Zilch.. AY oneshot

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Well.. since you might've forgotten me.. i though of a way i could remind you that i'm here lol!! This was written by me for some entirely other purpose.. but as i was going over it, i thought it really suited AY or even TR..

so please read the fic!!.. here it is..

The fire was alight with the strong winds lashing his face. At some other time, he would've made an effort to warm his hands in the fire, but it contained a body. He was currently sitting beside the fire, not daring to look at the ashen body of his wife. Not that he was in denial or in shock, he didn't feel anything. He didn't feel a stab of pain when he heard the news of her death, he didn't feel jealousy at the people who brought her body back, and he didn't even feel like flinching at the fact that her body was burning before him.

In his hand was a piece of paper, maybe that was what had stopped his feelings. He had read it over and over again, it was written by her and her chauffeur had bought it for him.. even the paper evoked no feelings in him. He scanned the paper again, the words seemed to bore into his soul and rip his heart, yet he felt no pain.

Zilch. ..

He was the kind of person who renders you speechless. He was the kind of person who never ceases to amaze you. He was the kind of person whom you just can't help but fall in love with….

I felt zilch for him, at first sight. At first sight, he was just a character, a character with a black tank top, and a stubble. He was surrounded by the police, and all I did was look at the screen blankly in anticipation of a better scene. And that's when I saw his handcuffs. It was a special shot, and I still remember the way the design of his handcuffs was imprinted into my mind. He was defiant, he held his head high in pride, and it was almost ironic that he was bound to just a creation of steel.

Yet, that was when I felt the first pang for him. Slowly, I got to know his name. Yuvraj. Yuvraj Dev. His eyes were jet black and dashing, and when they were pointed at you, you could feel them boring into you. They held a lot of emotion, a lot of pumped up emotion, and as I looked into them, I silently urged them to come out. They didn't. He had a very clear cut face, with a small stubble, muscular body and a pessimistic outlook towards life. Nevertheless, he had a sense of dignity and self respect which I haven't seen in any other human being. That was the moment when I knew that he was unique.

That one word summed him up. Unique. His attitude towards life was simply marvelous. He didn't care about anything. He didn't care what people thought about him. It was as if he had stopped feeling everything. He drank to forget, he drank to wash away all his sorrows. He had lots of faults, lots of low-downs, and yet even after that, I couldn't help but feel that he was real.

He was much closer to reality than many of the physical people I've met. Everything was strange around him He had an aura about him, which spoke all the words that his dark lips couldn't possibly speak. He had a smile which he rarely displayed, and when he did, it was worth a million dollars. I still remember the way his smile lit up his eyes. that was the only time he had displayed emotion, and that was when I was convinced that he is, indeed, human. But most of all, he had a sense of justice. He had a sense of right and wrong, a sense of morality, and a deep, if not angsty, sense of humor. His speeches were passionate, heartfelt and they made you pine. He might've lost a lot of things in his life, with his family problems and a whole period in jail, but he never lost his heart.

He was the kind of person who would do everything for you and when you look back for the last time before going forward in life, he will wink and say, "Told ya." He was the kind of person who will never let you down. He was the kind of person who would whisper, "I love you too" in your ears, and make you realize that you have fallen in love with him. At the end of the day, before going to bed, he made you feel lucky, he made you feel good about yourselves, that in your lives, you have something to look forward to which doesn't include alcohol, military or loneliness. He made you realize that even when the earth is covered with snow, and time becomes static, there is still something out there, something that has a the fierce capability to change your thinking. All you have to do it reach out and catch it.

He folded the paper and laughed.. his laugh was so hollow and bitter to his own ears that he flinched at the irony. He had done everything, when she needed love, he had loved him. When she needed trust, he had given her his own; when she needed care, his shoulder had been there; when she wasn't there, the tears fell unstoppably, and he had always dreamed of the magnificent way to welcome her when she came back..

He intended to do everything; everything for her.. just not in that particular order..

For what was to be the last time in his life, he cried.

Well.. i hope you like it.. I know you've liked it if you comment.. so please doo!! 😆😳

shreyasi

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Posted: 18 years ago
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reserved 😉 😳 gottago 4 sleep now,will pakka edit d post tom.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Wah wah...shreyasiiiiiiii!!!!!!!!! That was awesome awesome awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm speechless...I dunno what to say...it's rarely that I'm so in love with any one shot...or it so amazes me...like this one has done.

This one shot tells so much about AY and yet leaves behind so many questions...about what might and might not have happened....it makes you wonder and think about the past and the future in this story..of which you have given a brief glimpse.

It makes you wonder what yuvi had done to be in jail n all...n how ashi died and why...did anyone murder her...

It is down right mysterious...which is one of the genres which I love the most 😳

I loved ashi's letter the best, which is the high point of the one shot...the way u hv described yuvi...am sure everyone's gonna fall in love with him all over again!

So...amazing work shreyasi! 👏 👏 👏

Lovely 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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goshhhh...i lack words...i seriously lack words to epxress what am feeling after dis...i dnt knw...dis is just....goshh..words are failing me yaar..i swear i just read it and i dnt knw which word is more apt brilliant awesme marvellous all are looking too small for dis....u knw..u hav expressed love in a spiritual way through dis..its just been potrayed as sacred and pious....i am seriously zapped....loved eacha nd every line of it..but the first para was just out of the box....at any given time he wld hav loved to warm his hands in the fire...but it contained a body....i mean oh god,,,who can express smethng as horrorsme as death wid such plane simplicity...its just faaab faab...and den i loved these two paras the most

He was the kind of person who would do everything for you and when you look back for the last time before going forward in life, he will wink and say, "Told ya." He was the kind of person who will never let you down. He was the kind of person who would whisper, "I love you too" in your ears, and make you realize that you have fallen in love with him. At the end of the day, before going to bed, he made you feel lucky, he made you feel good about yourselves, that in your lives, you have something to look forward to which doesn't include alcohol, military or loneliness. He made you realize that even when the earth is covered with snow, and time becomes static, there is still something out there, something that has a the fierce capability to change your thinking. All you have to do it reach out and catch it.
He folded the paper and laughed.. his laugh was so hollow and bitter to his own ears that he flinched at the irony. He had done everything, when she needed love, he had loved him. When she needed trust, he had given her his own; when she needed care, his shoulder had been there; when she wasn't there, the tears fell unstoppably, and he had always dreamed of the magnificent way to welcome her when she came back

out and out its just beaytiful and am actlyy feeling proud to hav been givena n opportunity to hav read it..thaaanx 👏
Edited by smritisashi - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow! that was so sweet!!!!
u had me in tears almost shreyasi...

and i liked the mysterious tinge to it like HArshu said...

and your description of yuvi is so perfect!!! i mean its like a charector sketch of him and rmeinded me how much i luv him 😳 so down to earth and so real...

*sigh* i miss him 😳

and ur writing was just too good... i could feel myself feeling with him every line... luvli 👏

-❤️Ysh❤️-
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Posted: 18 years ago
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oh my god, hatts off to you Shreyasi...man..I'd felt so touched and moved in SIMI's TAMANNA..and after that...its here..this one shot,

😛

👏

👏

you really brought tears and gooses to me dearest, honestly,

I cannot express, the letter that was written,I would have really been

very unlucky if I wouldn't have read this ultra rocking one shot man,

my heart skipped a beat by the letter, the way you have expressed yourself,

I could image each and every statement you wrote,

it penetrated my heart, believe it or not dear,

I was wid an open mouth,

an OUTSTANDING SHOT dearest, really I loved it from my heart,

and especially the letter....I cannot forget it!!!

He was the kind of person who renders you speechless. He was the kind of person who never ceases to amaze you. He was the kind of person whom you just can't help but fall in love with….

I felt zilch for him, at first sight. At first sight, he was just a character, a character with a black tank top, and a stubble. He was surrounded by the police, and all I did was look at the screen blankly in anticipation of a better scene. And that's when I saw his handcuffs. It was a special shot, and I still remember the way the design of his handcuffs was imprinted into my mind. He was defiant, he held his head high in pride, and it was almost ironic that he was bound to just a creation of steel.

Yet, that was when I felt the first pang for him. Slowly, I got to know his name. Yuvraj. Yuvraj Dev. His eyes were jet black and dashing, and when they were pointed at you, you could feel them boring into you. They held a lot of emotion, a lot of pumped up emotion, and as I looked into them, I silently urged them to come out. They didn't. He had a very clear cut face, with a small stubble, muscular body and a pessimistic outlook towards life. Nevertheless, he had a sense of dignity and self respect which I haven't seen in any other human being. That was the moment when I knew that he was unique.

That one word summed him up. Unique. His attitude towards life was simply marvelous. He didn't care about anything. He didn't care what people thought about him. It was as if he had stopped feeling everything. He drank to forget, he drank to wash away all his sorrows. He had lots of faults, lots of low-downs, and yet even after that, I couldn't help but feel that he was real.

He was much closer to reality than many of the physical people I've met. Everything was strange around him He had an aura about him, which spoke all the words that his dark lips couldn't possibly speak. He had a smile which he rarely displayed, and when he did, it was worth a million dollars. I still remember the way his smile lit up his eyes. that was the only time he had displayed emotion, and that was when I was convinced that he is, indeed, human. But most of all, he had a sense of justice. He had a sense of right and wrong, a sense of morality, and a deep, if not angsty, sense of humor. His speeches were passionate, heartfelt and they made you pine. He might've lost a lot of things in his life, with his family problems and a whole period in jail, but he never lost his heart.

😛

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Posted: 18 years ago
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lovely, beautfiul, heartwarming n romantic...i loved it!...ur work is too beauitfiul shreyasi...!.... 😳 ...keep writing... 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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OMG!! OMG!! OMG!! I liked it?? nooooo... i loved it!☺️ I dunno what to say shreyasi... you are sooo talented and wrote this soo beautifully that I am speechless... there is noo words in my dictionary that will reach up to your this one shot!☺️ It is soo touchy☺️ I am definatly moved with each and every word of it😳😳😳 Me too was in tears😭😭 you are soo damn talented yaar... just loved this shot soo much And like harshu said... it surely is mysterious...very much mysterious... like them me too kept on wondering about past and future... and this is what i luved about it... now i can think and wonder about it at school☺️☺️😆 and day dream ☺️ and night dream too☺️☺️ And the best part was ashi's letter Just awechum and this is what i luved the most ☺️

He was the kind of person who would do everything for you and when you look back for the last time before going forward in life, he will wink and say, "Told ya." He was the kind of person who will never let you down. He was the kind of person who would whisper, "I love you too" in your ears, and make you realize that you have fallen in love with him. At the end of the day, before going to bed, he made you feel lucky, he made you feel good about yourselves, that in your lives, you have something to look forward to which doesn't include alcohol, military or loneliness. He made you realize that even when the earth is covered with snow, and time becomes static, there is still something out there, something that has a the fierce capability to change your thinking. All you have to do it reach out and catch it.

Basically I loved the whole letter as it really made me fall in love with yuvi all over again...but this part touched me the most☺️☺️ and in that this one"He was the kind of person who will never let you down. He was the kind of person who would whisper, "I love you too" in your ears, and make you realize that you have fallen in love with him. At the end of the day, before going to bed, he made you feel lucky, he made you feel good about yourselves, that in your lives, you have something to look forward to which doesn't include alcohol, military or loneliness. " But all in all... it is just heart touching... when you descried yuvi character... i myself don't know how much I blushed ☺️☺️☺️ but i know that i did a lot☺️☺️ But on the other side, ashi is dead makes me cry😭😭😭 And this is what i love about your AY fics and shots😳😳 that it just touches you soo much☺️☺️ And trust me... i believe that you are one of the most talented writers on RF😳😳👏 and pleej continue writing awesum one shots like these...coz I love reading your shots☺️ and now am eagerly waiting for your next bullet of shot which will surely be another unimaginable and mind-boggling one shot☺️☺️ Love yaa🤗 and thanks for writing such an amazing one-shot👏

Edited by *nitz_rocks* - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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u have bought tears to my eyes......n undoubtedly this is the BEST one shot i hav ever read .....just like the rest me too speechless....atleast 4 the moment......NO-ONE has described yuvi so beautifully ever before.....n just as harshu said .....u indeed made me fall in love wid him all over again......each n every word u wrote about uv was true to the core......nd the fact tht ashi wrote it was even more awesum......who else in the world cud know him ne better!!!......nd im sorry to say bt at the moment i am not feeling bad tht ashi is dead in ur fic.....rather im feeling so much more worse 4 yuvi who will hav to survive a lifetime widout her!!!
the BEST one shot i've ever read......
thank u so much shreyasi 4 describing yuvi so beautifully.....nd thank u again 4 reminding me y i luv tht guy or rather tht character the most amongst all!!!hes the one who has the most number of flaws amongst all the others perhaps.....bt still hes real n human ....which is wat u wrote.....n wat i luv the most abt him!!!.....he may lost everything bt he dint loose his heart...... he rarely smiled bt wen he did it was like million dollar smile which lit up everything ......n this line is just so awwww
He was the kind of person who would do everything for you and when you look back for the last time before going forward in life, he will wink and say, "Told ya."

luv ya soooo much my dear YUVI.....u will always b my hero!!!🤗
n luv ya lotss n lotts too shreyasi 4 this🤗🤗🤗

a very proud yuvi fan😳
rakhi

Edited by rakhi_uv - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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u knw waat shreyasi i read dis again right nw and it felt am reading it for the first time am exactly goiing through d same feelings...yesterday after reading dis i dont knw bt smethng realy happend to me i felt low and yet happy i felt damm weired and am feeling the same right nw again i realy wanaa cry hard but i cant cry all d sadnes is jus spread on my lips as a bitter sweet smile aad all i can think is daat yes ashi uv perhaps are the most ruthlessly true and real incarnations of love...as all hav said it this is by far he bestes ashi uv one shot ever ever ever written and i dnt knw why but it has touched me deeply u deserve a standiing ovation for dis one and if u had been here wid me i wld hav hugged u hard for a long time 🤗 u rock babes u realy do u hav made us all fall in love wid dem againa nd hav mad us proud to be deir fans coz dey r so dwn right real and UNIQUE..just like dis one....

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