my first fanficplz completed

here gys is my first fanfic.
yuvi and ranveer as usal go up to their trips.but this time they try to becom bachendri pal part two.both of them are ready and they kiss their gfs the two sisters and say goodbye and move a head.they have a gr8 journey.they reach the mt everest.they were very excited and decided to climb the mountain the next day.
they did not a good sleep at all.they also called up the sisters and the sisters bid them good luck.
next day it was early morning .when the 2 got up got themselves ready for the trip.
they set their foot outside the guest house suddenly a mountain cat stepped across them.their hostess asks them to stop but ranveer says
r:banaa chaliye na.
y:hum ye sab me nahi maante hain.cmon lets go dude.
h:rukiye mat jaayein
but the two walk away without taking much notice

inform if u like it or if u dont too.

i can ask any of the mods to close it then

yeah... go on

but i didn't get the sisters part... what's up with that?

and plz bring anvesha into this!!! 😳

PS: when yuvi says "c'mon let's go dude", i actually thought i heard him say that... i must be going loony

remixfan , u need not dicontinue the story coz the only thing which we request is that there should not be an vulgarity in the story ,i.e it needs to be in the forum limits thats it

we always encourage fanfics or any creativity by the members here
anyways plzz post a bigger part so that we can come to know what story or atleast have an idea of it

im sorry i thought someone would not like it so i wrote a small one

keep guessing the sister part too.

ok heres it.
they move a long way frm the guest house.then ranveer takes out the map to see the direction.then he says
r:hum istara chalte hai banaa.
y:no ways dude.were gng the other way around.
then they begin fighting.suudenly theres a heavy wind and blows the map away.
Y:ab hum kya karenge
then after a little amt of argument they decide to go straight.
then they pass a gr8 heap of snow but will take no notice.
{but hw cld they realise that the danger started there}
after walking for a while
r:hum thoda dhere rukenge banaaa
Y:ur right
these guys had already reached a gr8 height
then suddenly yuvi felt somthing suddenly and looked nerviously towards ranveer .but he sees no reaction frm ranveer.and thinks it is his own imagination.

what does "bachendri pal " mean???

who are the two sisters???

remixfan....I think you've got a good strong storyline ...but plz make it a little more narrative....then the story will actually arouse more curiosity & excitement of readers.

Gr8 work....love reading fan fics!
Also, cud u plz explain the sisters bit?