FF- Time And Again- Book 2- Book 3- Link added - Page 46

Originally posted by: Bleak_House

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Shreya you again did it!! With your amazing update..you literally bowled me!!! What a terrific update!!👏

well i shall go wth the update first!
Alina and sid! This part was written damn good shreya! Their equation is something..! Its interesting and equally enjoyable! I loved alina's dialogue where she said,she thot he had moving legs* that was amazing! And sid's reply,hs change of the topic and leaving..it all reminded me of SK! trust me i could see him..and his expressive face! So that was an awesuum part!!👏
bt i wonder what is alina's plan regarding sid! And yet she is effectd by him! I donno whether its a good or a bad thing bt their chemistry is surely intriguing!

Thanks Indu...I am really really happy you liked that...

Now now..abhay!
Abhay-haseena! Anther wonderful part! You have portrayd haseena so well! Just the way she was in the show! And their verbal exchange was too too good!! She could see what exactly was bothering hm han..and abhay ..well he will never change! He acts weirdly...says somethng..bt acts the opposite...and i guess somewhere he knws wat is hs prblm bt he is abhay! So he wnt accept and thats him! And that came out very well here! I loved haseena when she said him wats exactly hs prblm is! Bth mother-son are always wondrful to watch!😆 👏

I loved haseena in the show. i did try to keep her in character here😳

now the last-abhay pia!
Pia! She stood for abhay and gave jey a strong msg! I like ths pia,always fighting for her abhay!😳
and abhay he saw everythng..thankd pia and said she cn join whereevr she likes! Bt why exactly he said so all of a sudden?!! Does he want to tell her..or give her his message ths way?!! That he isnt a devil or sumthng that she has to be scared of?!! Hm..who knws bt interesting that is !!

EXACTLY!👏 This is why he did it...so she can be comfortable around him..he isnt blind, he can see Piya is avoiding him na😳

Bt the mst amazing part was when to hs questn pia said dsnt he knw why she did so and abhay's expression was of confusion!! This vamp..! Oh...!

Abhay is rather blind at times😆
And the drama-shreya u implented the play ..and ur way of rolling the entire scene
ene was just outstanding!! Really i dnt knw wat to say! You always amaze me!! Their exchange of roles..and the lines u had chosen..? They were just too perfct!! Evn aftr changing roles they suited them so well!! I mean i cnt explain..it was soo intense!! Reminded me so much of the magical romeo juliet scene bt mre than that this scene..well i could again visualise the awkardness..the tension..pia's expressn..abhay's impassive yet intense face!! Breathtaking dear!! ⭐️

I thought the exchanged lines would suit them better than the original...that's why I made them swap...and i am glad you noticed! You dont know how happy this made me😳
and ya the little bt important part where abhay takes up the paper,runs hs eyes ovr it n keeps it bck in less than a second* this portion says clearly hw fast n swift hs collective power is and thats wat adds xtra style and unprecedentd caritzma to his personality! Thats wat makes hm mre irresistble..!! His smartness and intellignce wth sum xtra memry powr tht cme handy wth the vampire avatar!!😉

All in one package you know😆
and dear in ths little portion the words u had chosen to xplain these were soo apt and wondrful! It hit the ryt place and creatd an impactd that it ought to!! You are so gifted! U knw where and how to use words!! Brilliant shreya brilliant!! 👏 ⭐️ and after such an awesum portrayal of abhay u feel unsure!! Good god shreya! You have caught the exact essence of hs character mre accurately! Far far n miles bettr than me! Trust me aftr reading bth ur updates i feel like a kid !! Wat am i even writing!! Nthng bt stupid!! Urs every words..the hints u keep lending..they are beauty! They are meaningful!!

OMG no...dont praise me this much😲
And now i like to clear ur unneccessary worries! Ok nw look-mm..see if today four or five ppl sit to write on harry potter..like suppose you,me,mansa..if we sit an write an essay on him..wat do u thnk the result wud be? Will it be same? Wil hs traits cme out in the exact same way in all of our pens? No definitly nt! It wil cum out diffrntly,like ofcourse the essence of hs character wil be intact bt u wil see that all 3 of us..we hav cum up wth importnt shads of hs behaviour/character,wat am tryng to say is..u wil point sum,mansa wil point sum and i ..mayb i wil point sumthng else..! So u see wat i mean! Likewise in portraying abhay,we all do it diffrntly becz as persns we are diffrnt and so is our thinking way..our way of projection..! That is why the image tht cums up has their own distinctive marks yet wth the essence intact!

Hmm...i agree. We would probably focus on different traits of Harry and mandy would focus most on the stubborn-ness followed by guilt😆 you know what? We should do this! Pm mandy please😃

Shreya u are an avid reader so u already knw..that a work is a reflectn of the writer's own mind. So every piece undoubtedly carries the reflctn of its creators and that is the proof of their individuality!! It is the style,the signature that makes hm or her diffrnt frm the other writers!! And shreya the style u apply..the intellignt of twisting n turning events, u dnt knw i guess bt in literature its a gift! Very rare..gift that is..beleve me! Am nt saying ths to pacify u or anythng bt ur way of xplaining a particular scene is intelligent n beautiful and u knw why? Becz it requires the reader to take part actively and make their imaginatn n thoughts run to grasp the whole thing..the real beauty that is behind it! U see wat i mean? U want ur readers to take part!

I do I really want my readers to enjoy the ride but dunno, I guess i somehow son't get the message across at times...so its sorta disconnected..but i am very happy with you😉

The way u portray is wrappd wth a veil..it is therefore the readers task to knw it and unveil the whole thing and whch if done unfolds a whole new world..a new way of looking at thngs..the thngs that u are indicatng..and thats the real fun!! Becz if a writers writing says it all too clearly then wnt it be too boring?!! Then for wat we hav imaginative powers for?? Or reasoning?? Isnt it? So u see why and how ur works are brilliant?!! And ths is just the beginning! Let sum few mnths n years pass and wth ur maturity u wil get hold of the unexplord part that is their..in u! Hidden for nw bt wil cum out wth xperience! It happns wth all of us! Its inevitable! And it wil b the same for u! So dear keep ur worries aside an indulge in the brilliant creations that u always amaze us wth!😉 i guess i have writtn too much! Eh? Havnt i? Sorry! bt had to do it to mak ur head clear!😆 😛 ok nw ths is it! keep writing!!🤗

Phew what a comment. yes it was long but I really loved it. and of course i hope to improve in a few years😆 baap re. GOing to read again...Love ya❤️