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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: bellaaa

superb update romi and rosh
amazing parts of abiya scenes too gud
abhay is so broken and even try to rude with piya hurt hmself too
poor piya after so much sufered she also bearing this
awwabhay ignore piya
and love the scene when piya try to make food for abhay and sadess when abhay refuse to look back at piya and even insulted varun
like varun alot so sweet brother yar
now who was that vikram
thats seem fishy
cont soon

Thank you soo much wifey 🤗miss u !
Glad u liked it 😳
Yeah abhay and piya both are suffering equally
Gals u loved it , abhay did it for there own good 😳
Varun is toh my fav 😆
U will knwi soon 😉 it is fishy 😆
We will conti soon 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
Okay , just add romi in friend list and like the 1 st page 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: luckdiya

so twist in d tale.. Vikram a nw entry
piya is hurt due 2 abhy's behaviour.. Bt v cnt blame him he is suffering 2
tara & varun nok jhok ws nice
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Yep , vikram is grey guy for sure 😉
Exactly both are suffering equally 😳 , glad u liked it 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
Chapter 7
part a(written by Roshni aka Mohit-deewani)
Well the cyclone , tsunami , earthquake watever u call had arrived the door of raichands , vikram mallik ! Abhay was completely in anger as well afflicted by this , actually he was afflicted since he came back to home , he had lost the faith in god , he always thought why god did this to him why him ? he hadn't done any such bad then why such severe punishment to him ? and the worst of all why piya ? his bestfriend , his love his wife and his life , why she had to suffer , she was absolutely fault less but because of him she is suffering , abhay cant even see a tear in her eyes unless they are tears of happiness but here these tears of pain , sadness disappointment and shock and its reason is him only him , abhay's life was in total mess , vikrams arrival was like a cherry on top and also tat abhay hated vikram from core since the first time he met him ! a ruthless , selfish and a power hungry animal who has came to snatch away the little bit remaining peace of his home tats what abhay thought of him !

Abhay : why the hell are you here ?
Vikram with a contempt : bad manners raichand ! Oops I mean my cousin . I m guest at your house , u should invite me , take me to a tour of your house and ( raising his eyebrows ) Introduce me to your heavenly beautiful , lovely , hot and amazingly sexy wife piya
Abhay pulling vikrams collar : SHUT UP ! Don't u ever take her name , or else u dont know how bad i can get , so just stay away from her got tat ?
Vikram widening his eyes : ahhh challenging me u silly little boy but just chill , I won't look at her with buri nazar ! She is my bhabhiji afterall
Abhay with pure disgust : why are you here vikram ? Just come to the point will u ?
Vikram : well , the one and only haseena..aa...a had called you if u remember but the prince abhay didnt shown up , toh sakshaat the ultimate power had to come to pick u up !
Abhay (with a fake surprise ): u and came to pick me up ? Naaa kuch toh baat hai !
Vikram pouting : bhalai ka toh zamana ho nahi raha
Abhay shouting : I will come tomorrow morning , now get lost !
Vikram : awwaz nicche okay little guy , now let me meet my Bhabhi ji ! ( with a smirk) wanna do lots of baatien with her u know
Abhay : vikram just go before I lose my patience
Vikram : abhay are you doc tat u will lose patients !
Abhay : not a doctor , but will soon become a bodyguard to protect my wife , so get out of its better u get out of my house !
Vikram : chill out abhay /cousin/ doc / bodyguard / ummm boldu aur Kya ?
Abhay : tats it ( holding his hands and taking him to his car ) GO !!
Vikram : fine fine , m leaving kabhi na kabhi toh wapas aunga na , I have to meet my bhabhiji afterall and tat brother of yours too , Kya naam tha , ummm tarun , sarun , narun , karun , ahhh Marun right ?
Abhay : it's Varun and now go , dare u come here again and just one warning never ever try to meet my family !
Vikram ( with a firmness in his voice) : ahhh vikram mallik never take warning , take tat from me ! Bye then jaaneman or I should say jaanu dushman , have safe time !

Vikram finally went away in his car leaving abhay in relief but yet with a new tension , the intention behind vikram to come here , as much as abhay knows vikram , he wouldn't get up taking even a blanket for himself ,he was that kind person who never does anything for someone else and still he was here just to give him a reminder tat he had to come to oberoi mansion for haseena and chand were calling him , he could have done that even by calling him , strange !
Abhay thought to think of it later as of now he is relieved , Abhay went inside the house unknown to the fact , tat another round of head ace was waiting for him . Piya ! Piya who was indeed listening to all this behind the door and was ready with a round of questionnaire for abhay . As abhay entered the house the house , he headed towards the stairs but before he would go piya called him from behind .
Piya : who is this vikram ?
Abhay : uuughhh should hav expected this !
Piya : abhay kaun tha woh ? And ab yeh haseena kaun hai ? And why do u hav to go to meet them ? And why where you both fighting ? yeh sab kya raha hai abhay , itni saari confusion kyu hai abhay ? And ...
Abhay trying to divert the topic : bas bas bas piya , already tumhara dever abhi tak nahi aya , will u please call him and ha for kind information vikram is a client , a mad client and he was calling for a Meeting tomorrow morning .
Piya : I don't believe you abhay !
Abhay : and I don't care piya all I care right now is why the hell Varun isn't home yet , got it ?
Piya : Varun just called up , he staying over at his friends house now will you please take teh pain of telling the truth
Abhay : I told the truth , maana na maana tumhare Upar , any ways , I am tired ( yawning ) goodnight and ha darwasa bandh kar dena please .

Saying that abhay went upstairs leaving piya there confused and angry . She so wanted the answes right now but she didn't wanted it for herself she wanted it for abhay , she could see how stressed her abhay was these days , she wanted those answers for him only and she will bring her husbands life back on track anyhow , she will solve the problems no matter wat !

MORNING

Abhay early morning left for the office tats wat abhay told to piya though tats the other thing tat piya didn't believed it , abhay left for the oberoi mansion , hoping to leave from there as soon as possible . Abhay rang the door bell of the big magnificent house which stood very far city . The house was big enough for a 3 big families to live in though only 5 people lived in , there were huge windows in wall and marvellous paintings studded on wall , everything was classic in the house including the people living in it .
The door was opened by kabir , kabir rathod who gave a big smile on seeing abhay .
Kabir : hey bro ! Good to see , how are you ?
Abhay smiled back : I am good ,
Kabir : so how's piya ? she is ok ? Did u told them the truth ?
Abhay : nahi yaar , couldn't even tell it to Varun , piya toh door ki baat hai

Just then a man came out from room on upstairs , it was siddharth ,Siddharth oberoi , son of chand and haseena oberoi who was currently standing on door , and just out from a shower wearing a bathrobe and water dripping from his hair looking smokin hot !
Sid : who on door , at this hour ?
Abhay : it's me Sid !
Sid hugely disappointed : damn ! Why the hell are you back raichand ? Can't u just stay there at your home rather than keep putting your nose in the house
Abhay : well even i don't wish to come in this house of yours , I m called here if it would be in my choice I wouldn't even step here.
Sid coming downstairs : so Batao na , Kya hua wat were the hysterical reaction of your wife and brother ?
Abhay : to your utter disappointment , I didn't told them
Sid : good for them , so for how much time do I hav to jehlofy you ?
Abhay : just for an hour Sid
Sid : ahhh tats 3600 seconds !
Abhay : believe as much u don't want me to stay here more than that I don't want to stay here
Sid going back to his room : watever , waise tumhari wife toh reserved hai soo tumhari ek saali bhi hai right ? Uska number Milega ? Bore ho chuka un boring purani waliyo se and u know house is far from city , so can't get new one easily , waise tumhari saali ka naam Kya tha ?
Abhay : just shut up Sid !
Sid : and just get out raichand
Saying that he slammed the door .
Abhay : why does he hate me soo much ?
Kabir : well tats what I m trying to figure out from long . Oh well uncle and aunty are waiting for you upstairs .

Abhay went upstairs to chand and haseenas room who were sitting near a fire . Chand was talking on phone while haseena was reading a book , as soon as haseena saw abhay she gave him a warmn smile .
Haseena : hello abhay
Abhay : hi aunty .
Chand : abhay hope u didn't had any problem these few days , so when is your plan to shift here forever ?
Abhay's face fell immediately : it will take time , is it nesscary for me to come
Chand : no abhay , it isn't but jitni jaldi tum aao utna Accha , it will be easy for you and still u aren't given proper training and waise bhi u will hav to come back for the proper professional training which will help u much to discover yourself and your powers .
Abhay : I understand but was the important thing u called me for .
Haseena : I was about to call u for not to come , actually supremes where to Come today but it got delayed , they will come this Sunday and (sign ) will solve these questions
Abhay : okay I will leave now , will come on this Sunday .

While leaving he saw vikram was sitting in living room on a big leather armchair beside a huge fireplace and vikram was whistling While rolling his eyes ? Abhay decided to ignore him and was about to leave when vikram spoke up
Vikram : take care of my Bhabhiji !
Abhay under his breath : bast***
Vikram : I heard tat little boy .
Abhay : good for you
Saying that abhay went from there to his office .
Scroll down for next part...

Edited by Rmuk - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Part b

(written by Romita aka Rmuk)

Raichand industry

The magnificent industry that was situated just in the western side of the Dehradhun main town, named as Raichand industry belonged to none other than the Raichands or to be exact Abhay Raichand. It was one of the massive and famous industry known for its finest quality of products all over India.

As soon as one takes a close view of the whole office anyone with not even a single doubt will get the idea of the owner, the interior are fully made of foreign architectures, British art, classy, sign of perfection everywhere, and more over arranged perfectly thus it can be clearly stated that the person himself likes perfection!!!

Inside the magnificent office just few meters away from the reception stood an elegant cabin, decorated with stylish interiors, neat and tidy white marble floor, spotless white walls and a rag full of files and some necessary basic things were there, that's it, he likes simplicity but classy!!!!

Abhay Raichand the owner of this huge industry, was now just sitting quietly, lost in his own chain of thoughts, planning something, thinking about the past events, when suddenly he felt or to be exact visualized something, he closed his eyes and concentrated only to get sure if he was right, and yes he was right, she was coming, yes he could feel her around just few meters away from his office building.

Abhay-: (in his own mind) damn this Piya why she is coming here now? For god sake, can she just listen to me and sit back at home, I don't want to hurt her every now and then but Piya u are making everything difficult for me, why Piya? Why u always have to interfere in every thing? Holy crap, I have to do something now but what? yes I know what to do, yes this is the only way left to make u stay away from me, I am sorry Piya again I have to hurt u but I have to, I can't let u know my truth now, what I am now, I want u to hate me Piya but I know it won't be so easy, I have to hurt u again and again so that u yourself leave me and move ahead in ur life!!!!

A drop of tear rolled down his eyes just by the mere thought of his Piya hating him, loathing him, by only thinking she will leave him forever, but there is no other way, no this was not the time to think for himself he have to endure this pain alone, he can never be that selfish. He have to let Piya leave him though this is going to break his heart apart into zillions of pieces which can never be mended again, but atleast Piya will be happy, living her perfect life and that's what he wants, he wiped off his tear that he had shed just now , reminding him of his reality, again making him realize that he is not suppose to feel anything, any emotion. He immediately picked up the receiver and ordered someone to come into his cabin within two minutes and composed himself properly ready to endure the same pain of hurting his Piya again!!!

Mount college

The canteen of the mount college was as usual noisy, some are busy eating, while some busy in chatting, passing the hot new gossips around, while some guys are busy flirting and impressing their own crushes, some admiring their own secret crushes and not to ignore some bimbos, who were busy showing off their new accessories, dress, shoes, hair style, make up or whatever they have got new. In the middle of all this hustle bustle, on the left most corner table was sitting a girl and a boy, talking in their normal low voices rather than shouting or chatting as usual, it seems like they were talking about something serious, as soon as the girl moved her face little bit we get the clear view of both they are none other than Varun Raichand and Tara Dobriyal!!!!

Varun-: (with a small smile) Tara, I called u up today morning and asked to meet me in canteen actually have something to talk about and it's important.

Tara-: (worried) Varun u are sounding tensed, is everything alright? I mean di is alright na?

Varun-: (tensed) no Tara everything is not alright and that's what I wanted to talk about, something is not right u know, I mean'

Tara interrupted before Varun could complete,

Tara-: (in a bit worried tone) hold on Varun, I am getting it, something is wrong between di and jiju, right? I knew it.

Varun gave a confused look towards Tara and she understood, so decided to explain further,

Tara-: (impatiently) Varun, actually yesterday night di was a bit upset I think, I called her up yesterday night as I do daily, but she didn't even talked properly with me which she never does, her tone was a bit different I am sure she was upset and it's related with jiju cause I know my di she becomes only upset like this if there is any fight or something is wrong between her and jiju, tell me the truth Varun, jiju is alright na?

Varun-: (in a worried tone) Tara, that's the reason why I called u here, I don't know Tara what is wrong with bhai but it seems he is not in his usual self, u know his behaviour has changed a lot, like he is some other person, yesterday only he scolded me just for a simple reason and it was not his usual friendly one it was like out of frustration, so unlike him, he never behaved with me like that, and even with bhabhi he is behaving strange, bhabhi cooked for him yesterday but he refused to eat and even behaved rudely with her, I am worried for bhai now Tara, I think we must do something.

Tara-: (in a bit calm tone now) Varun, I think we should try to find out what's wrong with jiju, we have to think of some ways, I can't see my di or jiju anyone upset, we have to remain calm and composed now, we have to support them, ok stop being panicky and try to find out why is jiju behaving like that, I think some business pressure or something like that could be the reason.

Varun-: (a bit relaxed now) I know tara and yes I will try to keep myself calm now onwards, but I need ur help in all these, I can't do everything alone, I will try my best, but still I need ur support, u are getting me right?

Tara-: (smiling) yes, Varun I got u and don't worry, I will help u in everything and no matter what I will always be with u, as a support system for u ok, now I think we must leave for our classes, we are getting late and meet me after third period, we need to discuss more on this.

Varun-: (showing his normal breathtaking smile) thank u chashmish, u made me feel good again, u are great, ok will meet u after third period then.

Tara gave an assured smile and stood up, she was about to leave but before that Varun held her wrist and with lots of excitement and hugged Tara making both of them feel something different, some strange kind of feelings, specially Tara who couldn't help but to blush with this act of Varun's while Varun freed her from his hug and kissed her cheeks lightly, making Tara gasp in shock and Varun just gave a wink and left from their smiling to himself, while both of them were unaware of the fact that someone was watching them, listening to their talks, a evil smirk passed across his lips which clearly reached up to his eyes thus turning it's shade more dark now!!!

Raichand Industries

As soon as Piya entered in the office she was greeted by a smiling receptionist and she too returned that smile back. The receptionist told her that Abhay is in his cabin only, he had no meetings today which made Piya feel bad somewhere, though she knew very well that Abhay was lying about the meeting yesterday but still she wanted to make sure for once and moreover she wanted to meet Abhay, she wanted to talk to her, she wanted to get back to those past days again when they used to work together, spend some moments together, she still somewhere deep inside her heart had hope that one day or the another Abhay will be back to his old self again.

The sound of her mobile beeping showing that she had received a text message brought Piya back to her reality, she checked her cell and saw that she had received a text message from Abhay, a small smile crept on her face, she was feeling a sudden kind of excitement building in her, she couldn't help but to stare at the name displayed on her blackberry, she quickly opened the message to see what text it had, she got shocked seeing that it was written,

'Piya, I am busy in a meeting and I am outside dehradhun, I will reach home late'

Piya couldn't help but to read the text for two or three times, she was both hurt and confused, hurt because Abhay again lied to her and confused as to why he lied. Piya was about to turn back and go but then a sudden thought stopped her, what is Abhay hiding? Why he lied? Her heart said to her may be he was busy in something, or in some work and was avoiding any sort of disturbance and she should trust him, but her mind was speaking something else, trust is good but blind trust is not good, she must for once go and check.

At last her mind won and after confirming for one more time from the receptionist that Abhay was in his cabin, she went away straight towards Abhay's cabin. She stood before the large glass door infront of Abhay's cabin, she was feeling a bit hesitated to open it but no she have to do it, for her assurance atleast. As soon as she turned the knob and entered the cabin she was shocked to see a Abhay was holding a girl close to him, very close, it was like they were kissing almost, the girl was playing with Abhay's hair and Abhay was caressing that girl's bare back as she was wearing a backless top.

Piya went numb for sometime, what was she seeing? Is it reality? Her Abhay was kissing some other girl? No, this can't be, is this the reason behind Abhay's change behavior? But Abhay loved her right, then? No she won't let him get away so easily, she will confront him, she needs an answer, yes right she will.

Piya-: (gathering all her strength, composed herself and said in top of her voice) Abhay Raichand!!!!!

Abhay who still now was doing drama of not noticing Piya now looked at her fake shocked.

Abhay-: (angrily) Piya, what are u doing here? U were supposed to be at home right? I said you that I will come late today but still u came here to clear ur doubts right? To keep an eye on me right?

Piya-: (with the same angry tone) Abhay, enough is enough, I thought may be u were tensed cause of some reason and wanted to talk to u and solve away issues, but here what I am seeing? My husband is kissing some other girl? And now instead of accepting ur fault, u are shouting on me? Abhay, I never thought u could do something like that, I though no matter what u love me and will always do, but here, I am feeling disgusting right now, why Abhay? Why? Why are u doing all these? Why are u hurting me in such a way Abhay? Tell me, are u angry with me? Have I done something wrong? Tell me abhay, punish me but don't betray me'

Before she could had spoken more angry tears spilled out her eyes and her voice became choked, she couldn't help but to cry badly and without even giving a second glance at Abhay, she ran away from their straight, sobbing badly leaving a angry, hurt, devastated, seething, completely broken Abhay behind !!!!

The girl standing behind Abhay was about to say something but before that Abhay gave her a stern look from which she clearly understood she needs to leave now, but still with little courage she tried to say,

The girl-: sir'

Abhay didn't let her complete and snapped back,

Abhay-: (frustrated) get lost from here, u have done ur work, get back to ur secretary job now, u will get ur extra pay for this in ur desk before u go back home, now don't come here and don't let anyone come in without asking me, otherwise ur job will be over, get that set in ur mind, leave and yea remember none should know about what happened just now!!!

Tanushree aka Abhay's new secretary didn't argue back or looked back once she just nodded and hurriedly went away from their. Abhay closed the door and again few drops of tears rolled down her eyes, though his face was now devoid of any emotion but still his eyes reflected pain, he felt like killing himself million times but he knew this also he can't do, he was helpless before his fate, he hated himself for doing this to Piya, for hurting her but only he knew that it hurts him more than anything else just seeing a small drop of tears in Piya's eyes, and now he was the reason behind her tears, he was the reason behind her pain, he himself don't have words to explain his state now, but he was doing all these for Piya's sake right? Yes, she will suffer now but least this suffering will create hatred in her heart for him and at last she will move on and that's what he wants. Abhay looked through the office window and their he saw Piya sobbing badly but before their eyes could have met, Abhay hided behind the curtains and Piya just got into her car and drove away while Abhay just kept staring at the white Mercedes that vanished far away in front of his eyes!!!

Afternoon

Raichand mansion

Piya was packing some of her belongings and stuffs in a small suitcase, tears were still there in her eyes, she packed up few clothes and some important necessary belongings and decided to leave the house forever, she won't stay here for a single minute, she left a letter behind for Varun telling him not to worry about her, she will be safe, and left from their quietly with a heavy heart, her heart was still saying her to stay back but her mind, her ego was telling her to leave and that's what she will do, her vision was still blurred cause of excessive tears but she wiped them up and took the car keys and headed away straight!!!!

PS-: So, here is the next part, really sorry for keeping u all waiting for so long. Hope u all will like it, we tried to do our best but don't know how it turned out, hopefully not boring or anything, if u all like it press the like button and do comment please, criticism is always welcome. It feels good actually not good, awesome, great to read all ur precious comments that help us to think that yes our work is loved by u all!!! 😃

Ignore the mistakes please love u all
From Romi and Rosh!!!😳
Edited by Rmuk - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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god😲what is all this...i m feeling so bad for pia and abhay😭
but in my opinion..abhay ko pia ko sab kuch bata dena chahiye...
this vikram😡😡 how dare he😡
plz sab jaldi se thik kar do...!😭
continue soon...😳
Edited by -juhi-lily- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
wow great story plz update soon
i feel sorry for pia and abhay
thanks for the pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
lovely
awosome
fabulous update
eagerly w8ng for next part
plz try to continu soon
thanks for pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
Aw i feel bad for abhiya. So Piya left... Its upto Varun n Tara to reunite them i guess?
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Posted: 12 years ago
Awesum update.o.m.g abhiya in so much pain.hope everythng becum alryt soon.

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