SS : The 5:30 People -- part 7 --pg-40(24th December)

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Aaniya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#51

Abhay is truly nt modern his accent proves mistk of nature, fungi ROFL_Jeh recorded hr,i so wnted 2 strangle him,sch cheapstr_Abhay giv pia idea 2 tackle jeh,he makes pia stronger_kiss,they were almost der bt that crap cell more than abhay i wnt 2 break it

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Aaniya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#52

Tnx 4 pm dear.. :) its beyond superb awesome update.. I just admire Abhay & his convo with pia.. Come on abhay loves pia,his words & eyes proves it.. Pia has something to do with this supernatural world..?? So gripping story..Ur update is worth waiting..!!

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Aaniya

@EVIL_ANGEL

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Posted: 10 years ago

#53

NOOo... Hate cliffhangers...!! Cont. Soon plz :) :) :)

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.SmokeySilence.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#54

I just read both the parts and I find it;s an amazing concept. i just loved the concept of 5.30 people and the name. its pretty amazing.

is this your first writeup? or you regularly do? you are pretty good i must say.

I love Piyas sense of humor and Abhay offcourse. i would like to know more about how the concept 5.30 ppl came. do write about it if you can. and this concept has great scope of FF so if you can make it or a SS i suppose that can be amazing.

waiting for next part

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megha sharma

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Posted: 10 years ago

#55

awsum update

the story is fats paced but i loved the way abhay-pia relationship has progressed..it is not rushed . love pia here specially her humour & abhay's ancient style. their convo's were superb.

jeh is a jerk and i am glad pia taught him a good lesson but he got better of her in the end.

pia has accpeted abhay as vampire & friend again ..that was good and loved how abhay shared with her his past.

pia's cousin seems to know abhay but how is he also a supernatural? what is the secret of pia ? abhay should have told her that too earlier.

wonderful chapter

waiting for next part

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Manisha

@.Rhythm.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#56

Hello Ani!

Thanx 4 d pm.

It was an awesome update.👏 Loved Abhiya's convo.

That Amazon river thing was really funny.😆

That Jeh Khurana is such a jerk. How cud he blackmail Piya... 😡

So Abhay's fungi suggestion actually worked.😃

Who is this shiny green eyed person that was laughing at Abhay ?

What is this Prabal thing now? How does he know Abhay ?

Piya is dying... 😭 I hope that Misha is able to heip her.

After Piya is fine, the very 1st thing Abhay shud do is to kill Jeh brutally. 😈

I must say ... u r gud at mysteries.

Update soon . Wud wait 4 the next chapter.😊

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Chitra

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Posted: 10 years ago

#57

wow awesome update loved it
it's fabulous 👏ending left me doubtful 😕
may be piya is also related to supernaturals😲
but i know both abhiya love each other now ❤️

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bookworm-ALS--

@bookworm-ALS--

Stunner

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Posted: 10 years ago

#58

Liked it a lot. The second part I felt was a marked improvement over the first in terms of confidence and styling. you need to write more and i loved the ending. I like cliffhangers 😆

you are one of the few people I could actually respect as a writer. Please keep writing 😳

Edited by bookworm-ALS-- - 10 years ago

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Noor

@Abhiya-4ever

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Posted: 10 years ago

#59

Amazing updt n Thanks 4 pm..
Abhay & Piya bcm very fast frnds n i now she has accepted him as a Vamp

Luv Piya's sense of humour
N Piya fell for Abhay :-*

What is the secrer of Piya that Abhay wanna tell
Cont soon

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cuteariya

@cuteariya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#60

mind blowing update
loll pia dadi 😆
poor pia lost her parent 😭
god that jay jerk 😡
abhiya first meeting was lovely ❤️
that jerk jay still didn't leave chance to impress pia 😡
he sent marriage proposal at pia home 😡
abhay so want to kill him
OMG shocking revelation abhay is vampire 😲
still pia couldn't hate him
hell that jerk jay make MMS of pia disgusting pig 😡
yippee abhay gave her idea & its work 👏
but that jerk try to kill pia 😡
poor pia almost die but thank god abhay came on time
hope he cane save pia
pia was scared to die before letting abhay know abt her feeling to him
what abt this eclipse night? 😕
why abhay was waiting for pia & what he want to do with her? 😕
plz update soon

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