New AbhIya FF:The Toxic Affair(pg68,Chpt10,Nov7)

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.SmokeySilence.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Thanks so much everyone for being with me 🤗 really sorry it wasnt possible for me to reply everyone individually this time. will do it next time for sure..

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Andromeda001
I ve always lost words how u describe d unsaid emotions in words. And this chapter deffo stands tall among ur bests! Thank you. i didn realize you guys would like it so much 😳

I loved how u r giving a gradual direction 2 AbhIya relationship, a development which is mutual n both of them r unaware of d way it s directed. They were soo spontaneous, as in a sense of completion wid each other n beautifully despite having away frm each other, sensing each other inner state of mind. I ve always felt among a rush of common ppl, similiar souls sense each other even from a distance n widout a word. This s how u wrote it! they both dont believe in relationships due to their wounded past and failed relationships in life so it will work here as well. they will be just customer and client and it will take some time to realize they are so much more than that.

I can understand d condition of Abhay, how Piya suffocatingly felt n left 2 console him is in confirmation wid wht i said above. I ve always said, I m a fan of all of ur works n each n every of ur ff is a league of its own, completely different. Bt BD n now this r something like out of d deepest cores of humanity, dark corners of humanity. Plz continue. thanks so much it means a lot to me. i always believe love doesnt limit its ground on good and bad and who said you cant love a bad person. and somehow it sorely comes to my work all the time. and i always try something different and im glad you guys love it. this one i want to make as book so my focus will be on this one from now on.

Ps: I know, no one knows more than u abt burden of work. I ve taken up a part time job along wid my research so i get very little time 4 here. I try my best 2 chk all PMs n come here daily. Bt I 4get how many Res i make n r yet 2 unres? I hope u will understand.

its okay but do showup. since i do as well doesnt matter how busy im 😆

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Yay!! I am first kinne tym baad...

Anyways...tanzie brilliant update

Loved each and every bit of it😊

Piya avoiding abhay...why??

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Posted: 11 years ago

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How ironically they have every luxury in life
still they are so unhappy. they had such wonderful family and they live in
different houses while she would die to
live in the same house with her family
which she can't. the world is such a
strange place. 👏 this line is simple yet so truthful. Loved it.👏

He didn't know how to show
his gratitude and Pia didn't ask
anything else to him. sometimes its
better not to question people about something which is hurting them and
one question could hurt even more. She
just asked, "will you be okay? I will
take leave now." another beauty! 👏 i dnt remember if i have said this before, that i immensely admire your style of writing.⭐️ I love the way they are so simple yet so appealing to the senses! ❤️ 😳

next i want to mention some lines that i couldnt leave nt mentioning. They state Abhay and his mental state so brilliantly!

Abhay didn't want to be alone but why
he would even ask her to stay? she was
nobody and she need not to stay here
but right now he was afraid of being
alone. On the other hand he knows he
has a lot on his plate to handle today and judging by everything he is about
to get his hands dirty. Media, his family,
his dads business so he has to be
strong. His lip twisted and he didn't
reply if he would be okay or not, "I will
go out too. I will have to deal too much today. Thanks again." 👏

Abhay had a lot to sort out today. He
cannot go to work today but whenever
he goes back he has to be ready for the
curious looks, the hisses and back biting
behind him. gossips people will now
talk about his family. Some will fake sympathize with him and those who
cannot stand him will be silently happy
at such public nonsense created around
his family. some will even come to him
and try to use this event as an
opportunity to impress him. he knows all these already and that's why he
knows even better he is not mentally
ready to handle the situation. And this too! Brilliant portrayal of Abhay. You have brought his inner mind so vivid and perfectly! Just fabulous!👏

but he couldn't complete and Abhay almost shouted, "what is the meaning
of she LIKED him mamu? she is my MOM
and i cant think of her lovestory
rationally. She didn't even bother to
tell me, her SON that she is going to get
married. she is still my dad's wife doesnt matter my dad is dead." AMAZING!! Each n every line in this para is simply brilliant! Of course a son couldnt listen about his mother's love story! Thats quite natural and expected. and the reason i admire it because you have pictured this subtle thing so magnificient and aptly.! This tiny nuances are extremely important for a story to have a mark of its own and that is how exactly it turns out to be here. And you deserve every credit for presenting those aspects soo immaculately. Bravo! 👏

as a reader i wnt say what haseena did was right. Neither i would say what she did was wrong. Because sometime somethings in life are beyond judgement. Everything always cnt be judged by right and wrong. Anyway coming back to this part , i just would like to say that i absolutely love how you explained haseena. Her thoughts and her words are completely well narrated. Gives us a believable picture of her.👏

honestly tanzie i dnt know which lines to mention and which to leave-because trust me i LOVE each and every line in the update and i dnt know which one to praise more. 😕 literally i am confused.😆But anyway here is one more that i couldnt help nt mentioning.--😳

Abhay couldn't hold himself any longer.
he punched the wall beside and
shouted, "Still woman you are blaming
me and everyone else for all the mess
you created. Fine I was too occupied in
my life, it was ALL MY FAULT. okay? fine but still if you want me believe and
understand you needed to move on
from my father so early with whom
you have spent 30 years and it took no
less than 4 years for you to move from
him when I still miss him than Im sorry mom maybe I'm just not that much
RATIONAL and indulgent. I can't
sympathize with you. and we cleared
your mess and saved my father
company. " he didn't even bid goodbye
and left the house. 👏 BRILLIANT.BRILLIANT ! I dnt knw if brilliant is the word that can rightly explain it...but ya thats the only word i can use right nw to express my feelings! I am in complete awe tanzie-really how masterfully have you brought the tangible aspects of a mother-son relationship! Especially Abhay.👏 Abhay of TTET was my favourite bt nw this Abhay tops the chart in everyway! This is the best picturisation of Abhay among all ur works i have read so far! Truly amazing!👏

he caressed her face and hugged
her and that moment Pia somewhere
deep inside her heart feared that this man is going to turn everything upside
down in her life and after tonight her
life is never going to be the same. but
she was ready to do anything to
distract him. She stroked his face and
whispered I will distract you from all the pain you have. I know a good way
of it and it always works. 👏 amazing amazing amazing!!👏 the manner you're dealing Abhay n Piya's relation here is simply fab! The fashion in which you're blending their story is just great. I can already see two Great characterisations in the making. 👏 beautiful! I love women to see strong headed and determined . And here though Piya is a eye candy bt her character is one of a strong girl and i admire it. I told this at the beginning and once again i want to say that this is the best characterisation of piya amongst all ur works! 👏
and as a reader i earnestly hope the strength and vivacity-two integral parts of her character remains the same till the very end.😳

how i wish i could quote the entire update and explain in detail..😳 bt time is short. :(
so summing up my comment i just want to say that am really curious to knw abt piya's past and why she became what she became. I hope to knw her story.😳

And about Mamu and his son i guess a big game is going behind and i hope when the blow comes Abhay can save their company and his mother, both.

At the end it was difficult for me to prevent myself nt feeeling for Abhay. My heart literally broke at the sight of his vulnerability! I so hope he is able to pull himself together again. And soon!

and there's nthng that i didnt like in this update as a reader. It is in everyway a brilliant piece of craft. ⭐️
please carry on tanzie. Thank you so much for the pm.🤗

and i knw i am horribly late and i'm extremely sorry for that. :-(
Its just that i cnt give a two or 3 line comment you knw what i mean. I need decent amount of time to state my thoughts. Thats the reason i always take time to unres in ur works. 😊 sorry again!

Will be waiting for the next part anxiously. Take care.🤗

Edited by Paint.It.BlacK. - 10 years ago