AsYa FF: Mohabbatein - Part 18 Updated: Pg 140 - 20/12/16 - Page 58

Originally posted by: mummyoftwo

Finally got through the whole chapter. And what an amazing and long chapter it was!!
I'm rendered speechless every time at how you get all this complicated relations of so many broken souls, together so beautifully.
So pari and zoya meet in this update. And Farida bi knows zoya from childhood, from the orphanage where zoya might have lived as a child?
My heart breaks for azlan and asad, they just need to sort their issues out, but I understand it's not that simple and they are to deep in the negative spiral so it might not be easy to turn it around. I'm happy asad has ayaan.
Dilshad knows about zoyas cutting! I hope she will be the one to heal the part in zoyas soul that craves a parent. The part with her. Ightmare was so well written. It feelt so real and her anguish was so palpable.
As always. A very nice update and I have probably forgot to comment on a lot of the happenings. But I'm on a mohabatein high now :-)
Thanks for ur hard work and bless ur amazing skill. Storytelling is one of the talents i admire highly.

Originally posted by: asifiqbalsh

Nice update
Loved it
Anaya came to dilshad for her lahenga & she almost agreed but razia insulted dilshad she saw her with rashid. The lion roared & told his decision. Asad was hell angry & as usual zoya did the mistake. Rashid & zoya scene was good. Asad saved her & then their bickering was nice. Zoya spoke to Ayaan abt asad singing again. Wow, he created a magic with his voice. Asya eyes met as he felt her presence. Zoya & pari scene was nice. Waiting for next update soon. Thanks

Originally posted by: addicted_93

LOVING the chemistry between Asad and Zoya with every coming part!

Zoya trying to fulfill Asads long lost dream is the cutest thing ever. Your story is clearly marking several milestones in terms of why and how they fell in love with each other. I honestly don't believe in love at first sight. Hence, the fact that you're writing about their initial attraction followed by these moments and actions mean so much more in their journey.
The "Fault in Our Stars" book has this lovely line which exactly describes them-- 'I fell in love like you would fall asleep: slowly and then all at once.'

I can't wait for Asad to find out about Zoya's part in fulfilling his dream. In the same way, I want Zoya to know about Shawn and 'S'. I'm 10000% sure it's Asad but I'm going to wait and see in your next part.

As always, loved Ayaan's bonding with Asad and Zoya. In some ways, I like Ayaan far more than Azlan. He's loyal, funny and so true to himself. I won't be surprised if Naina really does fall for him 😛

On the other hand, Azlan and his father need to get their heads out of their asses. If Rashid was a real man, I'd have probably kicked him where it counts a million times.

Poor Anaya! I really feel for her. A crazy family and a nutjob of a future mother in law (if, at all). Aahils really going to bring trouble on himself if he doesn't tell the people he loves (Aisha and his family) about what he really wants. I really like that the Zoya in your story pointed that out to him. Gul's Zoya would probably cook up some random dramatic plan to make him confess that would backfire badly.

Dying to read more. Please update soon!

P.S- Sorry I couldn't comment earlier, have been super busy with work and life in general

Originally posted by: Always_asya

I am back on your thread after three hours as promised 😆
i can see part 15 is posting
and yes now i can breath easily after getting the update
i have seen your reply to my comment a few minutes ago but when tried to quote it i cannot get it

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

well written..