FF: All the Right Moves - Chapter 14, page 129 - COMPLETE - Page 27

UH OH ZOYA IS IN TROUBLE LOVED THE UPDATE THANX FOR THE PM AND UPDATE SOON😃

loved the update. Ayan and Zoya's convo was good. Thanx for d pm

I guess this time also zoya will escape easy from asad question too.

wow its a superb update...

There something absolutely charming and whimsical in a really good way about your writing. The flow, the emotions, the characters, the descriptions they come alive in all senses. Excellent plotting, as well, and most of all the finishing touch of the the plots, chapters and writing is so professional, it's like reading a really good mystery book. Your story reminds me of older classic styling of mysteries,which I haven't read in a long time, you make me want to go read them all over again. The sheer pleasure of reading this makes me nostalgic, longing for those good times.

Pitch perfect storytelling and such poised writing, the pleasure is all mine. 😊

awesome update...continue soon..😊

Originally posted by: Aye12345

Aw, i nearly started crying when Tamatar was having a little breakdown. Honestly, she and the rest of them are so cute!! <3 I just LOVE every single one of Asad and Zoya's encounter's... i don't know why but it feels as though with every little one they have, they are coming closer to each other. And what can i say about Mona and Raabert?? They are just da BEST!! :D I LOVE their little conversations and their planning, they're just great!! And i can't wait to see what Asad will do now... i wonder if he overheard everything?? Thank you sooo much for this wonderful update and thank you for the pm also!! :D xxx

Originally posted by: webuser7

Another brilliant update. I have read all your stories! I love how you brought in Najma and Ayaan (hope to see more) into the mix. Najma and Zoya bond is amazing!! 👏

Highlights for me:

• Rohan is still a mystery. Feel sorry for this "bad boy"! His pain and longing (I am guessing it's for a family) is very poignant. I have to force myself to remember that he is up to no good. What exactly? Have no clue!! Hopefully, we'll get a clue soon. After all, Mission Khiladi (love the name!) has just started! 😉

Perhaps Rohan isn't as black as you think he it. Could he just be many shades of grey ? Maybe he's just misunderstood and simply needs a strong, loving woman to stablize him? 🤔

I love the name too - THANK YOU for coming up with it!

• Najma's meltdown was unexpected but a very sweet scene. She's lucky to have such a loving family. But very glad to see her not taking it for granted. Very mature!!

Najma is a very important part of this story. Her family's unshakable love for her is what creates the cracks in Rohan's previously perfect facade. Rohan had to see that it's possible to love someone without conditions or limitations and not be destroyed by that love.

• Asad Miya is a goner!! He is stuck on the "married" and "children" statements!! 😆 Zoya also is affected by Asad a lot. But he has it real bad!! This is gonna be fun! 😃 Not one, but two (Rohan and Raabert) prospective "suitors". My mind is working overtime imagining the GEM striking big time!! 🤣

And you noticed how Asad no longer backs down from emotional confrontations with Zoya, at least when they're alone? In fact, he pushes for them while Zoya tries to avoid them. Dilshad saved her from the first confrontation and Najma saved her in the second. There will be no one to save Zoya a third time - she'll HAVE to take a stand.

• Najma pulled a fast one and pretended to fall! Oh, I love this bright and sensible Najma!!

Again, Najma's growing maturity is the backbone of this story. She's a person who is loved, protected and valued unconditionally. She's successfully living up to her responsibility as her mother's pride.

• Mona Raabert scene was awesome! 😆 His couplet was lame. I am surprised Zoya didnt reply back with her own lame one! Guess she had to win his confidence first. No point in antagonizing him!! Hopefully in the future scenes, we'll see more couplets!!

Zoya couldn't try to 'one-up' Ayaan. She needs him to help her so she's taking Najma's advice (gestures?) and pretends to be helpless and fawning over Ayaan. Don't worry, it won't last. Soon Ayaan will get to see the REAL Zoya in action. After that, he can't give her back to Asad fast enough! 😆

• Busted? I hope not! In fact I think not!! Else how will the story move ahead!! But Asad seems to have heard enough to make him jealous?? Hope so!! 😆

There is no way that Zoya will let anything, even the great Asad Ahmed Khan, keep her down! Her greatest strengths are her quick mind and her resilient nature. Hmmm...I don't know if Asad thinks himself as jealous. It's not an emotion he recognizes as he's never experienced it before. I'm sure he thinks he's just looking out for her safety.

Look forward to next Monday!!

Great job!! 👍🏼 👍🏼