was watching a Hollywood movie it never felt to me that I am reading a FF.

It was too beautiful yaar. matlab OH MY GOD wala beautiful.

Now the analysis part...

Diya was herself here and Ratan was also him self. The dialog he said,"jana hai na apko ? jaiya.. chale jaiya..." which actually matches his character. And about Diya, you should her as naive at kissing and don't know how to kiss was most realistic part I think according to her character. Wow, Diya kissed Ratan She was the first to kiss(serial main bhi yahi hua) nahi toh Ratan se toh kuch hota hi nahi hai.

Sorry, so where I was, yes they were kissing and than the rest part. It was bold but it was 16+ and you fulfilled what you promised at first. You made it clean,clear, abridged (bohot jaldi khatam ho gaya 😭), and to the point.

Above all one thing is most bold step according to me , you have the guts to write mature FF in this RLHN forum. I think that was more bolder step than writing any other FF.

Again, you wrote very well, oh my god, I still can not believe you wrote it so beautifully.❤️ I want an autograph. Ayesha neh to nahi di tum hi de do.