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Posted: 11 years ago

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JJ this is awesome dear. Felt so happy reading it. I really the story is taken forward this way.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Very nice .. waiting for the next chapter.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: zeffy2k2
Hey nice one JJ! Loved the last part.
If I may suggest something, hope you do mind and please do not take it in the wrong way.

The bit where Rudra is watching the tape, rewinding and then you mentioned Dhruv's coughing brought him back to reality, according to the show - Rudra was in Myrah's room, alone, Dhruv was with Myrah, in Rudra's room. I know it is a fiction, and you are allowed to tweak things, but I presume that you went with the scenes depicted and did a splendid job. I feel you were testing us as readers, maybe? Not sure at this moment!😳

We do not know what he saw and hope the CVs do not brush it aside, leave a gaping hole. You did an amazing job with blending our thoughts and the story recollection, as well as future progression.

Zeffy,

Thanks for the comments and glad you liked it. I watch the episodes once and then from memory I am trying to put them together. So there are some mismatches and omissions of course. I was not testing you all as readers 😆

It is creative amnesia which can be labelled as creative liberty 😉

I posted chapter 2 today. Please have a look

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Malini1
Nice writeup, loved reading it. Hope we'll get see something like this in the show too.

Thanks Malini. I am till hoping to get a better version of the CVs. It is not over till it is over - right ?

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: ps_rocks
I really want this to happen in the show.

😛 Maybe you will get something better
Did you read Chapter 2 ?

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: babyji
Very nice JJKKL ...can't wait for the next chapter.

Done already posted. 😆
Happy you liked it.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: arishma108
this is so apt, you have handed the cvs a get out of jail free card, with Rudra just being able to stumble over the fact that he instantly realises its Paro with amnesia, with time slipping through all our hands, to be able to end in this manner, would be fine for me👏

We just have to see whether they will use this card or their own card to get out of the pickle they are in. No wonder they show so much of pickle business in the episodes.

Update chapter 2. Please let me know your views.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Omg dat was so sensitive n sweet of u..make us desperate rrsians fulfill dat one last dream...million thanx JJ...

am an emotional wreck nowadays..n teared up reading this...Thanx again..

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JJKKL

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: --POV--
Traveling, managed to read. will comment in detail after the weekend
BTW, loved it 😃

Why are you always travelling ? 😉
Just kidding. Travel is so much fun. Enjoy...

Loved it ? Thanks a lot POV.

Will wait for your comments. Wrote chapter 2 also

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Posted: 11 years ago

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