AsYa OS (KaBhi) - Mending Walls

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Waqt Zaya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: suearmaniac
humka ee danda ka baare ma koi jankari ni he
bs itna jaant he ki handsome ke ird gird danda naamak koi cheez naahi aane denge 😆

Good. U qualify as his Nanny 👏

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surbhi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

<font size="2">Good. U qualify as his Nanny👏</font>

😲 ok gladly i'll get to play with chow chow ❤️

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Waqt Zaya

@WaqtZaya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#43

NO PLAY Handsome will bite u 🥱

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surbhi

@suearmaniac

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Posted: 9 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty
NO PLAY Handsome will bite u🥱

i knw m nt to pull his cheeks
rest we'll rock

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Asif

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Posted: 9 years ago

#45

Awesome OS
Loved it
Thanks for pm

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A.Hajnal

@A.Hajnal

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Posted: 9 years ago

#46

First thing first, Happy belated birthday to you, Soupwa...🤗 And Happy belate birthday to you to Ankie's Sona Dee! 🤗

May God bless you both with health and wealth of every kind...And I also hope that Ankie will wish you on time, next year...😆

Now coming to you, kiddo...All I can say is 'Wo0W' Ankieee...!!! 😲

In the last one, I noticed the change in your writing, but in this one, I have felt it...This one proved that the way you write has changed, for better, in the best way possible...

DUDE, by far, this is the best OS you have ever written...I am in awe, really...

Now your writing is so mature, so accurate and precise, so well written, the grammar, the words, the way you now write the sentences, the formation of it, the punctuation, so many new ways in which you execute the emotions, feelings and everything, the way you have created the atmosphere around the character, the way you have planned to process the thought/idea, the way you have executed it, EVERYTHING...❤️

After so long I have read Asad Ahmed Khan, and I have felt him, I have seen in moving, breathing, alive in your words...Thank you, You have given me a glimpse Ma Asad...And you know how much I have missed him... But now that I know I will find him in your words, I want MORE! ☺️

So you better write as much as you can and keep giving me Asad...

P.s...Your avie and siggies...

P.s.s...My comments are always on the 7th page on your topics...😲

Edited by A.Hajnal - 9 years ago

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sj_qh_kabhi

@sj_qh_kabhi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#47

Asya were absolutely adorable. :)
It was a very well written scene..!
I love your stories..
This was an awesome concept.. the way asad had matured by accepting many things in life..!

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Mayur Chan

@MayurChan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#48

Hello H.D..😃

Well I am soo soo happy that you again graced your presence here on this forum with something worth this wait...😳😆

Comin to this OS..Well this was very very good , well written and very good 👏⭐️ and soothingly pleasant in reading ...it actually gives you the feels that yes really the WALLS ARE MENDING for the Man of the Moment AAK😳

So claps for that..

Well seriously and sincerely speaking after ASYA moment in the ending the scene btw Asad and wajid chacha was my favourite...for every reason possible...I am not able to oint out a valid reason for it but yes I actually loved it...👍🏼

Wajid felt a heavy load lift off him. He had been doubtful if the young man really liked being here. He remembered how a silent rebellion he had thrown when he first came to the terms with the situation. Anyone would have. Unlike his younger brother, who ran away from home, he instead took reins of the situation and set things right first. Then got his brother back. And his relationship with his now severely ill father too had improved. At least the hate that he had fathomed all these years had evaporated somewhere. Pride shone in his eyes for his young master and how bravely he had adapted to the unsettling circumstances and "made everything okay" as promised to his younger brother in just a matter of a week

MENDING OF WALLS from Wajid's perspective...

Wajid pursed his lips at the young master's comment. He was the one who had them spoilt rotten and it was absolutely adorable to find him complaining.

this was a very good observation...hahahaha😆

Coming to the part when Asad is in his parents room...well With Dilshaad his Maufi was valid I guess like even if he knows his mother is not angry with him still he wants to apologize for what all he did...😊

Then coming to his father Asad checking his father's breathing is a sign which we only do when we are worried for our near and dear ones...so yes we can see THE WALLS ARE MENDING

"Zindagi mein kuch waqiyaat ye ehsaas dilate hai ki koi bhi dard ya taqleef itni badi nahi hoti jitna ki jab apne pyaar karne wale bichadd jate hai. Woh jo aap ke wajood ke hone ki waja ho; the sole reason for your existence. Whats the point in hating when in love you have its solution!"Meri Ammi ko pehle un galtiyo ki keemat chukani padi jo unho ne kabhi ki nai aur phir meri nafrat ki keemat. So yes, unki khushi ke liye I have looked beyond the hate, the grudge and the pain I had nurtured in me for 18years."

Who- has changed you so much?." Rashid shuttered gasping the at words that his ears had awaited all his being to hear.

"- Your dost. Again perspective not me, for the better. She helped me to draw the dark curtains aside and embrace the sunny morning." Asad just stated as if it was a matter of fact with a hint of a smile. Both fell quiet, one who let the words settle in him while the other embraced another notch of peace, having let out his bottled up emotions.

this part was the pleasant one like it shows that the WALLS ARE MENDING from a Father's POV..

Coming to the next stop...it is like Asad is a Bus and he have this BUSTOPS hahahahah

Asad around Ayaan was a soothing site for any siblings feels and in this OS I can soo imagine RS as Rishabh I don't know why...😆

Then ASYA part😳

I really like their moments of peace together...

I can so imagine them doing something like this

That's like my girl." He enveloped her in his arms but she pushed him back instead.

"Kya kar rahe hai ap Asad, bacho ke samne!" Zoya rushed back coyly creating a distance between them.

🤣HAHAHAHA this was such a sassy comeback in a cute way by Zoya...👏😆

BACHE YAA NOO BAACHE

"Khud Sher...Asad Ahmed Khan se bhi nahi?" Zoya nodded in negative, before he claimed her lips as his

they are into PDA😳😆hahahaha jab baachon ki fikr nhi inhe..

and at the end..Its going to 1AM. Mind sleeping? I am extremely tired. I have to take your dost for the appointment in the morning." Asad scolded her.

Zoya just looked at him and wrapped her hands around him. "I am so proud of you." She whispered.

MENDING of WALLS from a Lover's perspective...I totally LOVED IT⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️👏👏👏👏👏

So here I try and end my comment...

Keep writing Ankiee😃

Take Care😃😳