FF: The Beautiful and the Condemned (Completed) - Page 16

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GAWD.

I was grinning so WIDE when I saw a PM from you in my inbox. This was.. I don't know. I'm just in awe. The fire, the storm, the comfort, Rudra and Paro. This chapter, is the beginning of this FF, the heart of it. Here, after being acquainted for a few days now, they have just somewhat introduced themselves to one another. I love the way you snuck in the two perspectives of their lives; beautiful and condemned. And who noticed that? None other than our Rudra. It's not only his heart that's thawing.. his mind is slowly unraveling. Somehow, he's beginning to be human again.

I'd say the fire symbolizes Paro's connection to him. It's their spark. Their past and their future. It's sheer genius that in the show she was afraid of fire but then after Rudra, she wasn't anymore. And here you've used fire again, but not as mark of her fear, even greater than that, Parud's past. Again, their spark. (Lol, I can't help but sound nerdy whenever I write these feedbacks :p Khair)

The fire incident is the one thing I believe, that's thawing his heart for her. No one would understand his pain anyways, unless they had gone through the same thing. Dangerous though, this could change his mentality on Tejwat. (ooohw snap)

Paro and her fear of a storm was brillaint I thought, something finally brought them together. The personification of rain as Bolenath tears along with Paro.. ugh.. beautiful.

The next chapter better not be the last.. and the 'death' better be Varun's! Don't think you'd kill our Parud in this FF.. you're way kinder and appreciative of them than the CV's are haina!! *puppy-eyes*

Anyways, I would've written more to emphasize just how much I enjoyed this chapter, but I think words fail me.. and I have tried! :p

Thank you:

1.) for giving us another early update.. such a beautiful surprise.

2.) PM'ing me.

3.) being so encouraged to write, it shows within your work! ;)

Nothing is making me look forward to monday than the next chapter.. otherwise I'm no big fan of uni ;p

CHEERS! x

I also loved the sharing of Paro's story. This connects them, and this empathising with Rudra attracts him to Paro further because she's the only one that's been able to reach him, to affect him. You did brilliantly dude!

And a death?? Hopefully it's Varun's the little shit. Or maybe you'll try role reversal? Perhaps Rudra will be attacked and it's up to Paro to care for him? Maybe some more romantic moments? Either way I am super excited and super hooked onto this