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kiran khurana

@.Kiran.

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

#171

Thanks guys. I'm out and Monica of course shirtless Asad man! My final bye🤗

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Asya0910

@Asya0910

Navigator

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Posted: 12 years ago

#172

so sorry for the late comment!!!! That was really good!!!!

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lDirectionerl

@lDirectionerl

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#173

OHMYGAWD! I was crying my damn eyes out! You girl are awesome! I just hope that this happens in the show too!

And I really want Asad to personally kick out Tanveer! Huh! That will be a sight to watch!

Please write some more! You are friggin' awesome! 😃

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Monica

@mochhug

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#174

Originally posted by: -Jazzy-

The grief, the betrayal did momentarily rock our boats. But the ride wasn't too rugged. Asad and Zoya made a wish upon a star once, and it has manisfested itself so beautifully and blossomed into such a pure relationship. I'm bowled over.
Thank you for this piece, Monica.
Always a fan! 😳

SO I only quoted the last bit (as always our comments compete for length 😆)

OMG you're comments seriously leave me grinning ear to ear for hours. Seriously. You have no idea how happy they make me! 😳

I'm sooo glad you liked that he trusted her before he saw the file. That was the main purpose of the story. To show that he was broken, so remorseful, and had had an epiphany that he knew better now than to ever doubt her. Mostly it was that he wasn't in a position to doubt her, but also that the heart of the matter, of his supposed sin was just that. Trust. And I see people analyzing, saying that the roles will be reversed for Asya with Zoya'a Abbu. I'm not so sure, but I guess it could happen.

And yes! Rashid did here what I wish he would have done in the show. I really wish he had had a bigger part in Tanveer's pardafash. But I guess their relationship will be a bigger focus now that Asya will be a single unit. And Zoya is there for him. Like I'm hoping he will be there for her when she finds out who her abbu is.

Yay! I'm glad you liked the names tooo I wasn't sure haha but I wanted it to end a little more whimsically 😆. Aw I'm glad I was able to portray all the emotions as I wanted. So you could feel all those roller coaster turns 😛

Seriously though, you're too sweet. Yes I know you wanna smack me, but come on. I'm no where near as good as professional authors haha. But still, it's nice to know I have such an avid fan 😃

Thanks for yet another AMAZING comment

Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago

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Nida

@Gurmeet4Drashti

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#175

Hey ...
This is sooo good !!! :)

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@metoyou

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#176

This was beautiful!

I can see that you are getting better and better with your stories and especially with the dialogues. Loved it!👏

Oye Chikni, sharmao mat aur poora ka poora credit le na.

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MrMrsAsyaKhan

@MrMrsAsyaKhan

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#177

WHAT ELSE HAVE I BEEN MISSING OUT ON?! (Happy belated birthday to Kirann for 19th July, I know I know I'm a teensie bit late, like few hours init yeah. Don't gloat too much though!)

I couldn't breathe when he announced his Nikkah with Tanveer! Oh my gosh! You know I cringe when you write about Tanveer, no it's not your writing, but its HER! I hate her, I feel like strangling her, her evil smirk and everything. Moving on, I know it was a small scene but I loved Ayaan-Zoya convo. We need more of those, sighs. QH has become complicated. It was mysterious the way Rashid was talking on the phone. I was like laughing at first thinking she already knows everything, what else could there be?

The brother's hug was too emotional. You described that beautifully.

OMG everything was executed amazingly well. From the phone call to Zoya's mini breakdown to her being all kickass again! I'm in awe of your writing. I loved it, the khulasa, addition of Rashid, Dilu Najma unison. Yaaay! I was partying when he kicked her out. Everything restored. I thought there might be a huge apology but then realized it's not needed. Neither were at fault tbh. What mattered was that they were together again. Awwwieees, the ending was tooo cute for words!

This another beautiful piece Monica. Goes into my favourite list!