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Varsha Dutt

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Posted: 11 years ago

#61

wow... lovely series... 😊

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Meena

@chotidesi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#62

Unres:

AT- I've always told you that I love your writing, and that hasn't changed. Your writing is so lyrical and easy to read- I love reading it. It's smooth, and flows like a river. I really liked the way you had the parallelism, the repetition of words and themes- that's something I'm very partial to, as both a writer and a reader, and I absolutely loved how you did it.

Zara- When you put Rudra into the battle, I thought he was going to die. I was going to bring out my chappals- but he didn't, and I"m very happy. I can see Paro in this situation, the worry- and then the tenderness that follows. I like how he was gruff with her, but then transitioned into a gentler Rudra that loves the peace on his sleeping wife's face.

I'm SO sorry for the insane amount of time it took me to unres- Love you both!

Choti

Edited by chotidesi - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: chotidesi
Unres:

AT- I've always told you that I love your writing, and that hasn't changed. Your writing is so lyrical and easy to read- I love reading it. It's smooth, and flows like a river. I really liked the way you had the parallelism, the repetition of words and themes- that's something I'm very partial to, as both a writer and a reader, and I absolutely loved how you did it.

Zara- When you put Rudra into the battle, I thought he was going to die. I was going to bring out my chappals- but he didn't, and I"m very happy. I can see Paro in this situation, the worry- and then the tenderness that follows. I like how he was gruff with her, but then transitioned into a gentler Rudra that loves the peace on his sleeping wife's face.

I'm SO sorry for the insane amount of time it took me to unres- Love you both!
Choti

LOL he did die. and so did Paro. 🤣

Edited by -Zara- - 11 years ago

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Meena

@chotidesi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: -Zara-

LOL he did die. and so did Paro. 🤣

WHAT SERIOUSLY?! I THOUGHT THEY WENT TO SLEEP. I ACTUALLY- ;alskdfjpwoielfsdknz I HATE YOU.

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603840

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Posted: 11 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: chotidesi

WHAT SERIOUSLY?! I THOUGHT THEY WENT TO SLEEP. I ACTUALLY- ;alskdfjpwoielfsdknz I HATE YOU.

sorry sis, but at least their in heaven if you understood the second part of it...but then again I guess you didn't or else you would have understood the first time round...*slaps forehead* MAN I SUCK!.😆

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Meena

@chotidesi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#66

No, no, I think I just didn't read it carefully enough- I reread and it made perfect sense. I really liked it, actually.

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Bioinfo_Chaitu

@Bioinfo_Chaitu

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Posted: 11 years ago

#67

feeling 😭 and this 👏 at the same time..am unable to find any words to congratulate u at ur magnificent victory over our emotions , this part of navrasa made me cry like hell.Feeling this feeling of loss after a long time and all thanks to u for making me realize my heart cries too ...thanks for the update :)

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desisweetheart9

@desisweetheart9

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Posted: 11 years ago

#68

Thanks for the PM. Amazing OS.

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Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#69

Zara - When I got to know from the comments that you had killed them both.. I started prolonging my reading of this piece. I am a very weak hearted person and I take grief to my heart very seriously and then wallow around days and nights just because I have read something sad.

When at first he saw her in the battlefield, my tears were on the brink. As I knew ab kuch accha nahi hoga.

And though that thought was haunting me throughout, I kept on reading. (masochist I am becoming)

And what happened? The lump in my throat got bigger and bigger, until they reached heaven.

Even in heaven, you didn't stop torturing me, as Paro went to sleep. Rudra's fear... the depression... the absolute utter need for her to open her eyes was so palpable, I was holding my breath til she opened her eyes.

And then, like Rudra, I was at peace too.

Thank you for the amazing read, love!

I hope this series gets out of hiatus soon. I need to read more from you awesome peeps!