Single Line Remix story - Page 16

hi

i am sumi

just read ur whole story

its really interesting. i can even imagine the whole scene visually

i just want to add few more ideas

like for the birthday i wud suggest

1.)ranveer wishes tia first by coming in the room like he did when they first cofess their love for each other.

2.)he kisses tias forehead and wishes her

3.)he close her eyes and make her cum with him

4.)when tia open her eyes they r in canteen and ranveer brings a cake .

5.)tia cuts the cake and feeds ranveer and ranveer also feeds her

hope u like the suggestion plz write sumthing on this

bye take care

hey nnow you ppl just rock im not able to thon of something good enough.so lamina could u plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz comtinue

Originally posted by: tia_mehra

hey nnow you ppl just rock im not able to thon of something good enough.so lamina could u plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz comtinue

same prob.lamina plz cont..may b i can cont after u but plz write one part

esha

how abt adding a small twist...arjun planning revenge....of course it will go flat...coz dont want tia and ranveer to be separated even for a minute now...what do u say...???

T: Ranveer aab sab kitna accha lagne laga hai....saab thik ho gaya hai..na

R: ha tia...hum sooch bhi nahi saakte the ki saab kuch intne jaldi thik ho jayega...hume laaga tha ki aap hamare pyaar ko kabhi nahi samazh payengi...hum aapke saath kabhi nahi reh payenge

T: Ranveer...Tia is sorry...Tia didnt mean to hurt you..Tia tumhe aur tumahre pyaar ko samazh ti hai...bas tia ko aapne pyaar ka izhaar karne main thodi der lagi...aur phir tumhare dil ki baat Tia kaise nahi samazhti...Tia love you so much

R:Aab lag raha hai love is in the air...hum mil gaye...aman or vrinda jinhe hum milana chahte the woh saath hai...aur varun bana or MP bhi

T:Varun aur MP (shocked)...ha saab saath hai..par

R: par kya hua Tia

T:Ranveer, Tia is worried about Pri..woh Aditya ko bohot like karti hai...Tia wishes woh dono bhi saath hote..

R: Tia, kyun na hum unhe saath laane ki koshish kare

T: Ranveer tum Tia ke liye inta karoge

R: Tia hum aap ke liye kuch bhi kar sakte hai...aap hamari princess jo hai..aur phir Pri bhi toh hamari dost hai

T: Oh Ranveer! you are so wonderful..inhi saab baton ke wajah se Tia tumhe inta love karti hai

Tia hugs him tightly...and Ranveer holds her in his arms

Meanwhile...some distance away..arjun is watching the two hug and getting jealous and angry by the minute

A: Is Sissodia ka kuch karna padega..aur jaldi

now arjun had made up his mind dat he wud any how take revenge..

he called up one of his men and said ranveer sisodia ke baare main jo bhi info hai dhund ke lao..

in ranveers room aman is confused he had heard arjun talkin 2 sum1 regardin ranveer

he goes 2 ranveer and tells him...aman says u betta tell tia wht happ wid ur dad n dat sumeet ahuja was responsible n dats y u had 1st dated tia..until u realised dat u really loved her...ranveers says dat he cannot afford 2 lose tia again

outside da room arjun is smilin as he knows how 2 get his revenge

hi ppl i am kajal,i am just trying to take the story with 4 of them together

its the night before tia's and ashi's birthday

on one hand tia is very happy that on this birthday she has got everything and on the other hand ashi is very very much upset as she lost her first love( she doesnt blive yuvi)

the guys:ranveer very much tensed up bcos he knows if he tells the truth and he will lose tia again,whereas on the other hand yuvi is elated and starts composing the song which he promised to make it 4 ashi

ppl this is the situation so plz cont frm here

well i am bad at dialogue writing

hey guys ! this is the first time i am ever writing some dialogues so please bear it and tell me how u found them .. good or bad ..
tia and ranveer
tia is really very happy for she has everything on her birthday ..

she wakes up on her birthday when she finds out that ranveer is sitting next to her on her bed with a huge cake for her ..

tia is very happy ..

then ranveer and tia share a cosy moment and after that they both go to the cafe where tia finds out that raveer along with sonia aunty pri and meher has planned a surprise party for tia ..

then tia thanks ranveer for all he had done for her and kisses him ..

tia thought that this ws the best day of her life .. as she knew that she ws goin to spend the rest of the day with ranveer ..


sorry i know it ws pretty sad .. what i wrote ..

im absolutely terrible at this but im jus giving it a try.tell me if its really bad plzzz.

yuvi sings the song for ashi at her birthday party nd ashi feels slightly better but is not completely convinced and just walks off cause she wants to be alone.

then yuvi follows her...

tia-ranveer

tia and ranveer get away fom the party and go to the garden