Revised Asad's apology to Zoya. :)

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ZAK

@VenusFlyTrap

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Posted: 12 years ago

#21

Girll! Now That was a blast to read 👏

I'm all for the sappiness of Zoya's spirit of forgiving but who was to accept that without Six-Pack Drool worthy's honest apology! Way to go for highlighting the pivotal part the ph totally skipped!

Great to see an FF with a conscience 👍🏼😃

~VFT~

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Laila Banu

@Laila2009

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Posted: 12 years ago

#22

Honestly, it is just a repeat of what we saw on the show with what you think they are thinking...it's not your own version which I was hoping to see - how would you have liked to have seen them to do it.
That's how I read it...Sorry if this offends you but if people want feedback, then I am always honest about it...and sometimes I am afraid that does hurt.

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Asma Khan

@crazy4KASH_AR

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+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#23

Do u know how much I love you for this mindblowing OS?
I loved this apology of Asad a lot...
You have written it beautifully Siddhi.
ASYA's heart to heart conversations were really amazing.
Keep coming up with more such wonderful ideas dear.
Take care!

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: kandygrover
Great os:)

thank you😃

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: sophie420
Nice OS!
Liked the way the emotions were described.
Nicely written!

a hearty thanks😃

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: AsYa_fan
That was awesome you know I really love ur writing and ur os and ss and ffs. I really enjoy reading them😊😊

omg! thank you thank you thank you.😃

i just hope i keep writing good stuff for you then😉

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: RMamsa
Thank you SO much! specially for describing emotions our actors may not have projected clearly. I really liked how he kept turning back to mend things with her. Really wish it could have been a little longer but it was very well intertwined with the actual scene with creative inserts tipping the scale towards true remorse on Asad's side & Dignity on Zoya's. I really like your writing and am now going to go feast my eyes on the latest part of our regular FF by you!

A Huge thanks once again! xoxo!

thanks a lot. 😊

you don't know how impatiently i was waiting and waiting for you to read it and comment on it.

i was literally checking the comments again and again to see if you had commented. i know hieght of obsessiveness.😆

i really wanted you to like it since i posted it because of you. 😳

and i am happy that you liked it😃

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: VenusFlyTrap
Girll! Now That was a blast to read 👏

I'm all for the sappiness of Zoya's spirit of forgiving but who was to accept that without Six-Pack Drool worthy's honest apology! Way to go for highlighting the pivotal part the ph totally skipped!

Great to see an FF with a conscience 👍🏼😃

~VFT~

thank you😃

yes you are right. i mean i did like the original scene but it felt so incomplete with asad just saying a sorry. they should have lengthened the scene a bit instead of showing all ayaan's family plotting against each other.😡 that wold have made the scene far more acceptable.

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: Laila2009
Honestly, it is just a repeat of what we saw on the show with what you think they are thinking...it's not your own version which I was hoping to see - how would you have liked to have seen them to do it.
That's how I read it...Sorry if this offends you but if people want feedback, then I am always honest about it...and sometimes I am afraid that does hurt.

yes you are right laila.

i did mention before starting the story that it is entirely the same scene but with just some things added. and as i titled it, this is a revised scene not an alternate one.

i wrote this story after watching the actual scene but added a bit more of scenes and dialogues like asad actually walking back in the room rather than just walking away when zoya tells him to. and helping her get up after telling her to back of from his personal life.

the problem with writing an alternate scene was that i would have to start writing from the moment he slapped zoya and not after knowing that she was innocent. the remorse in my version would start right there but i cannot do that because from tomorrow for next 3 weeks my exams will be on and so even if i wrote it it would be posted very late.

so i just took their scene and made it more remorseful which the ph should have done.

anyways if you do want it then let me tell you that i had come up with a different apology from asad all together but decided to include it in my ff where he will hurt zoya but not go as extreme as slapping her. if you want i could pm you whenever i do write it but it will be along long time later.

anyways i do apprciate your honesty. don't worry i was not hurt because i already knew and had accepted and mentioned also that i have taken the same scene from the serial.😊

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soumya

@Ayuzawa

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: crazy4KASH_AR
Do u know how much I love you for this mindblowing OS?
I loved this apology of Asad a lot...
You have written it beautifully Siddhi.
ASYA's heart to heart conversations were really amazing.
Keep coming up with more such wonderful ideas dear.
Take care!

thanks a lot asma😃

felt so nice reading your comment.

of course i will keep writing more stuff on asya.

love asya❤️