FF: All the Right Moves - Chapter 14, page 129 - COMPLETE

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Linsie

@Linsie

Trailblazer

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#171

Rohan is higly a suspect... zoya's fact...
wow webcam in is room... gosh

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-khaleesi-

@-khaleesi-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#172

I want another update already. I wish I had started it when it was complete.

Lovely update!

Bond Najma was so cute!

AsYa seem to be getting on each others nerves. Can't wait for either of them to explode.

P.S. Please update soon. Do add more of AsYa. 😆

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Amna

@...KSGmiAmor...

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#173

amazing story ... cant wait for your next update ... continue soon

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lasya13

@lasya13

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#174

Super progress...
I just love this detective zoe...
interesting update
update soon...

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Nida

@Gurmeet4Drashti

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#175

Hey ...
This was amazing !! :)

Okay ... So the person who caught Zoya was Najma ... Thank god !! Coz I was kinda dreading Asad's reaction if he caught her sniffing a 'stranger's' pillow :P

But oops !! My relief was kinda short-lived as Asad saw the pics of Zoya clutching Rohan's shirt ...

I adore Asad but the only thing which I kinda dislike about Asad is just his anger ... But I'm sure he'll learn to control it ...

Thanks for the pm :)

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webuser7

@webuser7

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#176

Wow! Fantastic update, Paly!! 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Loved the twist: it was Nazma who caught Zoya sniffing the pillow!! Not Asad nor Rohan as the readers were beginning to expect.

Nancy Drew, aka Veronica Mars, is hot on the trails of Rohan the slick one!! The mystery and intrigue are the best features of your writing. I am enjoying the angst and the undercurrent between AsYa too! But, by far the mystery is what has me hooked. There are plenty of stories that are funny, romantic and well written on this forum. But, you are the undisputed mystery writer!!

Zoya is brilliant! Her analysis of Rohan's room was awesome! The snooping, towels, bed linen, toiletries, clothes and bag all proved that there is more to Rohan than meets the eyes. He did not sleep on the bed. What does he have to hide that made him pack all new stuff? What exactly is he looking for in the Khan villa?! What would a renowned cricketer need from the Khans? Very intriguing!!

The dynamic duo reach the stadium following Rohan!! Ha! Mrs. Reddy had a role to play too. Yup, you don't include fluff or unrelated scenes!! She served her purpose and helped the girls get in. Zoya managed to "borrow" the security passes. How sneaky!! Ha! Ha! Mrs. R continues to think AsYa are married. Indeed they argue like a married couple!!

Rohan threw his sweaty shirt on Zoya. LOL! The minute I read that, my head went Uh Oh!! Asad will see it on TV and go super J!

Back home, Asad is livid as he got his hands on the video. Zoya and Nazma defend each other so well! Asad brings tears yet again to Zoya's eyes!! When will the emotionally challenged person improve? Her tears pierce his heart but he will still remain clueless!

Where did Rohan disappear ? Super sleuth will discover soon! Look forward to the next update!

Edited by webuser7 - 11 years ago

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#177

wow

loved the way story is moving

I am a Nancy Drew fan

Veronica Mars will be diged up now after my exams

and your story surpasses all detective stories I have read till date

even Sherlock Holmes

loved the way Zoya thinks

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samara5

@samara5

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#178

I love ur work so mch...big fan...waiting for the nxt update...

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PalyGirl

@PalyGirl

Explorer

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#179

Originally posted by: Gurmeet4Drashti
Hey ...
This was amazing !! :)

Okay ... So the person who caught Zoya was Najma ... Thank god !! Coz I was kinda dreading Asad's reaction if he caught her sniffing a 'stranger's' pillow :P
Paly: Let's be honest - at this point, I think Asad would be equally horrified to catch Zoya sniffing HIS pillow as he would catching her sniffing Rohan's pillow! 😆

But oops !! My relief was kinda short-lived as Asad saw the pics of Zoya clutching Rohan's shirt ...
Paly: Not only did Asad see it, but half his office staff saw it, too!

I adore Asad but the only thing which I kinda dislike about Asad is just his anger ... But I'm sure he'll learn to control it ...
Paly: Please give me a few more chapters. They are both so sensitive to each other and close to snapping that SOMETHING has to give. And it will - soon!

Thanks for the pm :)