OS: Oops! On the Beach? [16+] Note - Pg 19

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Posted: 12 years ago

#121

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blueflames

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Posted: 12 years ago

#122

not bad !!! alll the ooh n aah's were quite descriptive ☺️

although its a good one, but they werent that emotionally attached, they took a shortcut to ecstasy.

anyways good job. i love beaches. n beach romances are my favorites😃

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#123

Originally posted by: asyaforlife
OMG!!! Annie tum toh mere standards clothes ke jaise badal rahi ho😆 I said I'm in 11th grade. Hum bache kaise ho gaye😆 Kya kare books ko haath lagana padta hai warna I'm dead🤢
Laughing ka kota kal khatam ho gaya bas ab aur nahi warna mujhe sab pagal khane me shift kar denge🤣

Jeez! *biting my tongue* Sorry, sis! 😲 *sigh* Mera dimaag band ho gaya thha guttery thoughts ke wajah se! 🤪

Tu phir bhi mere liye bachchi hain!! XP

🤣 Yahaan humka koi piroblem-wa naahi!! Kyunki I make my mom also join in the fun, if she's sitting right beside me!! 🤣

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#124

Originally posted by: blueflames
not bad !!! alll the ooh n aah's were quite descriptive ☺️
although its a good one, but they werent that emotionally attached, they took a shortcut to ecstasy.

anyways good job. i love beaches. n beach romances are my favorites😃

Hahahaha... Thanks pal! It's not always necessary for them to be always emotionally attached before taking the step... Sometimes, people find themselves falling in love with each other, after they have done it. It's not so common to hear it all.. But there are possibilities.😳

I loved reading your comment! 😃 Thanks, blue!😎 Glad that you enjoyed it!

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#125

Originally posted by: SleepingBeauty.
☺️ << that is how i am after the update! Dude, how old are you? This OS was such an high alert wala OS. I am still blushing ☺️ You write sooo well! Keep writing stuffs like these LOLL you are awesome! 👍🏼

Thank you Sleeping B! Am 18..😳 Hehehhe...😆

I will try to write more. This genre is a bit tough to write, given that we have a strict rule to follow while writing about eroticism, in India-Forums.😃 But I'll try to be more subtle and better.

Thanks again!😳

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#126

Originally posted by: startruck
W-O-A-H! that was fan-freaking-tastic! *i bow down to you*
man it was just sooo sooo sooo damn hot! you really took my request seriously! 😉 and a badaaa wala hug especially for you! 🤗 🤗 🤗 ❤️
this scene made me swoon! 😳 😳

Woah!! *pulling you up and hugging you* 🤗 Gee, thanks a lot, Star!

Glad you enjoyed it so much!

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: -Fizzi-
Reserved. :D

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OMG Ann! I'm like so damn..umm..whatever! ☺️ 🤣 You seriously thought this part was not hot?! You are mad, woman! Finally they gave in to it man! I thought you might just drop a bomb on us by making them go back to their rooms. 🥱 Thank God you didn't! 😛 If I tell you to write another part for me will you? 😳 I know you will! You love me na? 😭 Hehe. Anyway, beautiful erotic part! Hope to see more of your writing :)

Love
-Fizz.

What are you so damn? 😳 *innocently smiling* Gee, stop shouting, girl!! *sticking a finger in my ears each*

🤣 Well, if I did make then go back to their rooms, then you would've got another part, just to fulfill your fantasies! 😎 Nah, bachcha! I can't write another part, because this was the last and final part of my first Asad-Zoya erotic OS! 😛 I love you, girl, but I won't be continuing it. 🤔 Now, please, no emotional blackmailing... I can't handle them and don't like them!

Thanks, Fizzi! :D⭐️

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Eternal1234

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Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#128

It was awesome loved it...great job keep writing more...i enjoy reading your work

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Fari

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Inactive

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Posted: 12 years ago

#129

Ok, I take my words back! You're NO kid!! 🤣

Even I couldn't write something as hot as that 😳 and I'm a bhuddi, you know... 😉

Zoya's past was sad! It made me sad for a while but as I continued reading it, I forgot all about it *blush blush* 😳

Awesome job done girl! Loved it! 🤗

And ooohhh! Thank youuu sooo veryyy muchhh for the dedication *hugs Annie tightly and refuses to let go* 😃

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PhoenixRadar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#130

Originally posted by: SmileyStar
Ok, I take my words back! You're NO kid!! 🤣

Even I couldn't write something as hot as that 😳 and I'm a bhuddi, you know... 😉

Zoya's past was sad! It made me sad for a while but as I continued reading it, I forgot all about it *blush blush* 😳

Awesome job done girl! Loved it! 🤗

And ooohhh! Thank youuu sooo veryyy muchhh for the dedication *hugs Annie tightly and refuses to let go* 😃

That's what am saying, girl! Never let go of me! Aakhir meri jaisi aur koi hain bhi nahi yahaan! *wiggling my eyebrows* 😉 😆

*giggling* Remember that you can't take your words back, even if you want to! 😈 🤣 *pinching your cheek*

Chal chal! Ek aur baar apne aap ko buddhi bola na, toh mujhse bura koi nahi hoga! I even refuse to call my beautiful grandmoms and great grandmoms old, and you're toh just 21 ( or 20? Jeez! My memory's gone for a toss, you know! 🤔)!!!!

I know! I guess, I shouldn't have added that past thingy! Think it was unnecessary! 🤔 🥺But... I just kept on typing as the idea came... 😳 *typey typey typey*

🤣 Achcha you almost forgot?? Maine toh samjha you may have forgotten it totally!! ☺️

Aww... you look so cute with that blush!!! 🤗 Hey just PM me how your prof pic looks like yaar! Tune toh bataya hi nahi!

Aww... It's my pleasure, Fari Pari!! And thank you so much for your lovely words!!!

P.S.: *whispering* Honest comment hi thha na? 😲 *waiting breathlessly*