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Anj01

@Anj_01

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Nice CS

Interesting prologue. Was it pia in the car?

Continue soon

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Trishna

@trishnawaliya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

wow mysterious abhiya story, i love to read so when r u planning to update...

i deadly want to use my like button 4 dis interesting prologue but i cant as i am using mobile net and thus like button is not working... plz dont mind and update soon...

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tamoha(tora)

@..tora.tangled.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

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Indu

@Paint.It.BlacK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

res!
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Tora...🤗 thanks..n dear you did it! Yes..yes..you did!!! The opening is extremely engaging...thrilling...n breathtaking!🤗👍🏼 just the way it shud b!! Infact the effect was far more intense..than the prologue had suggestd!👏

first of all i loved abhay's dialogues.! Especially the way he calls her thief! And the way he Calls her desparate...and then the way he said "dnt you dare.." n "the nerve of the girl" when pia slappd him , was completely amazing...the way u described was fantastic.. superb!!! ⭐️choice of words...Abhay's dialogue delevarance here was 2 2 good! I mean the timing were just apt!..and the formation of sentences..pia n especially abhay's were just mindblowing!!⭐️

i lovd the forest part n every line of the chap!! Abhay sitting infrnt fire,luking at pia..noticing her bruises..then pia aquising hm..saying sorry..takn by hs handsum built..each n every scene was beautiful!!! 👏 and oh..yes the part where aftr saving her pia tries to free herslf n abhay tells her nt to by holding her..was the topmost moment of ths update!!! Simply marvellous!
So luks like pia has lost her parents n hence has a painful past whereas abhay doesnt let it show much bt hs past isnt any bettr. He lovd sum grl namd ananya i guess n i think she lied to hm.
and chand..well again here i feel there's much mre to hs character than just being plain villain! I feel there are reasns for what he is nw! Mayb i am wrng bt he definitly has sum mre to tel us! His story dsnt end nly wth woman trafficking or murdering haseena! Am already feeling the mysteriousness of the tale n ya suspence ofcourse!! Want to see hw u take dis story forward as its totally new and deals wth far greater n serious issues.
Plus ya one mre thing..i forgot to mention..that is the faint glint of the comic element tht i noticd.its quite well and justly used wthout hampering the romence of the situation! Rather i wud say,it gave it an additional superiority! Yes..Becoz though every genre has its own difficulties bt still mixing humour or comedy wthin a story, yet keeping its essence romantic isnt a joke! Its the most difficult thng infact, yet u pulled it brilliantly.!! Awesum!!👏
and the thing i most lovd here was pia's bold character u know...! here she is in a total new avatar n am very very much intrigued by dis pia!!

just one question nw, are u going to make it a satire?

And tora amar ki din shesh hoye elo? Eto mathay charachs jey...😆😛 Joking! On a serious note-thanks very much dear...it means a lot! you are one of the sweetest person n friend..to have..thanx..🤗
p.s. Plz cntinue asap..nw! Cnt wait to see hw their journey shapes..and hw they tackle chand,who at the moment seems hell bent on capturing pia..
thanks a lot for the pm n update quick. 😊

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Disha

@FantasyFan_8

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

oh my God, what a beast Chand is here.

but it would take lots of efforts for Abhay to realize this. But I hope Pia remains safe.

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Rose

@--Rose--

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#36

Omg jus read this story:-D
Wowww its Superb:-D:-D
Awesome Awesome Awesome<3<3<3

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Rose

@--Rose--

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#37

plz pm me too when u update:-):-)

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..juhi..

@..juhi..

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#38

chand is a...😲 OMG!

thank god piya successfully ran away from there...but well landed where in Abhay's car...😆 I actually liked that part very much😉

yaar what will happen now😲

and chand also killed haseena😲

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Kakoli

@MistiAbhiya

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#39

Ohhh god...My throat Dry what a horror through Pia her life little time...Abhay right in his place & Pia too but Chand like that never image...what made him like that...Continue asap🤗

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.SmokeySilence.

@.SmokeySilence.

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#40

First of all, congrats on the new SS 🥳 i love to read your work and Im sure will love this one too 😃

Oh god, what was Chand trying to do with Piya. 😲 seems like he is related to something like women trafficking and he wanted to do something real bad with her after drugging her. thank god she escaped and Abhay saved her. Hope he will keep her safe and protect her. And most importantly he would know what Chand is doing. n last line is even more horrifying. does that mean haseena came to know Chand's dirty secrets and he killed her? loved the first chapter. continue please 👏

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