NEW FF: Memories- A Tug of War (Chapter7, Page35) - Page 20

Originally posted by: -juhi-lily-

brilliant update!!

loved it❤️

Originally posted by: cutiesanya

he so srry i am very late in comenting

i read first 2 chapters of ur stry

andthen cant keep track of it😒

so alltogether i am bhula bhatka reader coming bck😆

plzzz do pm me as ur are in my buddy list

but u didnt pm m e

i would rd all stry in one go then i culd understand

Originally posted by: astonm

I am catching up! :O
yay yay yay! :)
the heartbreak feels in the first four chapters, waaah :( Asad is an asshole! LOL. My poor Zoya baby :( I love how he walks into her office and is all like "BAM, I love you, you love me, lets get this thing happening"
*starts singing the Barney song*

Aw, Ray-Zoya interactions are so cuteee! They make me LOL.

OMG, I actually teared up when she cried herself to sleep. Why are you depressing me? LOL. That's so sad :( awww. My poor baby.

K so "When I was your man" by Bruno Mars just came on, and it describes Asad's feels. OMG. The coincidence!

AHHH! Rain dance feeels! And she is wearing a sareee! Perfecto! AHHH! You used my favourite rain dance song! *fangirls* KAY, they need to do this in the show. I am going to mail the CVs a copy of your work so they can fly you there! Zoya has sexy day dreams though.

"'Hakeekat yeh hai ki aap mere liye, mere zindagi ki liye, aur mere ghar ke liye bilkul perfect ho!" THAT LINE IS PERFECT. You are so amazinggg! OMG, the feels in that one line alone!

NAAAHI! What rishta for Zoya? Puh-leej aisan not doings!

loving this story so far! Looking forward to the next part! Update sooon! Kay I think I wrote you a novel, we are so good at this! LMAO.

TTYL. Love ya gurlll! :) XOXO.

Originally posted by: teddyyy

Even if you never ever ever reply to my comments ever again, I'd be fine with it because you have honestly made my day, nope my week! Do you have any idea how freaking special and happy you made me feel with that response? Like you just don't know. -tears of joy man- I'm so self pleased and stuff because I manage to make you smile and make your day. Ugh, I love you, seriously! I'm sooo happy things are better and you'll always be in my well wish corner LOL. Only bad part is, please don't cry too much! :D Awww, you called me a sweetheart, I think my life has just been made. But nope, you're the sweetest <333 You don't live up to my expectations, you exceed them. With every chapter, I'm surprised at how much more you can make me love your writing! This is definitely my favorite fanfiction, and trust me, I appreciate all your hard work! Here's a nice big bear hug from me :DD

And thanks for the good luck! <333

Also, sorry I didn't want to quote the whole thing cause it was sooo long, so I made a separate comment! Next comment is for the update!

Originally posted by: MrMrsAsyaKhan

Okaay, I'm sat here replying to all the comments because of you! When I first read your comments I literally died! *cries* I thought I cannot just not write anything back to you.
OMG, I make you feel special? What about what you do to me? Like can you get any more sweeter? I'm speechless, I do not know what to say back to you girl!
Awww! I love you, you know that? This has made me feel beyond special! I'm literally flying! *sighs*

You really think I exceed your expectations? Don't lie, OMG! *faints*
You know i'm not really a writer but I know that when someone writes, they want their work to be appreciated, understood and liked! That didn't make sense but basically what i'm trying to say is you made me feel content, satisfied that whatever I'm writing is not good for nothing! This will seriously push me to write more and better myself! I usually repeat myself with my writings because I only write emotional stuff because I'm an emotional person, but seriously your comment GAHHH! Idk what I'm writing, will a thank you suffice?
Love you so damn much and a bear hug back from meee! Yesss, all my best wishes are with you... hope you kicked ass in all the examsss! ;)

I'll reply back to your comments individually! <3

Originally posted by: teddyyy

Hayee Allah, omg omg omg omg omg an update dedicated to me (and others of course) but omggg, my dil is so khush! Thank youuu! Like awww thank you!

Lmaoo you have to love Ray for his actions!

'I think you've done quite a bit of damage Zoe, it's swelling up. Really Ray? Leave it to your best friend to blame everything on you :P And when Zoya was pretending to strangle him, I laughed out loud- literally. Their friendship is beautiful, honestly. When they got out of their goofy mood, and Ray stared at their picture, I found that as his gratitude to have Zo with him.

Zoya's inner strength is something that will never ever fail to amaze me. Her personal talk touched me. She is concerned for being a burden but understands that she can never be a burden, especially for Ray, because he will always be there for her. The best part of this friendship isn't their goofy behavior, but instead their deep understanding of each other, and their unspoken connection. If I weren't an Asya shipper, I'd think Zo would be perfect with him. Best friend love stories are so cute for me BUT NO it's only Asad and Zoya <333

Ray's pep talk truly seemed heartfelt, that's all I'm going to say. You did an amazing job with the wording there! Beautiful! I'm blabbering but seriously, you're too perfect. I LOOOVE how you show their comfort. They can be so deep one second and then totally goofy the next. It's simply perfect. (PS. The baby comment, being emotional comment, and pulling cheeks was tooo adorable!)

LOL his winking and concern, again perfect. And Zoya remembering her childhood days, awww <3 I love how Zoya's idea of fun and relaxation is playing with little kids :D OMG, HERE COMES MR. KHAN.

Any other day, Ray and Zo take away the spotlight, but the rain romance was perfect. Damn tho, it was only a dream! :P BUT YOU DESCRIBED IT SO SO WELL. All da feels man. I needed this after today's emotionally difficult episode. Thank you! The rain romance wasn't their love or care which you have been showing for the past few days, it was simply their desire. How do you plan these things out!?! You showed us every color of their relationship in what, six chapers?!? I also found it interesting how in her dream she was in a sari and he was in casuals, Bol Na Halke Halke yoo! Plus he likes her in sarees, so she likes him in casuals? Interesting! (I love hsi three piece suits omg)

The Bol Na Halke Halke feels tho. Omg. The flashbacks were so beautifully incorporated.

Their laughs echoed back into their ears, a small smile played on her lips. Asad returned her smile; he admired her innocent like face, watching the rain drops glisten on her face as they slid down the side of her forehead caressing her cheek to her neck, down under her dress, feeling every part of her body.

I loved the first line omfg. And how innocence turned into desire, wow. Greeeat job!

Mai kya karoon?! You are killing me with feels! He told her she was perfect and that was the truth. Beautifully written dialogue. BEAUTIFUL!

You know two things I NEED when I find my Asad, a forehead kiss and the jacket thing. THIS HAS ALWAYS BEEN A PART OF MY IMAGINARY LOVE STORY LIKE THIS IS TOO CUTE. I LOVE STUFF LIKE THIS. Mashallah, this was just perfect. And Zoya's second talk to herself, truly amazing.

Alright, I have a little prediction. Ray wanted her to talk to her appi, appi calls about rishta. Why do I have the feeling this is part of Ray's plan? Why do I have a bigger feeling the rishta is Ray? Ray needs to make Asad realize, and he's already hinted his possession over Zoya (as her best friend) so why not? Plus appi can't be so inconsiderate to do something like this, SO SOON. Ray is being the villian-and this is the worst he can do. Bring it on!

Originally posted by: teddyyy

I have bad news :/ I'm going to Paki for my summer vacation and I won't be able to check up on this story too frequently. Therefore, my comments may be shorter and later. BUT I WILL READ IT NO WORRIES! Sorry again! Can you pm me the parts by any chance?

Originally posted by: MrMrsAsyaKhan

Can I like love you forever? *cries*
First of all, a massive hug from me beautiful, I do not know what to say to this comment. I'm literally in love with the beautiful comments you leave for me, I don't even think I deserve all that!
Yes, If I could I would dedicate all my work to you and it still won't be enough for the love and support you have given/shown me! I've always wanted to dedicate something to you, but always stopped myself thinking it wouldn't be enough! But, I'm glad I made you happy!
Yes, me loves Ray and their friendship! Always wanted a BFF like that, mine are so boring! Okiess, I'm glad I didn't give any wrong messages with him looking at the picture! Loool, so you don't ship Zoe and Rayhan? Awwwhh! Neither do I, but I love Ray, I know he's my creation but idkk I would love for something to cook between them!
I'm glad you liked the rain sequence despite it being a dream, I shouldn't have gotten everyone too excited! Hope I didn't disappoint! Zoya looks sexxy in a saree though, and this dance doesn't work without a saree, visual image ;) you know the bare skin touching and all broo! HAHAHAHA! But yes, I see how you're trying to look into the dream deeper ;) I seriously don't plan anything out, I just sit down and write, the only thing I had in mind was that there had to be a rain sequence and I dunno it just flowed from there, heck I don't even know what I wrote. I was daydreaming about his sexxy abs fam! LOOL! Yes, he wore his three piece suit in real, did i make it clear? and yess meee too! He looks dashing! *droools*

I can't take credit for the dialogue, it was from the bhang flashback I had to be honest! lmfaoo!

Aww samesss, I want my Asad to do that... and and, when I twist my ankle, he romances with me whilst trying to make it better! *sighs*
Predictions predictions... predictions! Me cannot reveal! ;) What if aapi just generally wanted Zoya to move on and settle down?

OMG sweetie, thank you very very much for your comment. It made my day, (no my week maybe months) when I read it. I will keep coming back and reading, I abs adore your comments beautiful. Thank you again, I really appreciate it! Much lovesss,

MWAH! sorry for the esssay back! :D

Originally posted by: MrMrsAsyaKhan

Last comment, sorry for my emotional outbreak... as you can see, I'm a really really really emotional person! Awww, lovely that's not bad news at all, you're going on holiday! First of all, have a blast enjoy yourself, you deserve it after those depressing exams! I'm well jell...

You know, as long as you read it and like it... I'm a happy bunny! That's all I want and nothing more to know that you enjoyed reading it... No need to say sorry, yes I can PM you, inbox you separately if that's what you want... I'm surprised you still want to read it on your vacations, that means a lot!

P.S. You'll laugh, but you know after reading your comments I've always wanted to PM you the parts separately to see if you liked it or not or if there was anything that needed to be improved. I don't speak Hindi or Urdu so thought I was writing nonsense dialogues!

Originally posted by: mochhug

Res damn! So close!

Once again you've left me in awe! I am inlove with the rain sequence. I was sad that it was a dream, ut I knew in the back of head that it couldn't be real. She's too hurt to just spontaneously have a romantic moment with him. But the way you described everythign, from her saree, to his proximity, to her singing and both their movements with each other. It was beautiful. And so surreal that I could imagine it as is the CV's aired it. Seriously my dear, you need to be a part of their creative team. I wish they'd take ideas from your stories. HOW CAN YOU SAY YOU"RE NOT A WRITER!? A writer is born with their imagination and their ability to write that imagination into words and have people imagine them is the very definition of a great writer. You are a GREAT WRITER.

I love how determined Asad is. He's so hell bent on getting her forgiveness that he won't leave a single stone unturned. And I was hoping that he'd walk up to her while she was daydreaming. Poor girl, no matter how hurt or angry she is, she can't deny her feelings for him. They're connected whether they're together or not, and your story clearly shows that.

Do you have a friend like Ray? Or this is pure imagination? I'm seriously in awe of how well he understands her and how much he wants to be there for her. How he wants her to laugh and stop herself from breaking down every night. It's sad that she needs that to be chirpy. But then she always was the kind to hold in her pain. And again you've shown that he understands that beautifully.

I just checked back to see how much I wrote and I realized it's the length of a book haha. Every time I'm commenting, I think.. hmm what can I say? I love it!? And then I go on rants and this comes out 😆

Anyhooo! Thanks for the PM and sorry for the LATE RES. But please please please update soon! 😃

Edited:

And as always I forgot something!

WHAT THE HELL IS AAPI THINKING !?!??!?!?!?!?!?!?!