KaYa OS : Surrender (2/7)

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

dvmcj

@dvmcj

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Wow! You are a fabulous writer!! Can't imagine the actual scene to be more sensual than what you portrayed. Beautifully written.

Quote

Rashmi37

@Rashmi37

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Thanks ! Hope you feeling better ! Missed your analysis were really looking forward to read your take on the show !

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Suzaina

@Manyata5

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

Awesome yaar..

You rock..

Maza aa gaya..

Itna amazing..

Omg...

I envy your abiloty to write

Quote

Pixiepixel11

@Pixiepixel11

Stunner

+ 31

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Fabulous Avantika...

So glad to have you back dear...

Hope you are fine...And getting better...

Loved it so much.

T.c.

Quote

violette

@violette

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

thnx .. had missed u! How r u feeling now?

Quote

farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Oh this is amazing in so many different levels!!! All that feels!!!!

And truly, you write so very well! Love your command of the language!

Keep giving us more stories to read!!!

Quote

raveena

@ravzs

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

It's a wonderful update

Hope sum tin like tis happens

nice one

Quote

malika

@_symphony

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Just finished reading it...and am I not in awe of your exquisite writing abilities...how can that even be possible?? You seriously bring these two to life Avni. If there's someone after the cvs who u/stands their essence, its you. How beautifully you made them express all their emotions, their pain, their love without any mention of the obvious...the three words. Specially the way he claims his rights back on her by showing his anger and the way she struggles to bare her soul in front of the only man who has the ability to rile her up, Its sheer beauty <3 I feel I have only one term for this OS of yours...intimate! Not just in a sensual way, but the way he tries to explore her deepest emotions by questioning her inability in judging her friend and how she surrenders to his love, ignoring all the rants and shouts the sensible part of her conscious makes...it's pure intimacy at its best!

Thanks so much for this treat before the actual epi...😳

Edited by Malika - 10 years ago

Quote

farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Malika
Just finished reading it...and am I not in awe of your exquisite writing abilities...how can that even be possible?? You seriously bring these two to life Avni. If there's someone after the cvs who u/stands their essence, its you. How beautifully you made them express all their emotions, their pain, their love without any mention of the obvious...the three words. Specially the way he claims his rights back on her by showing his anger and the way she struggles to bare her soul in front of the only man who has the ability to rile her up, Its sheer beauty <3 I feel I have only one term for this OS of yours...intimate! Not just in a sensual way, but the way he tries to explore her deepest emotions by questioning her inability in judging her friend and how she surrenders to his love, ignoring all the rants and shouts the sensible part of her conscious makes...it's pure intimacy at its best!
Thanks so much for this treat before the actual epi...😳

All that she said!!