##THOUGHTS4##[completed!!!pg44] - Page 4

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Posted: 20 years ago
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guys pls tell me how it is framing .if at all it is getting monotonous and boring i will not continue.pls let me know
Edited by rikzik - 20 years ago
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Posted: 20 years ago
#32
Its going gr8 Priyanka 👏 👏 👏......so don't ever think abt stopping it
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Posted: 20 years ago
#33
Priyanka, plz do continue....am waiting eagerly!!!
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Posted: 20 years ago
#34
same here ............plz do cont.
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Posted: 20 years ago
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the music had hypnotised her and now she walked in the direction of the music.......she saw a person ahead robed in loose black clothes with red eyes........laughing......his laughter sounded like a lion roaring..]
ah!ah!ah!now i can find by my power of hypnosis the reason of hate in ur heart.......if i can find that,i can solve many mysteries and then..........


he STAMPED ON ME.....GOD AM DYING....
SORRY GUYS.THE SPIDER IS DEAD SO I CANT CONTINUE FURTHER.
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Posted: 20 years ago
#36
guys if ur still interested in the story, i will continue not from the part i posted but from the previous part 😉
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Posted: 20 years ago
#37
yes Priyanka....plz continue....u cant leave us hanging like this. You've developed the story well and now you cant ditch us at the climax.....
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Posted: 20 years ago
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it so happens that kekta was in the vicinity and she makes the spider walk out of its death bed......[dont ask me how?]..so here i am back guys....ok now here i continue..........
she followed the sound and it was her heart that was carrying her and not her legs.....and then she saw a figure of a person ahead...in his hands was a flute.so this is where the musical flutes came from she thought.she approached the person and her hand touched his shoulders..the person turned.she could not believe her eyes.no .it can't be him...how?no.she stared at him.......why have you come here?tell me why?he asked in his melodious voice......
she couldnt bear all this......off she ran,away from him.she ran until she reached a small spring by the mountain side.her heart was pounding...now her tear filled face showed a tinch of confusion added with a zing of exasperament...she drowned in her thoughts.......
well!after silence that which comes nearest to expressing the inexpressible is music i thought.do i play so badly lati?and i dont think my face is scary that u run away from me!eh?
taken aback by the sudden sound she turned and again got up to run.........
stop lati.......why the heck are u running away from me......listen to me darling.i want to talk to you pls listen to me........
lati:sid.pls.main tumhari layak nahi hoon.dekho mujhe pata hain khi tum log mujhse isliye chidthe ho kyunki main ek snitch hoon.i know i realised it late but mujhe ab pata chal gaya hain ki main kitni badi looser hoon.and i fell the only way to repent is to not have anyone near me.i dont deserve anyone near me....i dont deserve anyone or anyones love.i have not even spared my mom...why?why am i supercilious?why am i so bad........
she broke down......kneeling down.her face covered by her hands.....going near her sid removed her hands.
sid:look here lati.look into my eyes...
lati looked up.....slowly..her eyes resembling the blood red colour of strawberries.......and she saw something in sid's eyes that she had never bothered to notice.something that told her that he really cares.......
sid:look lati i believe.in each human heart are a tiger,apig,an ass and a nightingale.diversity of character is due to their unequal activity.for such a long time u have been behaving like an ass.but now that u feel u r wrong.give urself a chance.activate the better part of ur heart..and u will see for urself a better u and will surprise urself........
lati:but sid.maine sab ko cheat kiya hain.main unki friendship ki kya enemyship ki bhi layak nahi rahi.
sid:now this lati dear is ur challenge.well all this seems like a mountaindue to the small fragments of bad deeds that you have left behind.but u can still try being a river and try eroding the mountain u have created but with a kind heart which i a fountain of gladness and has the potential to make everything in its vicinity to freshen into smiles...
la:but......
sid:but wut kuch nahi.now i want to see the laughter that opens ur lips and the heart,that shows at the same time ur pearls..and ur soul.
la:oh sid!thank u so much.i have suffered and made others suffer so much b'cos of the hatred and jealousy that i had built.i really want to be good now.......
saying this she gave him a hug.......his fingers ran through her hair[she uses rejoice so doesnt get stuck]and he cressed it affectionately.........she looked at him.each and every microsecond of time that she spent with him made her realise the beautiful moments that she had missed all these years..these moments were very special and special they will be......
sids lips braced through her neck.the flesh of his lips created tickling sensation in her body.softly he caressed her neck and his lips started discovering the sensitive parts of her face.he touched her eyes and gave a deep sucking kiss on her cheeks...and off his mouth went to explore her mouth..both their tongues frolicking and playing..both of them strongly lashed it up and down,left and right..and the divine union of soul with soul happened.love is said to be the longing of soul for soul..........
they lay there exhausted and all cuddled up.
sid:lati.wt abt a dip in the spring?.......saying this he picked up lati and together with her he jumped in the spring.
water was splashed on each other rapidly...they dived inside the water and under the water their lips again brushed and lati for a change found the meaning of true love.she understood that without love the earth will be a tomb.......so guys i am off ur lovely spider....but dont forget..........
"THIS LIFE IS BUT THE PASSAGE OF A DAY;
THIS LIFE IS BUT A PANG AND ALL IS OVER;
BUT IN THE LIFE TO COME WHICH FADES NOT AWAY;
EVERY LOVE SHALL ABIDE AND EVERY LOVER."
.............AND LATI MADE EVERYONE UNDERSTAND THAT.....
"THE BUD MAY HAVE BITTER TASTE,BUT SWEET WILL BE THE FLOWER."
QUESTIONS NOT TO BE ASKED:
1]HOW SID LEARNT TO PLAY THE FLUTE AND FROM WHEN HE BECAME SENSIBLE.
2]WHETHER SENSE CAN BE KNOCKED INTO LATI.WELL THATS Y ITS CALLED A FANFIC READ AND TELL ME WHETHER U ENJOYED 😉
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Posted: 20 years ago
#39
hey priyanka....this is soooooo beautiful..loved it...esp the small poems at the end of the fan fics....they r amazing 👏 👏 👏 ....looking forward to more such fan fics from u.... 👏 😃
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Posted: 20 years ago
#40
That was awesome....
You have a different perspective and way of putting things.
I liked the way the story culminated.
Hope to see more of your writing Priyanka!

👏 👏 👏

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