Four Shot: SAY GOOD-BYE--Part 3, Pg 26 (updated--June 17th) - Page 19

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Posted: 11 years ago
The story is progressing very well...please continue...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Navin! another brilliant update - sure he had to wait for it - but it was more than worth the wait!
Wow - the devastation Paro has left behind - all the little things she did for the others ( written in such superb detail by you) makes thr pain even worse - and I can understand that Rudra is in shock)
I think this time the pain is so deep - that he has made himself numb to it - the only way not to submit to the pain and madness is to simply go numb - it is a much more horrific and understandable reaction to a huge loss of this type - it's like the brain and haert can't register what has happened

There is a light in dear Aman though - maybe he will find Paro - I sincerely hope so ( and so glad Aman ans sunehri are together in this one!)

Your writing is so brilliant - that of course I crave a happy ending - as I know it will be equally intense - these two need to be together - neither of them are any good apart - maybe that is Paro's gift to the Major - little clues as to where she might be so he can bring her back!


and i am so glad you are still on this forum and hiral's note was brilliant - I can't wait to read your posts fiction and non-fiction and am happy you decided to stay and make it your forum as much as anyone else's!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
This was so brillia
Even I'm so scared about what's in that letter
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Posted: 11 years ago
I just Love the way you write .. it just flows with emotions
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Posted: 11 years ago
Was so thrilled when I got an email notification that told me you had updated. I honestly thought that you were not going to update this and it would have been okay too (the first too parts were very rewarding for me as a reader), but I am now glad that you did.

You paint some a picture with your words, I know that I am not exaggerating when I say this that you are definitely one of the best fanfic writers I have ever read. This update was so... heartbreaking and beautiful. It more than made up for the rather choppy turn that the story took with this track with the whole suicide drama (I enjoyed it, but emotionally it wasn't that satisfying because it didn't take me inside Rudra and Paro's head that it should have.. plus, was a cop-out). I did expect that if Paro left a note to someone, it would be for her father.. they just have that kind of relationship somehow.
Your portrayal of Paro and Rudra in all your stories is far more layered than the show has ever been or will be. Thank you. Sorry about the gushing.
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Posted: 11 years ago
*Channeling ASR*
Don't you DARE leave, did you hear me!! 😡


OK that aside (phew), update was HEARTBREAKING! Everyone except Rudra got something, of course no parting gift for Rudra would have lessen the pain. Had this scene played out in the show, i would have cried.

Waiting for the next update! Ummm, is Paro pulling a JWM and hiding in the haveli till the coast is clear?
Edited by aruni50218 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
And she finally left... OMG you captured all their emotions so well that I feel all their pain... wish something like this happened in the show as well... but who cares we have you and your writing makes up for all that the show isn't.
Paro made sure everyone found their gifts and she put so much thought into them making them realize that she is always a part of this family but this time not physically. Such a shocking and sad day for all... I believe Paro is equally sad and hurting for leaving them...but hope shes safe.
I loved Aman in this update... with all the pain and hurt he still managed to be alert and begin the search for Paro... a true brother who wants his sister to come back
An emotionless Rudra is scary and I hope he doesn't take all that he is feeling against Paro... he should by now understood she loves his family.
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Posted: 11 years ago
I love love love this story. Yes please, to hell with the negative trolls. You and other talented people just keep writing and we'll comment and those toxic posts will be lost in a sea of awesomeness. Ameen.
I don't know what to say. You have written these characters so brilliantly, you have woven this story so beautifully. I'm speechless. Just know that I'll keep an extra box of Kleenex next to me while reading part 4 :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
I had actually sworn off fanfics after the end of the show that must not be named,but then i read the yesterday and tomorrow series just a couple of days back and i couldnt remember why i did so(the seld-imposed ban,that is😃).You my dear baisa are gifted,i always read your character takes,then on a boring sunday afternoon,read the tomorrow part of Rebirth.Then I read all of the yesterday and tomorrow series,then I decided to read every scrap of writing you ever wrote and came to this four-shot.I would gush about the yesterday and tomorrow series on its dedicated thread,lets just say I became a fan of the series.Coming to this,I actually expected the show to take a direction similar to this.Though i was okay with the original version,I like how this version has captured the effect of Paro's departure and how it includes everyone in the haveli.It's like the aftermath of a tornado.I was kinda disappointed that it hadnt been updated for long,but then hamare bhagya ki ghanti baji aur update haazir hua.I cannot put in words what or which part i liked about this or any other fanfics of yours i have read,because i liked Every.Single.Thing.But all I will say is,if you are ever worried about the length of your update,dont. Because you write so delightfully,the more the merrier😆 and if you are ever put off by the negativity,please remember all those souls waiting for the update,wondering where you went. Because,your fics add so much to the experience of watching the show,and its only through you lovely writers that fans of the show get to live through all the should have beens and could have beens,which is such a wonderful thing about this forum.

Just noticed the post length,sorry about that.😳
Edited by stp007 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Loved it...absolutely LOVED it!!!

and thank god (or thank you hiral?) you're sticking around 😊



Viji

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