OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Jallad (completed) *mature content*

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sardeeeeeep

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Posted: 11 years ago

#131

Originally posted by: napstermonster

You dont want to even...??? hehehe...I'm totally confused. Enlighten me oh suds...(I hope I'm teasing my old friend Suds with questions about what she simply CANNOT do after reading a hot-wala One Shot----if not, egg will be meeting face momentarily...)

Is this how you reply?

I pressed the quote thing, hope it works. i haven't been on here since forever, I've forgotten everything.

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i just cant, every coherent thought has left my mind.

Its all just like asdfghjklasdfghjk; and this yesterday/tomorrow thing is sO DAMN GOOD <3

I apologise if i don't make any sense, I'm high pepsi and about 10 nurofens right now.

This was so damn good though. Im very flustered.
Congratulations on breaking my brain with the hotness and the cuteness and the everything.

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Radhika

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Posted: 11 years ago

#132

Okay so I thought I'd read the entire series first and then comment, and mind you NM bannasaa you've just made me go all gaga. It was like, I could imagine it all happening- whether Paro hurting while being mercileslly tortured or while she went through immense pleasure. Vividly written series, seriously. It was like fire and ice, both at the same time!

um, can I go a little critical, though?
Your Hindi reminds me of certain Nand Kishore a.k.a N.K, I'm sorry not being sarcastic it was just, I found it cute and funny *hides my face and runs away*

Jokes apart, you've really really poured out emotions so well.
Oh, boi! Take a Bow. :D

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Navin

@napstermonster

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Posted: 11 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: fire_whisky
Okay so I thought I'd read the entire series first and then comment, and mind you NM bannasaa you've just made me go all gaga. It was like, I could imagine it all happening- whether Paro hurting while being mercileslly tortured or while she went through immense pleasure. Vividly written series, seriously. It was like fire and ice, both at the same time!

um, can I go a little critical, though?
Your Hindi reminds me of certain Nand Kishore a.k.a N.K, I'm sorry not being sarcastic it was just, I found it cute and funny *hides my face and runs away*

Jokes apart, you've really really poured out emotions so well.
Oh, boi! Take a Bow. :D

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Radhika

Yaar, I'm a dyed in the wool Bangladeshi--not even a Calcutta chokri, with their dual languages! My (admittedly terrible/totally hodgepodge) Hindi is derived from a childhood watching repeats of Diwale Dulhaniya Le Jayenge, every Hindi Pop song that DID'NT make it big in Mumbai and ended up on Dhaka's streets and bad Doordarshan telecasts! Just you wait, woman--aaj ke baad, all Hindi dialogues will get PMed first to you !😆😆😆

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Radhika

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Posted: 11 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: napstermonster

Yaar, I'm a dyed in the wool Bangladeshi--not even a Calcutta chokri, with their dual languages! My (admittedly terrible/totally hodgepodge) Hindi is derived from a childhood watching repeats of Diwale Dulhaniya Le Jayenge, every Hindi Pop song that DID'NT make it big in Mumbai and ended up on Dhaka's streets and bad Doordarshan telecasts! Just you wait, woman--aaj ke baad, all Hindi dialogues will get PMed first to you !😆😆😆

Awe.. No No, I wasn't complaining... ☺️ And woah you're from Bangladesh amazing!
And, I'd be obliged to review the hindi translation anytime you want! 😆🤗

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Archie

@_SilverLining_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#135

Great writing...Made me go all awww for a change 😳
U r a rockstar!!!! napsterrockstar 😃

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gabrielle14

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Posted: 11 years ago

#136

Such an amazing and passionate OS napstermonster.I loved the way you had written about what Paro had always wanted ,but her Bholenath gave her more than what she had asked.The passion between Paro and Rudra can only happen between two soul mates who were tuned to each other..Thank you for writing such an wonderful OS👏👏👏.

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javeria

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Posted: 11 years ago

#137

Love the story.

I am loving and enjoying a lot reading your all stories

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Payali09

@Payali09

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Posted: 11 years ago

#138

Hee hee "Jallad" 😳

Okay, now that I have a had a blushy giggle...I will revert to being a stalkery reader. 😛

From a term of distate to a term of endearment...it's amazing a journey that two people can take.

I had initially thought after reading the title in the sneak peek that you might choose to show the 'jallad' aspect of Rudra's character through the terrible torture sessions. You write those exceptionally well and I had mentally girded myself to read this in Yesterday's Jallad segment. So imagine my surprise reading about Paro's wish to visit the annual mela and Rudra's desire to accompany her... Love it when the unexpected happens!

He acted on his animal instincts and cornered his prey waiting for her to give in. But Paro is no wilting flower and refused to get involved. It sucks that she had to go to such an extent to stump him but it's unsurprising that she's taken that step. Rudra being upset and anxious about Paro's non-participation in their battle and then finally revealing his real intentions was my favourite part. And I feel the CVs too if we go by the recent teasing, crying, cold shoulder and then a promised treat to manao his unhappy lady.

As for the tomorrow part of the Jallad...whilst the garam garam sections where most definitely garma garam 😳 I loved the reflective Paro thinking about the Jallad in her life. How his presence has changed her life and opened up her world. He gone from being just a Jallad to her own Jallad...her husband, her love and her protector.

Although quick question...any chance of getting a glimpse of the Jallad and the Title at the mela in later stories???? 😳