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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: aliyaraj
very well written - intense and describes their emotions perfectly, please continue!!

Thank you Aliya for your feedback. 😊 So glad that you think I've managed to stay true to PaRud. And I will try my best to write the rest.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: NavyaKavya30
Good work...please keep it up...👏

Thank you and delighted you liked it. 😊

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pree_28

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Posted: 10 years ago

#13

RR was an intense passionate love story.. and you captured its essence pretty well 😳
You should write more.. as rudra paro love story addict i would love to read about them 😛
Nice work.. 👍🏼

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: psagars
Sabs,That was awesome.

So the scene is like Paro being caught in the desert by Rudra after her running away from the Haveli.

Such a vivid description of whats going on in Paro's mind. Like a scene unfolding before my eyes. Paro's defiance to his closeness, her desire for his closeness, her helplessness against her feelings, her concern for her jija, her want for that something more, just wonderful.

You should write more often. Now we know Paro's thoughts. So now greedy for what is going on in Rudra's mind.

Thank you Reshma for you detailed feedback. 😊 I love that you've made the effort to tell me the impact. And you are spot on with your interpretation and analysis. So glad that I was able to communicate just that with the piece. And yes this one was all about Paro. I will try and mine Rudra's mind next although after some rest. 😊

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RangParud

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Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Hey

It is a wonderful description about parud.

If you can please translate the hindi dialogues in English.

Please continue the story.😛

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Posted: 10 years ago

#16

This is brilliant. One can feel the intensity in the words that was last seen in the first few months of the show.
Do write more.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Guinea
Wow 😃

Beautifully written ...brings back the intensity that the show had in the first 3-4 months .

Loved it ...ah what memories ...rangrasiya ...sigh ...

Thank you, Guinea, and for responding to my pm.😊 The first few months were indeed special - all that tension, the internal struggle the outward struggle and all that sizzling chemistry!! Sigh!

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: Anisha.
Beautiful Sabs!!
Why did this wonderful show have to end? Sigh!

You have beautifully captured the intensity of PaRud of the first 3-4 months of the show...

Thank you Anisha. 😊 Just delighted that you enjoyed it. To me, PaRud cues intensity by default. Even from before the serial started, in the promo stage, there was intensity. They could have easily kept RR going for another year - they had so much story to tell. But alas! Sigh!