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Posted: 14 years ago
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Mahi ..great one and Dharam's entry was good..do continue it..loved it
@'suddenly found himself dropping the carry bags in his hand on the floor and covering himself up crossing his hands' 😆😆
I could so imagine Shaan in this scene ..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: pree.mahi

Veena updated the last 2 paras, to express what was going on in our burthals mind.

Mahi... i just read it.. it is awesome.. great job!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Continued from page 1 ...
As they are going in the car, khanak does not dare to look anywhere towards shaan. Shaan on the other hand is having a mighty laugh within himself as he is observing khanak sitting with a straight face firmly. Khanak cud sense the smirk on shaan's face and this even more irks her and she keeps thinking to herself - 'main burthal kahiin ki'
Suddenly the car swervs right in full speed. And khanak slides towards and falls over shaan. Shaan immediately holds her caringly. But the touch of their wet bodies sends their pulses rising. Shaan cudnt help himself staring passionately at her - her wet hair and partly wet face are irresistable. Khanak whose right hand is lying over his chest cud feel its strong rythmic movements as shaan is breathing heavily. Khanak lowers her eyes feeling shy and slowly moves her hand away from his chest. Shaan bites his lips as he feels khanaks hand move over his chest. She slowly moves back to her seat. There is a small smile on her lips and shaan notices it and curses himself for losing control over himself and showing off his emotions openly to khanak. Yes he feels sorry for the third marriage remark he made but however cannot forgive her for sending nattie in her place on that day. I am not going to let her take me for granted - he thinks.
All this while Dharam, after swerving the car swiftly, immediately checks the rear mirror to see if he was successful in bringing them both close. Once he sees the effect it had on them, he is pleased of his deed, and like a good guy adjusts the rear mirror to let them have their privacy. Within his mind he is saying - yeh dono tho such mein pagal hain - ek dusre se itna pyaar karte huye bhi - kyoon alag hone mein tule hain.
When they enter the hotel room, both are surprised to see the room beautifully decorated with flowers, scented candles and light music playing frm a dvd player. Khanaks says - I will take a bath and cum. Shaan just nods. Khank enters the wash room. Shaan moves towards the bed and is surprised to see it beautifully decorated with rose petals. He sits down thinking - wow beautiful room, sceneted candles, flowers, such a romantic atmosphere, we both pati patni all alone but Mmmmmm - sighs he as he strecthes his hands up. Just then he hears Khanak calling his name, he turns towards the wash room. Khanak is standing at the door still in her wet clothes. Now that the romantic atmosphere of the room had upped his mood, he cudnt help looking up and down at khanak and breathes out a heavy sigh.
Khanak says that she isnt able to figure out how to operate the shower and asks his help. He enters the bathroom and is surprised to find just the tap and shower and no knobs. He searches out in and around the tap and shower as khanak looks on. Suddenly his hand presses the shower plate, and whoosh the water pours down on kahanks face directly. Khanak is flabbergasted and quickly turns away from the shower. At the same time shaan bends forward to press the shower plate off. In this process both of them bump into each other and end up in each others arms.
Shaan whose romantic mood was ignited by the rooms atmosphere, gets naturally attracted to his beautiful wife. The water droplets all over her face make her look even more scintillating. Shaan notices a strand of hair across her face over the lips and he slowly brushes it back, all the while engrossed in her beautiful wet lips. He slowly looks into khanaks eyes. Khanak is just staring at his eyes. Her face is so close and her wet face is so irresistable and he moves his eyes bck to her lips. He so much wants to kiss his dear wife. The water droplets on her lips increase his thirst - he so much wants to quench his thirst with the water on her lips. He gulps to swallow his feelings. He slightly moves towards her lips as he finds his feelings uncontrollable. But his conscious doesnt allow him. He believes that kahank no longer wants to be his wife and so kissing her wud be wrong. He closes eyes to shut off his vison from her beauty and control his urge to kiss him.
Khanak who was just staring at shaan, cudnt help looking at her dear hubby. She wants him to know how much she loved him. She just keeps staring at his eyes eagerly looking forward to see shaan realize khanak's luv. She wants him to see that she no longer hesitated by his closeness. She wants him to see that she doesnt mind him looking at her lips she is alright about it (unlike last time when she lowered her eyes when shaan stared at her lips in the patshala cornering scene). As shaan comes closer with closed eyes and moves his hand over her back and finally grips his fist tight on her waist in order control his feelings and stop himself from kissng her, she feels oceanic waves of passion rising in her stomach. She closes her eyes and clenches her fist - wanting - longing for her first kiss from her dear husband. Wish she had closed her eyes before shaan closed his, so he wud have known that the change in khanaks feelings, he wus have knwn abt her need for him, they wud have had their first kiss. But Shaan with his closed eyes, cudnt get to know, slowly he controlls his feelings and moves his face away from khanak. Khanak senses shaan distancing himself as she cudnt feel his breath. She opens her eyes dissapointed. Her dissapointment turns into pain as - shaan hasnt forgiven her still, shaan hasnt become hers yet, there is still a barrier between them.
Shaan slowly withdraws his arms around her and tries to move away. But khanak is still holding his shirt over the shoulder. She is silently staring at him. Shaan looks into her eyes with a heavy sigh and is puzzled and he slowly looks down towards his shoulders where khanaks fist held his shirt tightly. Kahanks notices this and slowly releases her grip and moves her hand off his shoulder. Shaan slowly leaves the washroom puzzled all over his face as he cud not deciphr the expression in khanak's eyes. Urghhh women its so difficult to understand them.
Continued on Page 4
Edited by pree.mahi - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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how romantic scene of Shanak! 😉 loved it mahi 😛 continue soon..........
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Posted: 14 years ago
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aww mahi i just saw that you wrote an OS :) it was lovely! lol shaan can never understand women! he should just give up! very romantic mahi i loved it! :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Please dont hope, We want you to continue for sure. Please do it fast. Loved it.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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arsh-fan, priya1209, tofeeees, sapnaajay, shalini_s, missfilmy, shanakforever, sshriyaa84, -saBii-, shamasallfav, ...Noorya..., -Candy-, -Veena-, tvrasika, togepe30, xaviara, sharmida, aditi305
All you gals thanks a bunch for liking it.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey pree.mahi
i luved it luved it luved it...superb suprb superb. and I must thank u for such an wonderful O.S.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#19
Lovely !!
And you know what....I think you have nailed it....This is just exactly whats gonna happen in that scene !! Damn Shaan...trust you to go spoil it all....Hahaha !
Continue soon !!
Luv,
Vandu
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20

Mahi darling wonderfully written dear cant wait for you to continue.....loved Dharams action in getting them close to each other in the car........loved how you showed Khanaks willingness adn Shaan confusion....cant wait to read more soon...

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