AsYa TS: Mendhi Laga Ke Rakhna: Last Part PG 14 - Page 13

Originally posted by: Madame_Noddy

A huge round of applause to you for writing this!!! 👏

Brilliant and beautiful!!!

You described their feelings and actions so beautifully...i coould feel everything you wrote! you have a magical talent dear!

i am so sorry i couldnt comment earlier, i didnt log in to the forum in this weekend coz i had an exam today...but thanks a lot for the pm!

cant wait for what you have in store for the last part!

Originally posted by: MrMrsAsyaKhan

Res? So late I know!

Unres, sorry!

First of my lovely, you are a wonderful writer. The first chapter brought tears to my eyes, I don't think I cried as much watching the episode. My poor Zoya bearing it all for her love Asad, the piercing pain she was going through all gone with Asad's one smile giving her all strength she needed. Beautifully written my love.

Haiii, the second chapter was as beautiful and heart touching. Seriously, their eye lock was so cute, I had butterflies in my stomach, yes despite her going through so much pain, like Zoya, his one look calmed me down. The table scene was so so cute. LOVED IT! I was bursting when she was trying to hide her pain from him and finally not being able to take it she let it out. WONDERFUL JOB lovely! I totally felt her pain and Asad's urge to know what was going on. As much as I wanted her to tell him it was Tanveer, I'm glad she didn't because he's a fart when it comes to that chudail! Arghhh!!!! GOSH I HATE THAT BI****! Sorry, the recent spoilers are pulling on my last nerve!

As always, beautiful! LOVED IT SOO SOO SOO MUCH! You write amazingly my dear, and this just proves how talented you really are, mashAllah!

P.S. Will give feedback on the last chapter seperately. Sorry for a bakwaass comment as usual.

Originally posted by: Madame_Noddy

Thank you so much for making my day!!! i loved this last part...i wish you would have written another chapter to this but...anyhow, i loved this!

i so so wish this is what should have been shown in the show too, but that's just wishful thinking...you wrote this so beautifully i could imagine it happening right in front of my eyes...beautiful, simply beautiful! Hats off!

Originally posted by: astonm

gaaah! So much cutenesss! I wish this would have happened in the show, Asad should just molest her hands with his lips

AMAZING JOB GIRL! as always :) & thanks for the pm! 😃

Originally posted by: nikki.171

Ohmigawd. This was as lovely as ever, full of love and beautiful moments, it was simply amazing yaar.
I LOVED it.
But being the never satisfied person I am 😆 I want MORE! And what better than to have the Billi exposed too. Its high time THAT happens.
So ... 😳 can we please have the alternate ending? Please! Please!
And... 😳 anepiloguetoo ?
Yikes!
Kudos to your awesome writing! Keep writing more!

Originally posted by: rutu83

hmmm...so what are the chances we can sneak you into the QH writers group?

Originally posted by: ws12

I'd love to read the alternate ending too! I'm in awe of your writing skills, it's so detailed

Originally posted by: amri123

that was beautiful

Asad's confession was very nice and i couldn't stop smiling

her called her a tornado and she was angry...haha

but i love his explanation

and Asad's so caring it was almost unbearable

and see he's so smart

he went and found out why Zoya was hurting

i'd have loved for that to happen in the show

oh...well

and i'd love to read that alternate ending

i'm sure i'll enjoy it

thanks for the PM😊

Originally posted by: MrMrsAsyaKhan

OKAAY! I'm speechless after reading this part! I ah I ah' ermm?

His confession was so beautiful *sniffs* I teared up reading the first paragraph! Zoya getting annoyed by her comparison with tornado LOOOL! Ahhh girl! You make me cry one second and the next I'm laughing my ass off!

Aww she wanted to see how dark his colour of love was and him tearing up hearing that, I couldn't stop awww'ing! Him wanting to put the same mehendi on his hand and realising how bad the pain was PRICELESS! Just beautiful, beautiful is an understatement.

AND OH EM GEE! The whole bedroom scene was beautiful. Yes beautiful, too too beautiful. I melted away, I'm still crying writing this. IDK what to say, this last chapter was perfection. The last 2 lines were perfection. Everything was perfection. *sighs* I need a dictionary to find more words that I could use to tell you how much I loved this.

YOU my darling, amazing! You are a wonderful writer and it is such a treat to read your work! All I'm going to say is keep up the great work, me loves loves loves so so so much! GAHHH, I'm spell bounded! O_o

P.S. unres'd my other comment on page 12! Sorrieesss for the lateness! xoxo

Originally posted by: webuser7

Beautiful!!

I love how you kept true to character esp Asad's OCD and how he kept the bowl away from spilling accidentally Bravo!