||Abhiya OS - Once In A Night||

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sanghita0000

@sanghita0000

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

awesome piece of writing...I love it...but somewhere I feel it incomplete...I wish u turn it into 3 shots...In the 2nd shot u can show a leap & then meeting of teenage piya & Abhay & their love at first sight...Piya trying to recognise him ...some faint image of Abhay & her childhood...then confrontation & truth of Abhay revealed...& in the last part , its urs wish how to end it - a happy ending or a sad ending...😊

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Meghana

@simply.meghana

Achiever

+ 10

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

This was amazing and sooo sweet
Keep writing or else I'll hunt you down 😆

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vivkriti

@vivkriti

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Great update yaar. Loved it.

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pia surve

@piaviviandsena

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

vry unique story! hehehe piya is only 6 yr old? bt vry beautiful!

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pia surve

@piaviviandsena

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

i think u should continue dis os wid one more part, where piya will b grown up girl.

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bookworm-ALS--

@bookworm-ALS--

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Nice one. Though I wish Piya was at least a teenager, it makes Abhay seem like a paedophilic. lol

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arwakantawala

@arwakantawala

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Awesome OS and waiting for the next part please update soon

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Ayesha

@-Aashu-

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Nice one-shot Shreya. You wrote it very well. 👏

How did you manage to write his point of view? Even, I am not able to give full point of view from single character. 😳

You know, I have wrote a weird kind of three-shots. It's complete but I don't feel like posting it. At times, I think that why I have written that. 😃

Anyway thanks for the PM, although I don't read much stuff on Abhiya still I read just because you sent me its link. But do write more for your loyal readers. 😛

All the best, Shreya! 👍🏼

Loads of love and take care, little buddy! 🤗

Edited by aashuu07 - 11 years ago