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Pixiepixel11

@Pixiepixel11

Stunner

+ 28

Posted: 11 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: farz_parachute
Okay wow!

So we can rule out Asad as murderer.

And Tanveer left him at the altar? Hmmm.

When? As in how long ago? Must be quite some time if Zoya misses her (but is angry coz of what she did to Asad?)

And.

Asad had Tanveer in his keeping (okay his men may be the ones watching over her) and she manage to run away. Go Tannu.

Zoya can not and would not hurt Asad. So even if Tanveer comes for her, she won't follow. Hmmm.

Am intrigued just like Zan pointed out...

A age kya hone wala hai?

aage bahut kuch hone wala hai...(wink)
Thanx for ur wonderful analytical comment & the support to cont.this story.

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Sadie

@--starstruck--

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#102

Asad surely is a very important figure in Zoya's life and I can surely see some signs of liking from Zoya's side as well! Considering the way she drools over him and got all territorial. but then she is only 15. her mind is fragile and can be easily manipulated esp by the person who surely has a deep impact on you. The part where Asad says at this point i don't feel lust for her makes me rethink the whole situation. earlier I felt Asad has a little psychological problem and that he has more sexual feelings towards zoya but now I feel he simply is an obsessed (still a bit psycho because he kidnapped Tanveer) lover.

wonder what'll happen next since Zoya seems to be too delusional and she has slowly started liking his touch and even anticipating his touch now!

PS - I would recommend you get a beta reader. that'll help make your story better!

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Zanutix

@Zanutix

Voyager

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#103

Originally posted by: --starstruck--
Asad surely is a very important figure in Zoya's life and I can surely see some signs of liking from Zoya's side as well! Considering the way she drools over him and got all territorial. but then she is only 15. her mind is fragile and can be easily manipulated esp by the person who surely has a deep impact on you. The part where Asad says at this point i don't feel lust for her makes me rethink the whole situation. earlier I felt Asad has a little psychological problem and that he has more sexual feelings towards zoya but now I feel he simply is an obsessed (still a bit psycho because he kidnapped Tanveer) lover.

wonder what'll happen next since Zoya seems to be too delusional and she has slowly started liking his touch and even anticipating his touch now!

PS - I would recommend you get a beta reader. that'll help make your story better!

Well, since Zoya's 'growing up', she's getting attracted to her handsome BIL. And he's waiting for it too.

He's been massaging her for God knows how long. So he has seen her growing up.

But still, mentally, she isn't that grown up yet and readily agrees to expose her body to him.

And probably, she'll side with him and not with Tanveer when she returns.

Exactly! The part where he feels 'no lust' but 'love' towards her takes the story to an entirely new direction, and I'm excited to see how it unfolds!

Seems like Asad's aim was to get Zoya. Tanveer was just a pawn.

Hmm..

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NainaAlex

@NainaAlex

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#104

A totally different concept... I m loving it...
Asad evil, Tanveer locked up...
I m totally interested

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Sadie

@--starstruck--

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: Zanutix

Well, since Zoya's 'growing up', she's getting attracted to her handsome BIL. And he's waiting for it too.

He's been massaging her for God knows how long. So he has seen her growing up.
But still, mentally, she isn't that grown up yet and readily agrees to expose her body to him.
And probably, she'll side with him and not with Tanveer when she returns.

Exactly! The part where he feels 'no lust' but 'love' towards her takes the story to an entirely new direction, and I'm excited to see how it unfolds!

Seems like Asad's aim was to get Zoya. Tanveer was just a pawn.
Hmm..

like i said in my previous comments that this age is the time when you start getting sexual feelings towards the opposite sex and well if someone is massaging you and touching you in such places so she is bound to get such feelings.

Yeah I too feel she'll side with him and I feel Asad has a lot of power on her he can very easily manipulate her.

As for her not being too mature and exposing herself to him I feel the answer lies in one of her line where she says she'll do anything to make him happy. so yeah she is a bit immature but more naive and delusional!

Tanveer as a pawn? Wow thats a different perspective but that kinda explains how he has "seen her growing" I mean if he met Zoya only after his engagement to Tanveer that doesn't explain how he has been "taking care of her when tanveer was still there"

So yes he may have feelings for her ever since he saw her and in order to get closer to her and make her trust him he did all the drama of getting married to Tanveer!

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Chahat Doshi

@Chahat_A_Doshi

Trailblazer

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#106

Me first !!!Yay!!!

Nice one; dark, at times creepy but still very interesting; keeps me waiting for more

yeah I will keep checking this thread just add update details to the topic

enuf for me

Continue soon

Edited by Chahanya - 11 years ago

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farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#107

Unconscious?

You just had to do that right to Tanveer right.

Woh zinda haina?

Hmmm.

Did Asad's men caused that?

Or maybe she was trying to escape and due to her state of being malnourished (since she was in captive) she just passed out right in front of his house.

Hmm!!

And Asad putting on FLORAL hair clips on Zoya. What is she, 5?

And a floral frock. Every time.

So is he treating her like a child (a young child)...?

You know how with younger kids you have to be patient when you speak to them, and you have to repeat things to them so they listen...is that what Asad has been doing?

Hmm indeed.

And are you happy now Asad. Zoya finally, on her own accord, called you ASAD!

Tanveer, GET UP!!

Or not yet? Let Asad think she's dead and dump her somewhere. THEN GET UP!

But then Zoya would ask questions.

Oh God Zoya!

You left Asad. To go to Tanveer.

You left him.

And Asad angry!

Zoya you better pout that pout he loves so much and start chanting ASAD ASAD ASAD. Maybe he might be forgiving.

Unless he's not mad at her. But at his men for causing Tanveer to run away. Or mad at Tanveer for trying to get into his house?

All form of Asad. That's the deal. Zoya has to like all his forms. How many more are there?

I'd like to see his funny side. No pun intended. Like a boyish side to him. I mean this guy has issues right?

It all comes down to

Tanveer!!!

GET UP!

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farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#108

Originally posted by: Zanutix

Aye to all your responses!! Souldawg!

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farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: _Ms.Foxy.Angel_
aage bahut kuch hone wala hai...(wink)
Thanx for ur wonderful analytical comment & the support to cont.this story.

Bahut kuch? Bring it on!!

Tanveer.

Bring Tanveer.

Please let her be normal.

As in normal normal.

She can be crazy and stuff but not CRAZY AND STUFF.

Get it get it?

Zan. You get me right!

*hoping that dawg gets it*

You do! Good. Explain for me!

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farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#110

Originally posted by: Zanutix

Well, since Zoya's 'growing up', she's getting attracted to her handsome BIL. And he's waiting for it too.

He's been massaging her for God knows how long. So he has seen her growing up.
But still, mentally, she isn't that grown up yet and readily agrees to expose her body to him.
And probably, she'll side with him and not with Tanveer when she returns.

Exactly! The part where he feels 'no lust' but 'love' towards her takes the story to an entirely new direction, and I'm excited to see how it unfolds!

Seems like Asad's aim was to get Zoya. Tanveer was just a pawn.
Hmm..

Yo dawgg! BOLD! Yes!!!

She may not know a thing. And then maybe she started suspecting and found something out so he kept her away? Keeping her captive and all.

How long as it been!!!!

And yep Sadie!

Deep impact. Delusional. All that.

Tanveer's back!

But doesn't look too good!

And Zoya left his hand and ran to her.

So obsessed Asad. Tera kya hoga?