SaHil One Shot: Altered, Estranged, Disintegrated, Lost. - Page 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: ak020203

Brilliant!

Well Written.. very thrilling OS
Thanks!


thank you so much for reading love!

<3
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Posted: 11 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: risingsea101

Wooow that was amazing.


I felt as if I was watching a CSI or crime investigation episode, it was really amazing
Are you an expert of flowers? You seem to know way too much about them😆
I loved it how you made romance around mystery, kinda cute

I liked the christian based atmosphere, if that makes any sense :/

Continue with these stories of yours. Seriously. CONTINUE


thankyou so much for reading love!

oh nah, i have a florist friend she knows alot about them :P
and i also used the internet 🤣

yeah it does make sense

<333
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Posted: 11 years ago
#13

Originally posted by: Prags_Sociopath

Wow!! I mean,wow. I mean. WOW! I. MEAN. WOW. !!!

Sorry, I am not able to find any other word. Sometimes simplest form of words don't mean THAT simple <3
!!!!!!!
Another marvelous piece of writing from you. Sarru babe!!! You are MAGIC! I mean like, you LITERALLY have that magical stuff, like that wand and stuff you know?

Your words cast a magic spell, and leaves an everlasting impression on the readers, that they, while reading it, get so much engrossed and involved in that scene, that they imagine themselves witnessing all that in front of their eyes. (Read: reader=me)

Oh damn I missed you so much! Your amazing writing. You are my drug err I mean your writing <3
And yes, its intoxicating.

So. The story. Okay. WHAAA..???
A cop. Officer ibrahim? Sherlock Holmes?!! What even. I mean Sherlock!! My favorite Sociopath does an ARI. And am not even surprised ;) Last night, I was talking about his "Mind Palace" with Lauyrie on some thread, and today you give me THIS. THIS!!!

And. Sanam? Florist. She is a florist!! Suspect? Goddamn friggin' amazing!!

The story. How?! You almost pulled a Sherlock-John with a touch of Sherlock-Molly/irene ;) <3

Moriarty too though! ;)

And. The flowers. Gifted. By him to her. By her to him. Wow!! Holly and Ivy. Red roses!

My favoriite part.
"Don't they have a collective noun? Punnet? Murder?" "Idiot" I'll take an idiot then" "Maybe I'll too"

Oh/ Murder deffo is his collective noun! ;)

Ah. Sarruu!! HIgh functioning Sociopath just got real! ;) 😆


Don't worry, I get the same incoherency when I read your fics.

They are so good.

THANKYOU ILY I ACTUAL HAVE A WAND BUT I DON'T TTHINK IM THAT GOOD!!!!

Oh my god that third bit was beautiful but I think that you are lying have you seen the amount of "says" there are in this fic?

I actual missed you so much too, so much happened man.

YES SHERLOCK HOLMES MY BAEEE.

Dude. His mind palace is as beautiful as it is f**ked up. i have written so much meta on tumblr with my friends there about bbc Sherlock man, so much.

I like intricate damaged broken characters. As you can see from my love of Aahil and Derek Hale and James Bond and Dean Winchester and Bucky Barnes and Khan from Star Trek and Hannibal and a trillion more.

Ugh feelings galore here I come.

Yes can you imagine a cute lil skinny Sanam who has a lot of health problems that big macho but equally adorbs Aahil has a crush on?

HSWFHVV.

LUEFGUYGVCJLSVC.

She said she'll take an idiot too.

*squeals.*

HAHA I LOVE YOU THANKS FOR ALL THE LOVE YOU HAVE SHOWERED UPON ME



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Posted: 11 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: Nitya_Suresh

Fantastic!! This was so awesome! You are an amazing writer!! The suspense was intense. I almost believed Sanam was the murderer!!😕

Too good!! Keep writing!!


thankyou so much for reading love!

hahaha but she wasnt!
shes a cute lil thang in this one :P

<3
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Posted: 11 years ago
#15
I so so love Aahil for not wanting her to be the murderer!


But that he took her in custody anyway...hayye! Poor guy!



Took him a month huh! To gain courage.



And.




Red roses.


AAHIL.



LOVE.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: farz_parachute

First the title!


Brilliant is it not!



Just look!



Oh goodness.


You and dark.



What colour is this OS for you!!


*****


Flowers!


I have one for you.


Freesia!



Which is to say you're spirited!


And of course...



Pink rose.


To show admiration and appreciation.




And.


A red rose.



Simply because...



thanks.

Its a beautiful poem.

I have like a notebook where I have written all my favourite poems and quotes and movies and books, that's where I get most of the titles for my stories from :P

The quote is deffo my favourite favourite tho.

This os is watercolour yellow and pink and grass green diluted with cotton brushes.

THANK YOU ILY

I give you the red rose as well.

And the freezy one.

And a larkspur. Means beautiful spirit.

I love you



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Posted: 11 years ago
#17
My favourite is when he told the boys that shed take an idiot too!!!


Hayyyeee!!!


Yes!


Sardeep!




And Pragya!!


Sherlock!




I need my PC to write proper comments!



I need.



And you gave.



Sarru. Dippu.


Thank you!!!!


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Posted: 11 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: notagain

What a fresh, crisp and an innovative one shot indeed. A lovely bouquet of words, tied and bowed in a fantastic story. It was an excellent read. Do you have an index?😳


thank you so much, i could say the same about your words too <3

yeah, i do!


it might be a little outdated tho, im gonna see if i can add stuff tonight :P
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Posted: 11 years ago
#19

Originally posted by: bewafa

Oh my. I LOVED IT!

I also learnt so much. This was really well written. I am going to read more of your work.

I did not mind at all that you went out of character- in fact, I could totally imagine Surbhi and Karanvir playing along beautifully...along with the other actors. You are a fine writer.

Edit: Enjoy your wedding and time in the Motherland!


thank you so much!

i was actually worried that this wasnt the fic for these two as soon as i finished it, but then i was like nah, lets post it and see what happens 🤣

im glad you liked it tho <3

thanks, i sure will!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: farz_parachute

My favourite is when he told the boys that shed take an idiot too!!!


Hayyyeee!!!


Yes!


Sardeep!




And Pragya!!


Sherlock!




I need my PC to write proper comments!



I need.



And you gave.



Sarru. Dippu.


Thank you!!!!




Aahil's a cutie <33

SHERLOCK.

HOLMES.

=

MY 2ND FAVOURITE BRITISH PERSON EVER.

thank you for actually reading my stuff man, i live for this shit.

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